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Heeheehee, this was great, and I freaking loved how Lyra was acting XD hehehe.
She's so cute.
You killed me with that XD HAHAHAHA!
Awesome job!
Ponies with socks, I never really got that whole thing there...
Har Har
Just gonna throw it out there... Its Vergere isn't it?
I really cannot wait until the next chapter that I cannot afford to leave my chair no matter what happens...
Going to call it right now, the one pulling the GRA's strings is actually Titus' master who has turned to the dark side and hired the bounty hunter to fake her death.
I actually don't mind these giant chapters. But the rediculious sentences?
You have some sentences here that are over one hundred words long. Heck, there are whole stories that are shorter than this one sentence!
And yes, this, like almost every other sentence; is a run on. Several times over.
7515817 I actually think I know how run-on sentences became prevalent because I remember that I went back and read the early chapters and they looked really choppy because of the short sentences that felt like they didn't flow very well. Thanks for pointing that out though, I'll try and work on eliminating run-ons as best I can when proofreading of the upcoming chapters.
Edit: This whole story came about when I came to realize that, because I wasn't in school, writing wasn't a part of my daily life anymore and I had fallen out of practice so my ability had degraded. In college I had written a short story for a D&D character's background in my free time (completely unrelated to MLP) and, after talking with my creative writing professor about it, he asked to show it to a few colleagues. I ended up moving out of state before I could finish writing it and I lost contact with my professor so one copy is laying around somewhere in one of my files and he has the other still, but I can remember how much fun I had writing it so FimFiction and Final Frontiers became a means of enjoying that feeling once again.
An added bonus was that I'd get back in the practice of writing again so thank you for your constructive criticism, it's very much appreciated!
Titus' master?
"Ship at the bottom of the ocean" is entirely possible with what we know of her skill in flying.
Though...She seems quite a bit dark. Not really at Sith yet, but still there. But then again, that is about what we expected of a brutal warrior society like the griffon.
Will this turn out to be a morally grey dilemma?
hooooo kay then 1,000,000 bits says luna changing him into a stalion messed with his genetics and he can infact get her pregnant
8076047 This sort of gets discussed in a later chapter, but once the spell had ended everything about him returned to normal.
When is he going to rescue from the girl from the Griffins
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Coming up in the chapter I'm working on!