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“That’s what I don’t get. What is it about a pretty face that makes it so irresistible?” The young drake paused, staring longingly at the gorgeous unicorn. As he focused more on the image of Fleur Dis Lee, his imagination got the better of him, causing his heart to palpitate rapidly. “How does one approach somepony who gives off this vibe of being so…” he paused again, unconsciously licking his lips, “...untouchable?”

Spike and Rainbow Dash are bored. It seems they've done everything there is to do in Canterlot. But when Spike suddenly spots the exotically beautiful Fleur Dis Lee with her friends, an idea sprouts. What will the pair have in store for Fleur?

Note: Gamble Fish was an inspiration for this particular story.

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What will the pair have in store for Fleur?

Five bucks on sex.





I'm sorry, I'm an asshole.:facehoof:
This looks intriguing, I'll have a proper look soon.

That trick is genius and I gonna have to try that.

lol, you changed the coverart

"You kissed Fleur Dis Lee ! What am I CHOPPED HORSE LIVER?":raritycry:

"Rarity, Want to know what's in the bag. . .?":moustache:

Oh Spikey !:raritystarry:

SPIKE!:facehoof:

The Ol Bag & Egg trick ! Nice !:rainbowlaugh:

5335958
I felt this was a much better fit than the previous one. :)

5335348
Honestly it could work. But I'd be cautious...hahaha

5334993
Mwahaha! Those 5 bucks are mine now, bro!!! Mwahahahaha.

5334978
The fact that you laughed out loud truly touched the deepest parts of my blood organ.

Well played indeed. As always, it boils down to supply and demand.

5336006
Wow. I actually laughed hard at this comment. You, sir, deserve a penny. But not just any penny... you shall be given the PENNY RED.

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Outstanding work! This, I found, was quite entertaining.

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5336125
Thanks, Biker_Dash! Gonna put that one on my Boy Scouts sash!

.....okay, I was never in the Boy Scouts.

5336280 I was... till I ate a Brownie

i don't think i've ever laughed at something that hard in a good while. Its so good. All the build up. the nonsensical madness that it culminated into. bravo good writer. bravo.

“Do you promise to give me a kiss right after I show you the gift?”

“I will remind you, baby dragon, that a gift is meant to be received unreciprocated. Demanding a kiss in return is a barbaric gesture.” Fleur challenged heatedly.

Ew she's right. I'm surprised she didn't turn him down diddly squat.
This is honestly disgusting behavior coming from Spike.

5336577 In fairness, he's a dragon. They're avaricious creatures.

5336593
True.
But even so, I'm surprised Fleur went through with her promise. I guess when hanging around with Fancy Pants, she gained a sense of honor.
(Is FP considered to be honorable? I don't really remember him from that Rarity in Canterlot episode.)

5336600 He's an open minded fellow. I'm not sure "honourable" is really the word for it, but he's certainly tolerant and considerate of other people.

5336577
Well noted. Spike questioned his behavior for a second, but he totally dismissed it. I agree, he was acting pretty disgusting.

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5336593

Thanks for reading, guys!!

5336610
Well at least I didn't cause any offense. You did pretty much meant to write him that way, eh?


5336606
Yeah that sounds like him.

But....But isn't her name Fleur De Lis?
Not Fleur Dis Lee?

5336865
Wikia states it is Fleur Dis Lee.
Fleur Dis Lee@Wikia

I'm always up for some well-written fics about Spike and Rainbow Dash, be they shooting the breeze or getting caught up in misadventures.


5336577
Rainbow Dash ain't much better.

If anypony had demanded a kiss from her in return for a gift, she’d have knocked him out with a kick straight to the teeth.

A rude and half-assed attempt at manipulation is one thing, but violence is far more serious.

5337222
Also true. I won't deny that.

Bravo sir, bravo.

5337046 Oh, it's her cutie mark that's Fleur De Lis. Weird.

This plot and method of eggcecution was simply shell shocking, there is no yoke about it, spike was certainly walking on eggshells with the risk he was taking, if fleur wasn't so controlled I'm sure spike would have been scrambled under hoof by her, I geuss the rest of the day will be sunny side up for our hard boiled hero.

I'm not sorry.

Nice! There is something fun about, Spike and Rainbow, hanging out. More stories like this are always welcomed. Keep it up!:moustache::rainbowlaugh:

I barely followed this...but once i got it, pretty sure I was howling for a good solid few minutes. Well done sir, well done indeed. A way of making the untouchable, perfectly within reach, and thus dispelling the mystique and intimidation...in short, it's all in our heads, and we can all do it, provided we have the mindset and the whit. :rainbowkiss:

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

5337896
This is one of the best comments I've every read in all my time writing.

You shall be awarded "The Trophy".
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5338048
The fact that you learned something from this gives me chills. Thanks for this awesome comment, my friend. :) glad you had a fun time with it.

5338945
You think this story is up to par with Equestrian Daily? Thanks for the consideration. Your comment gave me a nice boost in my confidence as an author. :)

Dat logic tho

And here I was expecting the bag to hold something along the lines of
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I could easily see this popping up on equestria daily.
Nice work.:twilightsmile:

You should really think about a sequel to this, were Fleur, actually goes after Spike to find out more about the very interesting dragon that just got over on her, and Spike finds himself with a very intrigued and sexy mare! :moustache:

It's not Rainbow Dash, but would still be a great story to right and read!:twilightsmile:

I finally figured out where I saw that trick from. It took a while, but I believe you got it from the manga Gamble Fish.

FALLOUT MOISES: untouchable ... Untouchable!!!!! I will show you Untouchable :flutterrage: (charge at Fleur dis Lee)
Fleur dis Lee: what are you- ahhhh
(FALLOUT MOISES push Fleur dis Lee)
FALLOUT MOISES: come here b**h :pinkiecrazy:
Fleur dis Lee: AHHHH SOMEPONY HELP ME :fluttershbad:
Spike: she should give me a kiss if I save her?
Rainbow dash: Nah, I doubt it ... Hay what to go to sugarcube corner?
Spike: ok let's go :moustache:
(Rainbow dash and spike head sugarcube corner leaving Fleur to him)
Fleur dis Lee: when I should give you a kiss if you save me :raritydespair:
FALLOUT MOISES: oh that reminds me ... Kiss me :pinkiecrazy:
Fleur dis Lee: non!!!!!!!!!! :raritycry:

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