A certain familiar mare finds herself in Ponyville. While this wasn't exactly her destination, she soon finds that it was where she was meant to be. Where she was meant to be free, laugh and make new friends. Friends that whether or not she realized it yet, would become very important.
Name might change, I'm not sure if I'm really sold on this title or not
Character tags will be added as story progresses, just in case I decide not to put in a character originally planned.
I do have a prof-reader to prof-read this, but it might take some time until he can get around to it. In the meantime I don't know if I'll try and get a 2nd person or not, but regardless constructive criticism is very much welcome 
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Why the heck are there 2 copies of my arthur's note
.....just.....wat
Edit: Well it's fixed now. Guess it was just a weird glitch from FIMFiction
Seeing as how your title isn't spelled right (something that's going to immediately tun off many readers) I would strongly suggest correcting it.
5362407 Gah, that would probably help explain some things. jeese why can't I ever spell beginning right
There fixed, I think.
You've got the potential for an interesting idea here, but you do have some issues that need working on...
(1) Since when do pegasi have tailfeathers? There's never been any indication of that in the TV show, so it's kind of jarring and doesn't make much sense here. If this is something that's important to the story, it needs to be explained; if not, then I'd suggest removing it. Same thing with having a "unicorn tail"... as opposed to what, exactly? There's really no indication that a particular tail style is limited to any one pony race or not, so the idea that young Pinkie has a tail which Fluttershy immediately recognizes as being a unicorn-specific type also needs serious explanation to be credible.
(2) Fluttershy seems much too aggressive, especially at first; you might want to tone that down a bit, and let her aggressiveness gradually escalate as the timberwolf tries to argue with her, instead of having her going straight into rage-mode.
(3) Pay closer attention to your spelling. It's "kindness", not "kindess"; "shiny" and "shining" with one "N", not "shinny" or "shinning"; "could have seen", not "could of seen"... and so on. (In fact, when you're using phrases like "could have", "would have", "shouldn't have", the word is always "have", never "of." People think "of" because they mis-hear it when other people use the contractions "would've" or "shouldn't've", and think the "ve" sound at the end is an "of" – but it isn't.)
You've also got a few instances of using apostrophe-S to make a plural, such as "looking carefully through the tree's for something to eat" or "several crazy idea's for desserts", which is always wrong – apostrophe-S makes possessives, as in "something which belongs to _____", not plurals, as in "more than one _____".
Also – "it's", with the apostrophe, is the contraction of "it is." If you want the possessive pronoun, as in "something which belongs to it", the correct spelling is "its" without the apostrophe. (Possessive pronouns – his, hers, its, theirs, yours – are an exception to the apostrophe-S rule about possessives; they never get apostrophes before the S.)
Using a good spell-checker will help catch some of this, but a lot of it you'll just have to watch out for on your own. (A spell-checker can only tell you if what you've written is a word, not whether it's the right word.) "Auto-completion" and "auto-correct" features can also sabotage you by inserting the words they think you want instead of the ones you really wanted; I find it's much easier to turn them off. (A "spellcheck-as-you-go" feature that only highlights words it thinks are misspelled is fine; just don't let it fix the words for you.) One helpful trick for catching the misuse of words like "its" vs. "it's", "your" vs. "you're", and so on, is to take the contraction (it's, you're), expand it back to its full form (it is, you are), then stick it into the sentence and see if it still makes sense:
(4) Your paragraph spacing: You need to leave a blank space between all paragraphs, not just between ones containing dialogue. Or, alternatively, don't leave space between any of them, and indent the first line of each one; or, indent the first line and leave a space between each. Whichever you choose, though, be consistent and do it for every paragraph; don't mix formatting styles.
Lastly – when you have a line of dialogue followed by who said it and how (also known as an "attribution" or "dialogue tag", the whole thing must be treated as one single sentence, using these rules:
(A) If the character's spoken dialogue would normally end with a period if it were a sentence by itself, you must put a comma before the closing quote mark, not a period;
(B) the first word of the dialogue tag (the part outside the quote marks) is not capitalized, unless it's someone's name (or the pronoun "I");
(C) if the spoken dialogue ends with a ! or ?, you still use those, but the dialogue tag is still capitalized (or not) according to rule B above.
