Story Description:
Lightning Shaker is a young pegasus colt who enjoys having adventures with his earth pony friend Dream Dasher. They spend most of their time in the Everfree Forest, training themselves to attain their goal of one day becoming Royal Knights. One day they meet a unicorn filly named Rare Charmer. On that day everything changed. This is the story of how a small group of foals became something more; of how they became the Knights of the Everfree.
This story takes place well before the start of the main series, though it will reference it at some points, and later installments will push forward into the timeline of the show.
Credits:
Cover Art: WIP by Inspira Flash, with additions by Opacare Stellata.
Editor-In-Chief: Opacare Stellata.
Author’s Note:
This is my first story on here, so I ask that you finish the prologue before making judgements. Tags may change as I write, I'm not entirely sure how far I want to go with some themes.
It was with great trepidation that I submitted this, I know my writing style isn't very good as I am very out of practice. I hope to improve as I go. Anywho, enjoy the read and please be gentle, though constructive criticism is welcome.
Has some errors but overall good I will be tracking this story to see where it goes.
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>>TheStallion Honestly that is a better comment than I was expecting ^^
I would like to add a thank you to everyone who has favorited. It means a lot to me. ^_^
538035 Your welcome fellow writer it is alway nice to support others
There were a few errors in the story, nothing major, but your biggest problem is punctuation. There's definitely not enough commas in the story, makes it a little hard to read.
Otherwise, it seems pretty good. I usually steer clear of OC stories, but I'll look after this one, if you decide to update it.
On a sidenote: to my knowledge, you can add more character tags as the story progresses(Max being 5). Not sure about categories though.
632184 I appologize profusely for this, but... oh my goodness thanks for the fav
ahem, yeah I know my writing is a bit... rusty, that's part of the reason I started this, and I am aware my grammar has suffered honestly I never know when to use commas (I honestly feel I use them too often) I guess it can’t be avoided, I’ll have to write more chapters. Thank you again for the fav and the kind words.
632601 No probs at all. I read that you found the courage to post your first story and, knowing how hard that time is, decided to check it out. And honestly, the story is pretty interesting thus far. As such, I'll keep track of the story and comment, and maybe help from time to time. At least when I'm less sleepy, sorry.
Great clopfic!......wait ,no that was in my other tab......only action ,and characters talking what is this ? I can't believe this, any person with a bit of dignity would write a clopfic ,just kidding .
Nice dialog between characters would of loved more of that. Writing out the stories they're talking about ,and getting into the characters personalities javascript:smilie('
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I'll keep watching , can't wait to see more. I'd comment with something a bit more interesting ,but my little bitty...I mean really ,really big brains tuckered out.javascript:smilie('
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633965 heh I promised myself I wouldn't write any clop... which means I will likely have written one within the next couple months. Thank you for the comment, and the watch. Have a scootacute!
Made some reccomended changes to chapter one, and I promise I am working on chapter two, I'm just being really nit picky about it.
Whew, ok finally got this published, sorry this took so long, I've been really nit picky about it. Still feels off to me, but I don't know what to do with it. Hope you guys enjoy, also yep, totally adding the Dark tag to the story for this. But that'll be remedied by Scootacute!
I like this. Definitely reads very well and flows just right, even with the slight timeskip in the middle.
I can't wait to see what's in store for those two, there's certain to be a lot of stuff to happen I imagine...
Yeah, and it's almost as if I wrote in a reason for Lightning and Solid to meet... weird.
Because I suddenly had inspiration, here is chapter three, about two weeks sooner than I expected to write it.
Stupid brain. 
I have plans already for chapter four, but I swear to Celestia I'm gonna give give it some time before I start. 
...ok that's a lie. 
Enjoy folks.
Anypony else notice that each new chapter is longer than the previous? It's like an avalanche of words, just keeps getting bigger.
Totally noticed its getting longer with each Chapter in wordcount. That's a Good Thing, since all of us who love to write tend to love reading.
I really do enjoy this chapter, it reads so well and has so much to it.
709525 Glad you enjoyed it, I'll probably end up writing more here soon despite my plans.
I have a plot point that I might throw in soon, but I worry that it may just end up feeling really lame and stupid. 
We'll see how it goes.
