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I hated every minute of training, but I said, 'Don't quit. Suffer now and live the rest of your life as a champion.' -Muhammad Ali.


It has been a few months since Dinky Doo Hooves joined the Cutie Mark Crusaders, with Sweetie Belle, Scootaloo, and Applebloom still not having their cutie marks. They are still Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon's top ponies to tease about not having their cutie marks, yet. But that soon going to change when the four little fillies have a special case of love-bug from one of Cupid's arrows.

As things are going to be chaotic when the fillies realize that they have crushes on the three colts by the name of Pipsqueak, Rumble, and the total pony gamer, Button Mash. How will this go down with only four fillies and three young colts with very very different personalities? But that only means one little filly of the group is going to be heartbroken. But who will be the heartbroken filly of the Cmc?

Will it be Sweetie Belle, Scootaloo, Applebloom, or the new Cmc member, Dinky? Will the Cmc break apart due to their cases of love? Or will their Friendships just break apart into tiny pieces, over three little colts?

How will this turn out with the Cmc fillies doing whatever it takes to win over the three colts of their dreams?

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Comments ( 21 )

There really oughta be a Button Mash character tag, given how many fics there are with him in it.

Also, if there's possible PipxApplebloom, you will have all my likes. Even if there's not, we still cool. :-)

"Their talents are being untalented at nothing, and that includes, LIFE!" Diamond Tiara, Silver Spoon and the fillies that were behind them, laughed and pointed at the Cmc.

This is a double negative, so DT and SS are actually giving the cmc a compliment. If you untalented at nothing, then you are talented at everything

Good story anyway.

Me being a Grammar Nazi, :rainbowwild:

After a few minutes, after Sweetie Belle explained to Button Mash, why Scootaloo was tagging along on their annual gaming session.

They only have a gaming session once per year?

"Minecraft is a game where you dig (mine) and build (craft) different kinds of 3D blocks within a large world of varying terrains and habitats to explore.

This is the only time in this chapter it is referred to as Minecraft, and not Ponycraft

"That munch, better."

Shouldn't it be "that's much better."

We the two foals finally made it to the Whooves residence's cottage,

Is this supposed to be in first person, and you should say Whooves family's cottage or Whooves' cottage, the way you wrote is awkward. Residence implies house and does not need another word for house after it.

"So you must be that colt, Pipsqueak? That my little niece has been talking about the past week, about you coming over to the Whooves' cottage for a sleepover."

Is that really a question, and that sentence doesn't flow right, it should be "So you must be that colt, Pipsqueak, that my little niece has been talking about the past week, about you coming over to the our cottage for a sleepover."

With the young adult pegasus stallion, having his whole face, covered with cherry apple pie crumbs. Rumble shook his head at his brother in embarrassment, with a little earth-pony filly having her eyes, locked on him. Applejack looked over at her little sister, noticing the filly, haven't even took a bite out of her cherry apple pie.

The commas should replace the first period, and it should be hadn't, not haven't, and I'll let it slide with the accent, but it should be taken instead of took.

"What with ya, Applebloom?"

should be "what's with ya Applebloom?" no comma, and what's or what is, not what by itself.

"I'm just not hungry, that all!"

should be that's all, that all implies a question mark as in "that all you wanted to talk about".

Pisqueak flatten his ears, as the colt was now using the puppy dog look.

Should be, flattened his ears, flatten usually implies someone telling you to do it.

Alright. But when my father wakes up and goes in my room to see me and you in the same bed, I'm blaming you for all of this.

Alright, but

There are more mistakes, but I got tired of pointing them out. Sorry if this offends you or if I was wrong on any of my grammar.

ponycraft 2 seconds later know called minecraft me: ._.

also Rumbaloo, and Button Belle are best cmc ships

Can you do a fight between Dinky and Applebloom? Pwease


It doesn't offend me at all!
It was much, helped!

Comment posted by Rainboom H Harmonia deleted Jan 22nd, 2015

I can help with proofreading, but either way I'm gonna post mistakes I see in the comments.

P.S. you didn't use three of my corrections, did you miss, forget, or not get around to them?

One more correction :derpyderp2:

Class is dismiss! Have a good day, everypony

should be class is dismissed

I thrive on ButtonBelle. It must be so.
also, Sweeble is decent. Pipy is nice, Scoot Mash is unbearable, I don't really like Sweetie Squeak...
What I would do is this
Sweetie Belle x Button Mash
Scootaloo x Rumble
Apple Bloom x Bitten Dust (insert Yandere joke here)
Dinky x Pipsqueak

Excuse me good sir, may I have some more??? MOAAARRRRR!!!!!:flutterrage:

button belle
pipsqueak and dinky

5481987 please tell me its not applebloom and rumble please please PLEASE

5941505 I agree with everything you commented, but I thrive on Rumbloo. And SoarinDash. And ButtonBelle. Okay, I agree with everything.

Are you going to continue this?

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