Curiosity get 'piqued' not 'peeked', otherwise, MOAR!!!!

5403357 I will have to confirm and verify the implications for the specific passage.
If you are right(your suggestion makes more sense), I will make the required corrections.
From the position of your reaction, you make perfect sense, the way you made it come out.
Just takes a moment to find it in order to consider the changes.
On the other hoof, a few minutes are worth the effort, in pursuit of the better story.

Edit: Two counts on the first sub-scene of chapter two corrected.
Thanks for notifying me.

Is there any particular reason you consistently refer nipples as "nibbles," which is, in fact, a verb and so has no business on a pony's breasts unless they're into that sort of thing?

>It isn’t something I could deny you, unless I knew it would have unwanted or unpleasant consequences to either or both of us. For now, I have nothing that indicate towards it, so I will enjoy helping you!
-She speaks like a dictionary or a bored university student... -_- Doesn't feel natural at all.

EDIT:
The more I read, the more I get somewhat annoyed at HOW MUCH the writing is lengthy and not natural at all... It's like reading a formal speech written for an English class (but with some odd errors, like 'nibbles').

There IS a good idea under all this... but the writing makes reading it not a whole lot appealing, sadly.