Destiny is a fickle thing. For Diamond's life was one of many pleasures. Over the years many things have changed, but one thing seems to remain constant. Apple Bloom and Diamond Tiara, for richer or poorer, some things never change.
Having lost their fortune to some bad overseas dealings, Diamond is left with little choice but to accept the kindness of the very mare she's teased since their foalhood days. Though much has changed over the years, how will life treat Diamond now that she has to live under Apple Bloom's rules?
What goes around, comes around is often said. But so few ever expect to experience it as much as Diamond Tiara. And she's getting pretty sick of living it.
NOTE: Story Interpretation Game on The Diamond Cutters forum of the picture by the wonderful artist Bluse MLP DRAW
This is good. I mean I can't tell what all is going on, but it's good none the less.
Never mock a pony who pampers and cooks for you, anyway this really did add a lot of potential where you can't help but feel what Diamond is going through.
Apple Bloom just learned a valuable lesson. NEVER mock the pony that cooks your food.
Never mock the person preparing your meals. That is just basic.
Heu heu heu. reminds me of this scene:
"Let them eat cake." responded Her Most Dazzling Majesty The Queen of Prance Diamond Tiara. And,thus, they ate.
In the end, DT always wins. Always! *Insert evil laugh here*
This fic really seems like it should be the middle of a longer one. A better builup to add context to why Diamond is poor and why Apple Bloom is her 'Mistress' would go a long way. A real ending would be nice as well, instead of the half-assed semi-cliffhanger we do get.
This could be a decent fic if it wasn't trying to stand alone. The whole thing is lackluster and unpolished, clearly needing additional context and characterization to feel complete.
As a word of advice, it is often harder to write a coherent short story than it is to write a coherent longer one. If you're pressed for time and as such have no desire to write a longer story, don't write a poor short story that is in need of rewrites to make it a strong piece of prose.
5375450 I'm afraid your definition and the one used in this fic are wholly exclusive to one another. I'm using the more traditional and respectable title of servant x master relationship.
Secondly, my time is my own. If I desire to write a short interpretation of a scene I'll do so. Heaven knows this wouldn't be the first of things I've dumped onto fimfiction. I released this with full acknowledgements to it's short view into the life of these ponies. Your critiques are well noted.
But the notion that I should not release it for not having the time (or desire, either or) for a more hand-holding and serious look into every detail of their lives that led them all to this day, is quite frankly, something you'll have to put up with as this likely isn't going to be the last of these short, and not too filling, slices of fiction I'll dump onto a front page from time to time.
You do, as all do, have full permission to expand and make your own interpretation of events. I always did prefer the Alfred Hitchcock open-ended style. Granted this is by no means one of those, that man was a genius, but open-ended and left to interpretation is something I enjoy even in other people's works who write far better than I.
Thanks for the critique.
Puts a whole new meaning to the phrase "S**t-eating grin".
5371548 Thanks, it was fun playing out the characters. One can say that this picture was worth at least 1300 words. :P
5371583 Thanks!
And now you don't have to wonder if I'll ever release another fic! Until next year~ (possibly joking...)
5371846 I'm still looking through my copy of "B*tch 101" and still can't seem to find that entry. Maybe you can lend Apple Bloom your copy some time. ;3
5372335 You can mock their food, just don't mock them while they make the food. Both will result in the same outcome eventually, but totally agree. This is one cook who won't be wearing the "Kiss the Baker" apron. xD
5371593 Ha! Yeah, imagine being the maid to someone who you once bullied? Whoa boy... Those years of Apple Bloom become head pony must of sucked for Diamond if they were like this every now and again with the putting DT in her place. Glad you enjoyed it.
5372786 But then she ran out of cake and things got ugly.
5373098 Did she win? Did she REALLY?
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Well, she did kinda score a nice touchdown there I suppose.
5375747 Pretty sure that's just the chocolate. Apple Bloom is a messy eater for one so 'refine' looking. But now I have that image of Apple Bloom grinning her chocolate covered grin up at everyone. Cute. But get it outta mah head!
5372733 Oh lawdy, you done won the internets there. I best get to watching that movie there fer it done 'spired some righteous curiosity in me! And oh stars alight, that white girls head all GINGER just like Apple Bloom's! You won best post, good Sir or Madam.
Thank ya kindly y'all for the nice words. Glad many you's found something ta like bout this shortie fic. Till next time! And merry Christmas and a Happy New Years to all! (and a happy political correctness, Happy Holidays, to all yous who don't celebrate the jolly red guy!)
Seriously, never expected this would land on the popular list much lest get half the views it got, much less all the generous people who found this worthy to be in their favorites. Thanks, and have a great Holiday season!
5378854 That would be a powder keg of anger and chaos. Ha!
5378854 In a sense, yeah. Now, she knows she is welcome in the Apple home and if there is anymore problems with Apple Bloom, she knows Applejack has her back.
5378854 I thank thee kindly, o gracious writer. And I am indeed a Sir.
5380129 I'll certainly try, didn't come close to finishing it last year. We'll try at least. Me and the voices inside my head will try.
