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Robipony


The man who likes ponies but also likes monsters... so what's wrong with him combining the two? ;P

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This story also goes by the name: An Apple Forgotten.
When you finish reading this go check out Part 2: Here.

After Applejack loses her family as the result of a fire, the farm pony goes into a deep depression. Because of her grief Applejack neglects taking care of the farm, which then goes to waste.

Seeing her sadness Applejack's friends feel bad for her but the farm pony interprets this as pity, thus shutting herself off from the rest of her friends.

However things go wrong when Applejack starts to hear the voices of her family talking to her. Was the fire an accident?
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The story was proof read by: 0_0

This was a story I wrote on Deviant Art as an art trade for AnAppleForgotton. She is also the owner of the story image.

Here are images pertaining to the story (Illustrated by:AnAppleForgotton):
Barn Fire
Insane Applejack

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Comments ( 36 )

It seems a little bit rushed..

5352077 The story or the description? I had a hard time writing the description but I thought I had paced the story well enough.

5352096

I'm sorry.

My writing advice sucks..

But from what I read, the barn burning felt a little rushed..

Granny Smith fell ill a little too fast..

Sorry, if this doesen't help, but I thought it might help..

5352098 I suppose you do have a point there. I suppose I could have stretched it out a bit more however my main focus at the time was Applejack's fall from sanity.

If you have any suggestions on how to stretch it out feel free to send me a PM (that way there won't be any spoilers in the comments). :pinkiesmile:

I do feel that this needs a least one more chapter, since it ends with "two down, two to go".

Two down. Two to go.

That's not good...

5352380 Well, as stated above this was done as an art trade, so if the person who requested it wants another chapter I will do it.

However if you have any suggestions on who may be one of the next two targets feel free to throw them my way.

5352498 Indeed, may Celestia have mercy upon the souls of those two.

5352742 Maybe Filthy Rich and Diamond Tiara. Since the Rich family makes lots of money from the Apple family products Applejack might think that they were also behind this to steal sweet apple acers away from her.

5352815 Hmmm... I suppose. However I am not sure Applejack would harm a filly, even if that filly was mean to her sister.

5352859 Well, it's your story, so you may do as you please. I'm just here to read it and give suggestions :twilightsmile:

Nice story I LOVE MLP! The most i like is :- RAINBOW DASH and APPLE JACK!
Why:- THEY ARE ATHELICS!

:ajsmug::rainbowdetermined2:
:pinkiehappy::yay::twilightsmile: :coolphoto::raritywink::raritystarry::trollestia::eeyup::scootangel::moustache:

Well, damn....it's quite clear that Applejack has gone insane. I mean, she clearly shows signs of severe depression, paranoia, hallucinations, and schizophrenia. For Luna's sakes, she was talking to a scarecrow and suspecting foul play from the Flim Flam Brothers. To the point where she actually went out and kill them by burning them in their own home. And the fact they were actually wanted to help Applejack out after she lost her family.

So..is there going to be sequel to this, since it did end with

Two down, Two to go.

5380478 Well, the original person who requested that I write this did ask for more. However the direction she wants me to go seems a little bit off to me. :rainbowderp:

You see AnAppleForgotten does a lot of art work revolving around Five Nights at Applejacks and she kind of wants be to convert this into a sort of prequel to that. It is kind of complicated but to answer your question: Yes, at some point there will be a sequel to this. :rainbowlaugh:

5382983

Ah, That's good to known and I see. Well, I hope that works out for ya. :twilightsmile:

Alright for those of you who have been asking for a sequel I am pleased to say a sequel is in the works.

Do you think that this story would make it onto Equestria Daily?

5463245 If it did that would be pretty cool. However I think the story needs to be a bit more popular before such a thing would happen.

Just saying. :twilightsheepish:

I remember this! I didn't know you wrote this! I've apparently been reading stuff from you for a while.:unsuresweetie:

5659556 Well, it was done as part of an art trade on Deviant Art so you might have read it there. :rainbowlaugh:

5659561 No it was here, just a couple months ago, I think I saw it under the new fics on the front page. You know when stories are released and they appear on the front page? I think I saw it there.:moustache:: I know it had to be on this site at least because it already had the green check mark by the chapter.:eeyup:

5659590 Oh well, I haven't actually looked at FiMFictions front page before (weird right). But that does make sense this was pretty new a few months back.

The only thing that makes me sad about this fic is that it is my most popular fic (so far) and I wrote it as an art trade.

5659621 Don't worry, everybody's gotta start somewhere. I'm sure the one you asked for OCs to use in will be pretty good! After all, you're using one of mine (I think I don't really remember)!

#TheGreatandPowerfulSentinel

Also my text message ringtone.:moustache:

5659642 I believe I am using one of your OCs but I don't remember for sure. Sorry last week was really busy for me and today was busy as well, so I am a little bit tired.

5659653 I think you where gonna use Shifting Winds if I'm not mistaken. Any way I like your work so far and knowing I could help with some really makes my day. I hope next week isn't as hectic.:yay:

I like it. Especially the fire as I always say, even when the thing couldn't be more on fire, "It could be more on fire."

5751654 More on fire huh. :trixieshiftright:

Why do I always find myself reading dark stories relating to Applejack? :applejackconfused:

Anyways, this is a pretty a-okay story. I do like the atmosphere and writing style of your fic, and your conventions were pretty good. However, I feel like this story was a bit rushed, and Granny Smith's death felt a bit out of place.

But nonetheless, I liked this very much.

*looks at Aj* :applejackconfused:

What?

*slowly backs away* Nice piece though :3

8722296 Yeah, this story is a little rough. I was pretty new to the fandom at the time I wrote it (please it was part of an art trade). Still I think it is pretty decent. :twilightsheepish:

6272677 I agree, looking back her death is kind of rushed. To be fair though it is kind of hard to kill off old people in stories aside from medical conditions and having them fall down stairs (which I can say is certainly frightening considering that my grandmother fell and broke her hip two years ago).

9095717 What is? Could you be more specific? :rainbowderp:

9095814
Everypony dying, and all the blood and misery.

Oh hey more stor- NOPE! *nopes the f outta here* :rainbowderp:

10166720 Yeah, this is a much older fic, back from my old grimdark days. That was a long time ago.

10166726
Yeah... I try to avoid stories like these. Sorry

10166731 It's fine. Stick to the newer fics. I like them better. :pinkiesmile:

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