Whew, and another chapter is done, this time I mean it when I say I'm taking a break for atleast a few days, my hands are sore.
What's that? You want another chapter? Sorry Can't hear you, ahm asleep.
PS, the tradition of longer chapters continues... where shall it end? Whatever shall we do!?
Mmmm...loved this latest installment. Very good story going so far, and shall await more when you can write it up.
758089 Wow, considering how amazing I find your writing I take that as the highest of compliments.
And yes, Comp 1 and Comp 2 I was the only person in my class in college that passed each the first time through. 
Have a Scootacute.
Do like. The beginning kind of starts off a little slow, but if you pound through it, the story opens up nicely.
758271 heehee, pound throught it. /gutterbrain
You do me an honor with giving me suggestions. 
The story is finally starting to develop into something I really anticipate. I kinda want to draw Little Gear's leg now, just for practice XD
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What, the 'crutch leg' she likely has? I suppose that would be amusing to see recreated.
765707 Ah think she means her prosthetic.
I might take a crack at it later today, no promises that it'll be any good, but I can try.
Another chapter up, a little bit of mystery in this one... hope you all enjoy.
Also I broke the cycle of each chapter being longer than the last... does this spell doom for my story?!
Yeah, not likely the chapter just had everything it needed, if I had let it get to the next part it would have been somewhere around 9-10k words and I'm just not talented enought to write chapters like that, what do you think this is, Eternal ?
Well, there's another good cliffhanger left right there in the open.
Can't wait to see what happens next! 
Another chapter, hope you kiddies like it!
I'm glad I finally got to the point where Lightning is almost ready to leave the hospital, now the story can get on track.
What's that you ask, do I have plans? Oh ho, you're just going to have to wait to find out.
Anyway, enjoy, comment all that goodness. I enjoy the feedback, it's SO AWESOME! /)(＾ω＾ )(\
I just love making the Dashie face /)( ＾ω＾)(\
oh now this is just PERFECT. I now have something to make an elaboration on within my own fic...
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Great story, and it just seems to get better and better as it goes on. I shall have to say that it has gotten to be SO AWESOME! /)
Please please please tell me you have more in store soon~! X3 This is getting really -EXCITING~!
838974 I have more to write, define soon.
Inb4 the Trollestia haters, enjoy this chapter as I leave you kids on another cliffhanger type situation.
Trollestia for best Ruler.
This was a highly enjoyable chapter, as usual it has me waiting on the tips of my hooves for the next one.
Im glad that Lighting ish out of the hospital
But sad that rare hasn't been in any chapters lately.....
913685 She's in the next chapter, I promise. I can't simply write her into scenes she's not in after all.
I can only write what the characters tell me to.
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Well new chapter is finally up, sorry for the delay. As I said in my blog, personal issues slowed it down and I am sorry.
Hope you all enjoy, let me know what you think of the developments.
Certainly has plenty of fun to come with all of this. Quite enjoyable and yet another great chapter to the story.
Yay baby dragons.
Always fun. :3
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Hi, I'm Inspira Flash! My mom is a fuh... futto... fudder greffer! She makes maps and atlases with my dad and he draws them and my sister is a big fat meanie-pants because she told me there was candy in the forest but she lied again and now I am sad :(
1019961 lol <3 Inspira is a fun character to write for.
1020000 Only problem now is the fact that he seems so calm in the little "intro" chapter I made for him. Gotta work on more of that >>;;
1053104 lol sorry, I went by your descriptions.
1054883 No it's cool. He didn't really have a personality yet when I wrote it. That was my attempt at fleshing him out. Now I have something else to go off of, and hopefully I can meld whatever I already have established with what you gave me to work with.
1056393 Oh cool, I was worried I had done something wrong.
Alright new chapter is up with some new questions and some answers, and yes I did in fact set the timeline story wise again obviously. Have fun reading.
Quite an entertaining chapter, we get more stuff about that 'dream world' and a few hints at a darker plot ahead. This is gonna be a blast!
That laughter.... >________________>
1153336>>1146812 Ah try, Ah try.
Dat silhouette. >>
xD Good chapter! Yay return of the mean dreams! Can't wait to see where all that foreshadowing leads. :3