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LilGuppy


MLP superfan and mermaid lover!

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Twilight needs to grow some blueberries for an upcoming potion, but Rainbow keeps stealing them from right under her muzzle! When Pinkie Pie stops by, she helps her think up a plan that will put a stop to this once and for all!

(Contains inflation. While this has no clop or sexual content, the plot may have content that can be perceived as fetish fuel. Read at your own discretion.)

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Best blueberry story I've read in a while.

Nice! I love it!! :D

That was actually quite an enjoyable little read. ^^

It was not fair that Twilight and Pinkie did that.
Twilight: But She was eating My blueberries'
Me: BUT THAT IS NO EXCUSE TO TURN MY FAVORITE PONY INTO A BLUEBERRY!!!!

5442132 I'm sure Rainbow will find a way to get a little...revenge. :pinkiecrazy:

Congratulations on writing this story and it's success. :derpytongue2:

I have to say, the dialogue is wonderful and the personality of each pony is clear and in-line with what is considered canon. The "Cupcakes" reference was funny and I feel that it fit right in to how Pinkie would refer to it. The writing itself isn't perfect—but it's not in any story—so that's okay.

Speaking of breaks in sentences, I just have some friendly and healthy advice to give when it comes to a sentence like this:

Rainbow could swear she could feel the, from what she could remember from Pinkie's rambling speech earlier, blueberry juice boiling madly inside her due to the heat of her anger.

I would suggest using what's called an Em Dash, like this:

Rainbow could swear she could feel the—from what she could remember from Pinkie's rambling speech earlier—blueberry juice boiling madly inside her due to the heat of her anger.

The reason being, is that commas are used to pause when someone is reading. Em dashes encourage the reading and the sentence to continue to flow in the quick way that breaks in sentences are often used.

Now, I know Em Dashes aren't on most keyboards, and that I wouldn't suggest hyphens(-) either, but there is a way to type them in on most systems.

Microsoft Windows: Hold down the "Alt" key and press these four numbers on your tic-tac-toe numberpad (It personally doesn't work for me with the top row of numbers.) : 0 1 5 1 (Hold Alt, press 0 1 5 1, let go of Alt)

Apple Macintosh: It's a bit easier, as you only have to hold down these keys in order and let go of them: Shift, Option, -
Note: (Option, - , will give you an en dash, which is a bit shorter, but not typically used for breaks in sentences. I doubt anyone would be that particular, though.)

Otherwise, I found this story enjoyable to read. It's fun and delightful, just like the show. I hope the sequel you announced is just as good. :pinkiesmile:

P.S. Please help, I'm starting to sound like an English/Composition professor! :raritydespair:

5561783 Thanks, Sarah! ^^ Coincidentally, a couple weeks ago, we learned about dashes and hyphens in grammar at school. It's confusing as heck to tell when to use dashes, parentheses, or commas. Grrrrrr! :flutterrage:

Once again, thanks for the help! I can't wait for your continuation of Babypoofed. If you need help, just let me know! :twilightsmile:

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You're welcome. Punctuation is tricky; I still try to stay away from semicolons.

I'll be willing to help whenever I can. I try to check Fimfiction every couple of days. College starting back up hasn't left me much free time to work on Babypoofed, unfortunately. As for help, maybe we could chat and brainstorm sometime when we're both free? It wouldn't specifically have to be for Babypoofed either. We can talk about it later if you're interested.

I hope things are going well with you, stay padded! :heart:

5635925 I second that!

5636132 I'm sorry, but what does that have to do with this?

5636214 Thanks for the idea!

That's certainly one solution! It may be a bit sticky, but it certainly seems to have gotten the job done. :pinkiesmile: (Rainbow, you will look back at this and laugh one day... or today if this is anything to go by! :rainbowlaugh: (Can't help but laugh at the idea of the rainbow emote laughing at rainbow's situation. :derpytongue2:)

Though, there was this one fanfic I heard of..."

i always knew pinkie could break the fourth wall.

I did not know this was a thing.

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There are many things in this world, some that we know, some that we don't. Some that make sense, some that do not. But we must all learn to embrace the true nature of a thing and except it as one of us.

We must become... a thing.

This has been A Moment with LilGuppy99.

6821067 Hehehe! ^^ Glad you liked it!

6828064 Lol! I'm posting another story up soon. It's not an inflation story, but I would love it if you would give it a read when its first chapters are published. :twilightsmile:

6830301 Oh no! :( Hopefully everything works out!

6833696 I'm sure you'll get it fixed. ^^

6845167 Lol! :rainbowlaugh: I even started laughing before the song started.
Big Fox: Okay, kids! But I'm gonna have to sing a song.
Kids: :rainbowderp:

But yeah, totally a song Pinkie would sing! Dashie wouldn't even have to be in the situation she is in the story. Pinkie can literally sing it to her whenever she wants! XD

6856078 That's great! :D

6857031 Lol, good, I didn't see a pun. How does it need to be more "MLP related?"

6884921 Hehe, thanks. ^^

Poor dash. she must be feeling pretty BLUE.:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

7168387 OOOOOOOOH the puns! XD

The next one shot should be Rarity turning into a big fluffy marshmallow! :rainbowkiss: Maybe she accidentally turns into one by one of Twilight's spells.

Mr. Dahl would be proud :ajsmug: This was an enjoyable, short read with lots of laughs and an occasional tense moment. Have an upvote! :twilightsmile:

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Thank you so much! :heart:

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Did not expect to see you here

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I’m everywhere, muhehe :rainbowwild:

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