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Dusty Old Qrow


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Currently under rewrites. Rewritten chapters edited by thehalfelf.


The Fall Formal sees Sunset Shimmer defeated and dethroned as leader of Canterlot High School. Desperate for redemption, she lacks anyone to turn to for help - except the five girls who's lives she tormented. Does she deserve help? Does she deserve friendship? Rainbow Dash seems to think so.

Meanwhile, Time Turner, a teacher at Canterlot High School, watches Sunset's progress from afar. But he too is desperate for redemption - but for what? Who has he hurt, and why? How is his story connected to Sunset's?


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Argh...my brain....just a moment...
Okay, better.
Now then, where was I? Ah, yes, I remember.
Don't worry, I can't write Flash Sentry either. He's just so...basic. There's so little to his character he's difficult to write for.
Although, I will admit, the 'waifu stealer' comment had me laughing out loud.
I'm feeling sorry for Time Turner though. I wonder how his story plays out.
And, the Sirens are here! Yay! Son of a b:yay:tch. What are they planning? How will at affect CHS? What will become of Time Turner? Will he try and commit suicide again? Or will he go on a killing rampage? Does Flash become part of the primary characters? Will Rainbow try and hook up with Sunset?

Guess we'll find out next time! Same Bat-Time! Same Bat-Channel!

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Ha, I'm glad to see y'all enjoyed this. I was sorta iffy on how I introduced The Dazzlings, but I'm happy to breathe a sigh of relief!

And while Flash won't be a main-stay in the way of characters, he'll definitely have a role to play in what's up next!

Can't wait for more of this!

This is so good! IF SUNSET GETS HURT, SEBASTIAN, THE GUARDIAN OF EQUESTRIA WILL BE VERY :twilightangry2:!!!!!!!!!!!!! reference to my story. wanna read it? pm me. Sorry had to reference it!i1.ytimg.com/vi/OR4vAX_sghY/maxresdefault.jpg

Hm...
I feel like Time Turner's story is going to either end two ways, it all depends on how Sugar Cube Corner is.
And, Sunset has to explain to Fluttershy.
So far, "YOU ARE GOING TO LOVE ME!!!" is going through my head.

Wait a minute, Rarity's bringing Titanic?
Doesn't Titanic contain nudity?
And, Rainbow might like Titanic.
Well, that last half-hour at least.
And, maybe the nude scene. If it was Sunset Shimmer. (hint hint, nudge nudge, wink wink)

Although, why do I get the feeling that Berry Punch is actually forcing Derpy and Dinky to go Sugar Cube Corner? Honestly, it strikes me as odd that they'd want to see Time, especially after Dinky's outburst.
But, hey, I'll wait to see what happens.

And, something you find in most ship-fics (and clop-fics) a Slumber Party!
Oh, who am I kidding, I've written a Slumber Part scene! Except, the Dazzlings were there, and so was the 11th Doctor...

Still though, I'm anxious for the next chapter!

I'm glad you used my idea, and was a great scene, thanks again,

As for the Dazzlings I'm surprise at the method they are using to try take over the school or find the Magic they felt.
Very sneaky!

6300595 I was hoping someone would comment on that!

The drama...
The anger...
The fury...
The romance...
And, drama again...

I LOVE THIS STORY!!!

Mind controlled slaves (or henchpeople) are quite slow, mentally. Rather straightforward too. Still, they're great if you're on a budget.

Loving the story. At first it looked like a couple of other Sunset stories on here, but you really added that extra kick with the focus on other characters too. Possible favourite Sunset Shimmer reformation story. Faving and liking. Keep it up.

6393457 Favorite Sunset redemption story, eh? Why, thank you!:pinkiehappy:

6393469 you have a very well made selection of characters. Long Road to Friendship is another very good one, but this is just a notch further, and has a less comedic tone as well. But more realistic. Except the high schooler with a gun. But that's fine, because mind control. You have an explanation for those who seek it wether you want to or not. I apologize in advance for any essays you inadvertently read while perusing my comments. Then again, phone vs. laptops.

6393479 Better than Long Road? That's a mighty big compliment... One that I'll try to live up to!

Crimson Napalm having a gun isn't that far fetched, actually. You see, that way I imagined Napalm, is that he's real big on violence. Anything that can hurt, guns included. Naturally, he can't buy guns himself, but his father can. That's where he got the pistol.

Well dang! Cliffhanger!

