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Brass Polish


Draws the line at the end of Season 7.

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Scootaloo can’t help but question Babs Seed’s decision to spend a night with her rather than Sweetie Belle.

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BABE, GET OVER HERE!

Y-yeah Babs?

They made a story about us.

Is it a romance story?

No, but it's about us having a sleepover. I read it and it's really good!

*looks at cover art* OMIGOSH we look SO cute together!

I know. *nuzzles* I love you Scoots

I love you too, Seedie. *kisses cheek*

Comment posted by Brass Polish deleted Dec 13th, 2014
Comment posted by Manaphy deleted Mar 20th, 2016

I don't understand why everyone seems to wish the worst upon Scootaloo.

Neither do I. I love Scootaloo, she's awesome!

VGI

Sweet start.

Easy read, easy to imagine scenes. Simple premise.

VGI

They wish the worse out of Scootaloo?

I don't know about that, but she was my first serious, not OC, MLP-related art inspiration.

This story is sweet. Sweet and short. Thumbs upped and shelving.

Possible errors and corrections:

1. Scootaloo was her houseguest had become utterly depressed.
- Uh...something's not right here. Maybe, "Scootaloo's houseguest..."

2. “Nose burp,” he muttered.
- I know Bab's and Scoots are tomboyish but...


Sweet lessons that are just like in the shows:
1.
“No worries,” Babs Seed smiled. “I had a good time staying with Scootaloo.”
“You did?!” Scootaloo spluttered.
“Well, yeah,” Babs Seed said, a surprised expression on her face. “It was fun.”
“How was it fun?” demanded Scootaloo. “You were miserable.”
“Miserable?!” Babs repeated. “No I wasn’t. Yeah, I was talking about something that bugged the heck outta me, but I did tell you I needed to talk to someone about it, didn’t I?”
“Yeah, but I couldn’t do anything about it,” Scootaloo frowned.
“You didn’t have to do anything,” insisted Babs Seed. “You were there. That’s all I needed.”
- Awesome punchline-lesson! Simple, straight to the point, and utterly understandable. Just like in the shows.

2.
“Are ya still having bully problems, Babs?” asked Apple Bloom.
“Sorta,” Babs Seed shrugged. “But it ain’t too bad now. I’ve told my big sister about it a while ago. There ain’t an awful lot she can do about it, but at least everypony knows about my problems.”

- Way to add some realism to this bullying thing people go through. Many times, just speaking out about being bullied will not solve the problem completely. But at least, everyone knows about it, and you don't have to suffer in secret. Plus, the bully's reputation will be negatively affected too.

This story is really cute! I love both scootaloo babs a lot so I really enjoyed this short story.

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