Currently under rewrites. Rewritten chapters edited by thehalfelf.
The Fall Formal sees Sunset Shimmer defeated and dethroned as leader of Canterlot High School. Desperate for redemption, she lacks anyone to turn to for help - except the five girls who's lives she tormented. Does she deserve help? Does she deserve friendship? Rainbow Dash seems to think so.
Meanwhile, Time Turner, a teacher at Canterlot High School, watches Sunset's progress from afar. But he too is desperate for redemption - but for what? Who has he hurt, and why? How is his story connected to Sunset's?
Cover art generously provided by Draconaquest!
Chapters (26)
SWEET! Great job!
6297433 Thank you!
Hm...
I feel like Time Turner's story is going to either end two ways, it all depends on how Sugar Cube Corner is.
And, Sunset has to explain to Fluttershy.
So far, "YOU ARE GOING TO LOVE ME!!!" is going through my head.
Wait a minute, Rarity's bringing Titanic?
Doesn't Titanic contain nudity?
And, Rainbow might like Titanic.
Well, that last half-hour at least.
And, maybe the nude scene. If it was Sunset Shimmer. (hint hint, nudge nudge, wink wink)
Although, why do I get the feeling that Berry Punch is actually forcing Derpy and Dinky to go Sugar Cube Corner? Honestly, it strikes me as odd that they'd want to see Time, especially after Dinky's outburst.
But, hey, I'll wait to see what happens.
And, something you find in most ship-fics (and clop-fics) a Slumber Party!
Oh, who am I kidding, I've written a Slumber Part scene! Except, the Dazzlings were there, and so was the 11th Doctor...
Still though, I'm anxious for the next chapter!
I'm glad you used my idea, and was a great scene, thanks again,
As for the Dazzlings I'm surprise at the method they are using to try take over the school or find the Magic they felt.
Very sneaky!
6300595 I was hoping someone would comment on that!
The drama...
The anger...
The fury...
The romance...
And, drama again...
I LOVE THIS STORY!!!
*My reaction at the end* OH SH
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Mind controlled slaves (or henchpeople) are quite slow, mentally. Rather straightforward too. Still, they're great if you're on a budget.
Loving the story. At first it looked like a couple of other Sunset stories on here, but you really added that extra kick with the focus on other characters too. Possible favourite Sunset Shimmer reformation story. Faving and liking. Keep it up.
6393457 Favorite Sunset redemption story, eh? Why, thank you!
6393469 you have a very well made selection of characters. Long Road to Friendship is another very good one, but this is just a notch further, and has a less comedic tone as well. But more realistic. Except the high schooler with a gun. But that's fine, because mind control. You have an explanation for those who seek it wether you want to or not. I apologize in advance for any essays you inadvertently read while perusing my comments. Then again, phone vs. laptops.
6393479 Better than Long Road? That's a mighty big compliment... One that I'll try to live up to!
Crimson Napalm having a gun isn't that far fetched, actually. You see, that way I imagined Napalm, is that he's real big on violence. Anything that can hurt, guns included. Naturally, he can't buy guns himself, but his father can. That's where he got the pistol.
Well dang! Cliffhanger!
They won't last two minutes against Applejack and her amazing strength. Or Fluttershy and her weaponized cuteness. And, of course, Pinkie Pie and a cake assault. And you can't forget Rarity and a sewing needle.
6393569 that explanation works also. With a name like that I should have expected it.
iiiiiiiiii ccccccccccccrrriiiieeedddd at the time bit
Wow.
Just, wow.
That was heavy, real heavy.
Oh, and also,
And, the ship leaves the dock. May she tread into pleasant waters.
I hope your okay.
Be well.
Pinkie Pie Master Shipper!!
im sorry about what happened but its his fault i hope you get better soon =)
An excellent chapter
My condolences for your loss.
So let's see losing those 3 doesn't really hurt the Dazzlings, they can always get more slaves. Plus if they hear about the break-in in the news (or from some other source) the Dazzlings will be heading straight for Dash's house. Though since Rainbow has no magic (or does she and simply not know it?). They'll count it as a dead end and a screw up on their slaves part.
On the other hand, if any of those three guys can tell the girls what happen, they're going to get an early warning. The Dazzlings wouldn't exactly be hard to spot in a crowd. Seriously, their hair kind of stands out.
Well... this chapter was... ah...
Whats a good word to describe drama and shipping ... on right
Fedex....
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I am sorry for your loss. Stay strong and be the best you can be. We don't know how strong we really are until we are at our weakest.
Confucius aside, excellent work with the Sonic the Hedgehog quote for Pinkie. Worked like a charm
I can feel the tension rising between Berry and Turner already.
May the ship tread safe waters...
Both of them.
And, Turner and Berry are probably going to be in a head to head showdown.
May the best one win! (Turner)
That's an interesting bit of info. So the pendants won't work if they run completely out of power?
There's probably quite a few students that'd be happy to throw Sunset Shimmer under a bus...
And so the ship begins to sail.
I hope things work out for Turner, Luna, Derpy, Dinky, and Berry.
6444555 Sorry, but I am.
6444785 oh god that picture is adorable
Now, all we have to do i get into the school
J-Just...”
1. Is.
2. Forgot your opening quotation mark.
So we have our Sunset Shimmer x Rainbow Dash (Sash) ship and our Time Turner x Luna (Lime) ship. Yes, I come up with horrible names
6445239 Fixed!
I am now going to use those ship names for all eternity.
6445276 Good, good, let the ship's flow through you... Like the Tuna (Twi x Luna) ship.
So much WIN!! Sash is one of my new favorite ships for Sunset.
Yay, all the shipping!
Yeah, you friend, who you’ve known practically forever
1. Your.
6469015 Fixed! Thank you.
I smell a set-up!
"Charming" names.... I cracked up at that one. Good joke
6474242 I gotta admit, that wasn't intentional.
6481367 Wow, all these corrections...
Thank you, and I'll get to fixing these as soon as possible!
6489208 No. My friend Draconaquest made me some, but if you made another, I wouldn't object!
6531982 Ha!
But no, Turner won't become the Doctor. But that is kinda funny, considering what I have planned for the Halloween chapter...
6532001 Oh my God, that is hilarious.
6532029 Probably just your stomach growling.
It's good for a one-line joke, I'll tell you that, but there's not really room in the story for Turner's supposed brother to have any impact.
6532117 Look man, I'm sorry, but there is no place for him. There's no sense in introducing another character that I'm not going to use.
This is my story. I'm glad that you love it, really I am, but I don't take kindly to people insisting I introduce major things that have no place in my story.
Man, great story! It's a real emotional roller coaster. There are some spelling errors around, but the story is still readable. And thank you for not making Time Turner the Doctor. I was really worried going into the story. I never liked that joke, not even when it was pretty much confirmed in the actual show, and it's good to see Time Turner as an actual character with real-world problems rather than as a time traveling alien. Good on you!
6552675 Heh, thanks. Originally, I was going to make Turner more similar to the Doctor, like making him have this "Holier Than Thou" attitude and being a general smartass, but the story simply evolved to the point that it wouldn't work. I think I like this current Turner better than how I pictured him.