• Member Since 21st Apr, 2012
  • offline last seen Jun 20th, 2012

Vinyl Dash


Fire wakes up in the middle of a forest with no memory and makes his way to Manehattan. This story follows his life in the gang The Sky Kings and all his wacky adventures. Will include bank robberies, shady characters, and gang violence.

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 10 )

I have to say,
Pretty short like... I guess chapters.
But I like the format :rainbowdetermined2:

Thanks. javascript:smilie(':pinkiehappy:');

If you don't like please tell me why..:fluttercry:. That way I can improve.:pinkiehappy:

Well there really isn't that much to critique on...
It's really short [2 chapters = 1000]
A good chapter should be close to 1000 by itself :I

Is the story line good? Is the flow good?

It's not the greatest, but it's better than a wall of text of 2nd person dialogue :rainbowdetermined2:

Sorry about that. It's really my first fanfic... ever.

Don't be sorry. Instead try being assertive
Iron Will: and instead have pride in what you type :rainbowdetermined2:

I don't see what the problem is with short chapters. Isn't it the author's decision as to where to devide his writing?:duck:

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