They won't last two minutes against Applejack and her amazing strength. Or Fluttershy and her weaponized cuteness. And, of course, Pinkie Pie and a cake assault. And you can't forget Rarity and a sewing needle.

6393569 that explanation works also. With a name like that I should have expected it.

iiiiiiiiii ccccccccccccrrriiiieeedddd at the time bit

Wow.
Just, wow.
That was heavy, real heavy.
Oh, and also,

Just then, Sunset and Pinkie Pie walked into the room. “Oh, thank Celestia!” Sunset exclaimed, running over to Rainbow Dash and giving her a tight hug. “I thought something happened to you! After that gunshot and you weren’t making any noise that I could hear and... Oh, I’m just glad you’re okay!”

Rainbow Dash smiled awkwardly- she tried her best to hide the slight blush on her face- and gingerly returned the hug. "Uh, yeah, I'm fine, Sunset." Dash laughed awkwardly, the red in her face deepening. "You can, uh... You can let go now."

“Huh?” Sunset lifted her face from Rainbow Dash’s shoulder. “Oh. Oh! Okay.” She said awkwardly as she slowly unwrapped her arms from Dash’s body. “Sorry...” The room fell into awkward silence as nobody said anything.

Pinkie Pie laughed. “Oh, just kiss already!”

And, the ship leaves the dock. May she tread into pleasant waters.

I hope your okay.
Be well.

im sorry about what happened but its his fault i hope you get better soon =)

My condolences for your loss.

So let's see losing those 3 doesn't really hurt the Dazzlings, they can always get more slaves. Plus if they hear about the break-in in the news (or from some other source) the Dazzlings will be heading straight for Dash's house. Though since Rainbow has no magic (or does she and simply not know it?). They'll count it as a dead end and a screw up on their slaves part.

On the other hand, if any of those three guys can tell the girls what happen, they're going to get an early warning. The Dazzlings wouldn't exactly be hard to spot in a crowd. Seriously, their hair kind of stands out.

Well... this chapter was... ah...
Whats a good word to describe drama and shipping ... on right
Fedex....
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I am sorry for your loss. Stay strong and be the best you can be. We don't know how strong we really are until we are at our weakest.

Confucius aside, excellent work with the Sonic the Hedgehog quote for Pinkie. Worked like a charm

I can feel the tension rising between Berry and Turner already.

May the ship tread safe waters...
Both of them.
And, Turner and Berry are probably going to be in a head to head showdown.
May the best one win! (Turner)

"We need to move fast- or else we’ll be completely powerless.”

That's an interesting bit of info. So the pendants won't work if they run completely out of power?

"The students of CHS are, like, really good friends! They'll never spill any secrets about each other."

There's probably quite a few students that'd be happy to throw Sunset Shimmer under a bus...

Rainbow grinned, embarrassed, and stepped away from Sunset with a toothy grin. “Alright, Sunset. Admit it: I’m a great kisser!”

And so the ship begins to sail.

I hope things work out for Turner, Luna, Derpy, Dinky, and Berry.

Now, all we have to do i get into the school
J-Just...”

1. Is.
2. Forgot your opening quotation mark.

So we have our Sunset Shimmer x Rainbow Dash (Sash) ship and our Time Turner x Luna (Lime) ship. Yes, I come up with horrible names:trollestia:

6445239 Fixed!

I am now going to use those ship names for all eternity.

6445276 Good, good, let the ship's flow through you... Like the Tuna (Twi x Luna) ship.

So much WIN!! Sash is one of my new favorite ships for Sunset.

Yeah, you friend, who you’ve known practically forever

1. Your.

"Charming" names.... I cracked up at that one. Good joke :rainbowlaugh:

6474242 I gotta admit, that wasn't intentional.

6481367 Wow, all these corrections...

Thank you, and I'll get to fixing these as soon as possible!

6489208 No. My friend Draconaquest made me some, but if you made another, I wouldn't object!

Comment posted by Wurben Hurgen deleted Oct 24th, 2015

6531982 Ha!

But no, Turner won't become the Doctor. But that is kinda funny, considering what I have planned for the Halloween chapter...

Comment posted by Wurben Hurgen deleted Oct 24th, 2015
Comment posted by Wurben Hurgen deleted Oct 24th, 2015

6532029 Probably just your stomach growling.

It's good for a one-line joke, I'll tell you that, but there's not really room in the story for Turner's supposed brother to have any impact.

Comment posted by Wurben Hurgen deleted Oct 24th, 2015
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