You're getting this almost right, in that you're not ending the dialogue with periods before the tag that I can see (though you do have several instances where you just don't have any punctuation at all before the closing quote, which is also incorrect); your biggest issue is (B), where you're capitalizing the start of the dialogue tag when you shouldn't:
Like I said, you've got an interesting premise; just clean up the spelling, punctuation, and paragraph formatting, and see if you can sort out the whole "tailfeathers" and "unicorn tail" issue I mentioned above so that the reader understands more clearly what's going on, and you'll have a decent chance of flipping that upvote/downvote ratio in the other direction.
5362966 Hmm ya, to be honest grammer and such, has always been my weakness. I greatly do appreciate the help though
I will admit though, I haven't gone over this too much yet, as far as prof-reading goes, heh, I was impatient 
should probably get on top of that.
As far as the whole Unicorn and Pegasus thing, well I suppose with the Unicorn tail I haven't really properly explained that, I'll have to try and think a little bit on how to convey such. I like to imagine that Unicorns have a long graceful tail like the Unicorns in old mythology. I'd imagine that it's their magic that causes such, but I'll admit I only give them such tails in the 1st place 'cause I just think it looks nice and really fits them. I shall try to convey it more though, even I was wondering if that was explained enough.
The tail feathers though, well that just makes sense to me for Pegasi to have them, I didn't think I'd be that jarring
Although if it is, I'm not so certain how one would fix that, I feel why a Pegasi would have tail feathers is already self-explanatory 
.....sooo.....ya. I guess I'll try and think of something to help that, but I'm really not sure what could be done.
Ya Fluttershy and the Timberwolf probably needs some polishing too, it's really hard to get it just right, especially since this is the painfully shy Flutters of the beginning of season 1. Although, I have to ask, are you talking about when she first comes out in the beginning, or after she tried to leave?
Again thanks for your very long and informed comment, I know such wouldn't of been quick to write, so I really appreciate it
Hey so, I guess I have to admit it now, I dun goofed
The more I look at this first chapter the more I realize, it does in fact need a bit more work to truly be worthy of showing off here. So I'm taking it down for a bit to work on such issues.
While me getting over-excited about something and wanting to show it right away is nothing new, I normally know to just stop for a sec and calm down, so as to not make a mistake. Regardless I'm not perfect, so I didn't calm myself down and put this up perhaps a bit too prematurely. So ya, it will be back up as soon as I have time to work on it, but I really want to make it shine before putting it up for the world to see. Sorry for anyone who has liked this story, I promise I'll do better in the future
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Well, just remember – nothing is "self-explanatory" to a reader if what you're doing in your story differs from what's seen in "canon", which basically means the TV show itself. (The books and IDW comics are only "partially canon", because they're produced by different writing teams than the TV show, and the show's writers aren't required to follow whatever the comic-book guys do.)
If you look at the various unicorns who've been seen in the show, there really isn't much difference between their tails vs. those of the pegasi or earth ponies; all three tribes have a varying range of tail lengths and styles, with stallions tending to have shorter tails than mares. Fluttershy's tail, for example, is longer than Twilight's or Sunset Shimmer's, and at least as long as (if not longer than) Princess Cadance's.
And actually... no, pegasi having tailfeathers isn't really obvious or self-explanatory, I'm afraid. Again, there's no evidence for it in the TV show's canon appearances of any of the pegasi characters... and there's also no evidence of such in any of the "classic" mythological renditions of winged horses; they're always depicted as having normal horse bodies, with wings, but no tailfeathers. (Now, yes, realistically this means that they wouldn't have a rear control surface for stable flight... but let's face it, pegasus flight already involves some pretty heavy-duty magic as it is, since their wings aren't even remotely large enough to lift something the size and weight of a pony, much less allow them to tow a chariot with passengers and cargo, or do any of the other things Equestrian pegasi are commonly seen doing. And a full-grown warhorse stallion carrying a human rider, as in the classic mythological Pegasus? Definitely not without heavy-duty magic as a booster.)
Anyway – that's not to say you can't use those ideas as part of your story; it's just that if these are really distinctive features of the ponies in your version of Equestria, then it needs to be set up and explained so that your reader grasps the significance of it and understands why the distinctions are being made; otherwise, the natural reaction is going to be "tailfeathers? Ponies don't have tailfeathers; what's she talking about?"