The crusaders realize it's a bad idea to interrupt Twilight when she's using a fusion spell. Surely it can't have gone too bad, right? Right?
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The crusaders realize it's a bad idea to interrupt Twilight when she's using a fusion spell. Surely it can't have gone too bad, right? Right?
I must say that th beginning is quite interesting. I wonder how they will survive in one body and what will happen to them in the process. Looking forward to next chapter
The only bad thing I've noticed recently is spelling mistakes. Maybe you should get a proofreader or read the text multiple times?
Despite this, I can't say anything else. See you in the next chapter
The Summary does look short and to the point.
Though you could name the chapters, right?
Titles are not the same as Spoilers, you know.
You shouldn't have a wall of dialogue like that without any accompanying action tags. I think the description can be improved upon. Not too bad for a first try, I think!
Good start, just flesh out the environment a bit more.