You are the most talented, most interesting, and most extraordinary person in the universe. And you are capable of amazing things. Because you are the reader. And you bring our worlds to life.
Rainbow Dash and Gilda used to be friends. Used to be, but no longer. Gilda wonders just what went wrong, trying to shoulder the blame on Rainbow Dash. In the end, none of it matters, as life moves on regardless.
But loss is never as simple as moving on. It's the simple things that remind us of what we've lost.
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The idea behind this story is pretty good, but everything happens a little too fast for my tastes. In just 1,543 words, Gilda flies home, gets bullied by her fellow griffins, and is given a mission by the king. In this time, you also establish that pretty much everyone hates her. That's pretty fast. It's not good to drag things on, but it's also not good to do things too quickly. The events and characters don't feel as natural as they should be. Flesh things out. This story has potential, I know it does.
Ah. Nice way to flesh out where Gilda lives, and the type of society in which she lives. Now she has a bit of a Babs Seed-vibe going on, having clearly come from a hard life.
I can't wait to see where this goes!
Cool, i would enjoy reading more.