Nice one. I like how considering Apple Bloom was now being the "snooty/braggy" one she kinda got what she deserved. While she has reason to dislike Tiara, and perhaps Tiara deserves some of the riffing for how she used to treat her, (and I like the irony that Tiara was now the poorer one, and AB was successful) but despite Tiara kinda deserving it, AB kinda was still kicking a pony while they're down, so I like how the fic still gives you some sympathy for Tiara.
Her li'l subtle prank was unexpected, and pretty in-character for her, and a li'l funny. I like how the fic' makes both characters not to overly-mean though, yet still has some animosity between them, yet now they have to live under the same roof.
I also like how AJ was being friendly to Tiara, and the hint at the end she was going to thank Scootaloo for convincing the Apples to take her in. Kinda hints perhaps Tiara has matured a bit, while still not being a "saint" perhaps.
Overall, I like how the fic kinda has a "grey area" with both Bloom & Tiara, and neither is the "bad pony," or "good pony" 100%.
5407564 Thanks. That was a thoughtful look into the story, as these two are basically sisters now in a way. Well, pretty much for all intents and purposes given the circumstances, and Apple Bloom knows this. Hence why she warns DT about not tattling on her. At least I think so.
Yet as many of Apple Bloom's episodes tend to show, she isn't always the most rational or forgiving of ponies at times. I like that about her, because honestly a lot of us can relate to that more. Some can't quite let go of the past, even if we know the person isn't as bad as they were back then.
As a commenter already mentioned before. There is a lot of stuff here that feels as if it should be a sort of mid point into a bigger story, I took that as a compliment btw as this basically is just a slice of the many years these two have had to interact with each other; case in point the whole helping come up with new ideas to help the farm that got mentioned being something that took place apparently 2 years prior if we're to believe the Apples began to get out of impoverish state thanks to whatever happened back then. Could have started even a couple harvests earlier even. We just don't know exactly.
I mostly just wrote them as how I see them act on the show, Apple Bloom always did seem to want more while the other two CMC were more for enjoying the time together. Apple Bloom like any normal person has a selfish side, too, and she is a very self-conscious pony to boot. Given the chance to one-up Diamond Tiara, as in Family Appreciation Day, she'll take it. She's a great pony, and compliments Diamond Tiara quite nicely. Vice versa, too. They have a very open to interpretation history between them, and that's a fun thing to play around with.
You have a good eye, don't think anyone else have mentioned Scootaloo yet. Glad you enjoyed it. Scootaloo has really changed a lot since S1. She's opened up so much more, and showed us just what a heart of gold she has. We don't know what made her convince Apple Bloom, but Scootaloo is pretty empathic and it's just hard to say no to a pony like her.
I imagine AJ having quite the full time job of putting up with a lot between those two. Yet she loves her family, and even if she don't like the in-fighting and likely what Apple Bloom has been doing, she'll stick by them. Once she commits to something, I doubt she'd go back on her word.
Thanks for reading.
Bullying a bully is wrong, still. And Apple Bloom did deserve some payback, assuming this had been going on for years.
For a second, there, I thought this was going to end a lot more darkly, with bodyswaps and all. I distinctly recall that option when I saw the picture the first time.
One tiny remark, hardly worth pointing out: 'scolding' is a vocal act, 'scalding' is burning skin with hot liquid.
As for the Scootaloo subplot... Applejack mentions Diamond is family. So the first impulse is to think Scootaloo was adopted by the Apples, and has since entered a romantic relationship with Diamond? That explains how DT could be in the Apple residence as a maid without anyone noticing, and presumably Scootaloo moved out of the house recently, prompting Diamond to do the same.
... did Diamond just trot off to have revenge angry snu-snu?
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Well, that's an embarrassing typo. Thank you for actually bringing that up! I love minor problems being brought to my attention.
All 100% up to interpretation.
(all the snu-snu)
As to the rest of your comments. Gosh. Your brain processes thoughts and possibilities similar to the way I often fill gaps in other stories. That is a fascinating take on the story. Also, I believe I recall that thread and a suggestion of bodyswaps in one of those stories there. xD
Thanks for reading and commenting!
Lol, this is literally the first story I've read in a long time were I thought that Apple Bloom was a total ass. Strangely enough it makes me want to know more about their unique situation. Like what got them there, what flipped the script ya know.
But when Diamond tainted the food I cracked a small smile as that was exactly what I was thinking I'd do in that situation, lol.
Great short story!
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Ha thanks, I was inspired by a few Apple Bloom episodes that want to write something between the two in this kind of manner sorta but this pic set the stage for something I had wished to eventually do more with though in the end I tossed it to the side given I knew I wouldn't have the time and focus to explore the trauma of Scootaloo and Diamond's family's unfortunate fate.
I never intended to write DT with a mother before, far as I knew she had non until S3's Bab Seed threaten to tell on Silver and DT to their mothers about their bad attitudes, something Babs would have to have worded very carefully given the tyrannical length she went to show DT and Silvy how tough she was. So, I don't know. I probably would like to try something eventually for Diamond and the gang before gen 4 ends at least, who knows.
And yes, Apple Bloom never was the brightest pony in the shed. You simply do not mess with the pony you've got serving you literal apologies in tea and sweets like that, it's just bound to bite you in the end. xD
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You're welcome.