When all is lost
“Twilight!”
Cadance is running after Twilight after she bolted out of the restaurant. She has no idea what happened to her back there but whatever it was it wasn’t pleasant. Cadance saw a side of Twilight she’s never seen before. Sure, she was obsessive as a filly and always shown great interest in things she didn’t know but this was on an entirely different level. It was as if something was physically forcing her to act, as if it were an instinct. That matters little to Cadance right now, she just wants to make sure Twilight is ok.
Twilight doesn’t know what to say to Cadance. She doesn’t even understand it herself. She almost has an uncontrollable need to learn about Anon. There’s something about him she can’t stop herself from reacting to. He’s a well of untapped knowledge the likes Equestria has never seen and yet she cannot know it. Anon barely even knows it himself and that makes it all the more unbearable. Whenever she’s around him she gets this craving, to learn, to know.
He’s so different from everything she knows and yet he functions. Just the thought of him alone makes that feeling deep within her rise. She buries it as best as she can but it always comes back. Twilight’s legs get tired and she stops running. She looks up to see she’s at the park. She used to come here with her parents a lot when she was a filly. It feels like it’s been so long since she’s been normal. She wonders what it would’ve been like for her if she never decided to pursue magic? Was there a chance Anon and her could’ve been friends?
She closes her eyes tightly as tears start to roll down her cheeks.
“Twilight...” Cadance is standing behind Twilight as she cries. “Twilight, what’s going on?”
“I don’t know.” Twilight breaks down. “I can’t stop thinking about him. He haunts my dreams when I’m asleep and is always on my mind when I’m awake. I try every waking moment to find a way to make him forgive me but every step I think is one forward ends up being two steps back.”
“Why? Why are you pushing yourself so far to be forgiven?” Cadance asks confused.
Twilight looks at Cadance briefly just before she looks off into the park. An old memory of her playing by herself, all the other fillies and colts ignoring her, treating her like an outcast. She takes in a long breath and then lets out a sad sigh.
“~When I was a filly, I knew no wrong. I thought I was fine, when I was alone. I spent my life on a shelf, learning about all but myself. When I was a filly, I knew no wrong.~”
Her memories rapidly shift to when Anon first came to her home. She remembers how things used to be before they got bad.
“~He was all alone, scared of the world. I took him in and gave him my best. We talked all night and helped with his stress. I felt I could call him my friend! But something happened, one I can’t explain. He was all alone, scared of the world.~”
She winces as that day fills her mind. The emotions of it all taking hold as she belts out her requiem of sorrow.
“~I took everything from him, his humanity. I stripped his sanity and made him afraid! So how can I ask for forgiveness, with all that I’ve done! I deserve all that comes and all that’s right. For what I did cannot contest, all the pain laid on my chest. Strip me bare for what I’ve done! I’ll take it all, till I’m gone.~”
Twilight finally calms down a bit as everything comes together.
“~When I was a filly, I knew no wrong. Strip me bare for all that I’ve done, until I’m gone.~”
Once the last note rings out Twilight lets out an exhausted sigh as her last tear hits the dirt. Cadance can only stand there with wide eyes after having heard what Twilight said. Everything she spoke of is true and yet Cadance can’t accept this. This is too much for one pony to take. She can’t allow Twilight to feel like this, she needs to know that her pain will only make this all the more difficult for her.
“Twilight, you can’t keep putting the world on your shoulders. You need to take a break and learn to come to terms with what you’ve done. How can you expect others to forgive you when you cannot even forgive yourself?”
There’s a long eerie silence the fills the air before Twilight speaks.
“Cadance, I don’t think I want to be forgiven.”
“What?”
Twilight looks up at Cadance. Her expression is blank and her eyes show defeat.
“I deserve this. After everything I’ve done, there is no forgiveness for somepony like me.”
“How can you sa-”
“I need to go back to the library. Thanks for spending time with me.”
Cadance is left there mid-sentence as Twilight walks back towards Canterlot castle. This is serious. This isn’t just about forgiveness anymore. Twilight is falling into a pit of despair that she cannot get out of. Cadance could see the hurt on her face as her own friend gave her that look of anger and disgust in the restaurant. She’s all alone in the world right now and it seems there’s only one thing that can save her.
Cadance briefly looks back towards the restaurant where Anon was. She has one day until she meets him at his party. Until then, she needs to figure out a way to convince him to at least hear out Twilight’s plea. Otherwise, Cadance doesn’t know what may happen to Twilight.
“So how does this work?” Maud asks Anon.
“Easy. Just follow my lead.”
Anon and Maud are center stage. All eyes are on them as the judges sit at their table ready to spot any flaws. Then again, considering how different their dance is when compared to ponies, they're not really too sure what to judge their dance on. Still, Maud is on her hind legs so she can attempt to match Anon’s height. Anon has one hand at the small of Maud's back, while she has one hoof on his shoulder and the other in his hand. They’re perfectly positioned for a simple dance.
“I hope you know how to waltz.” Anon says.
Maud nods. “I do. Pinkie and I went to the same class.”
Anon takes that as a measure of confidence as he takes his first step. Maud seems to follow what’s happening as she takes her steps in kind, thankfully she wasn’t bluffing, she’s as graceful as Pinkie is while dancing. Which is odd because despite her rock like personality, she’s very fluid with every step she takes. Sure, her face is still barren but Anon gets the feeling she’s having a great time.
“You know, I’m surprised you’re this good at dancing.” Anon mentions.
“Considering how different you are to a pony, so am I.”
Anon chuckles. “I guess you’re right. Do the Pie’s have a natural talent to easily adapt?”
Maud nods. “The rock farm can be harsh and learning to adapt is important.”
There’s talk of a rock farm again. Pinkie didn’t give him much information on that but he can assume it’s a touchy subject for her.
“Yes, I hear about this rock farm from time to time but Pinkie never talks about it.”
“I’m not surprised. It’s not a place for her, she’s always been a social butterfly. As farms usually go, there’s not much around.”
Anon dips Maud briefly before bringing her back up to his chest.
“Yeah, Pinkie does like being social. I honestly feel bad that she likes hanging around me so much. You know, because I actually don’t like being around ponies all too much.”
“I know how you feel but when Pinkie wants me to meet somepony... Well, she’s my sister.”
“I think I understand how you feel, Maud. I don’t know, when it comes to Pinkie, I can’t tell her no. She really did a lot for me when I first came to Ponyville and I can’t thank her enough for that.”
“You’re a nice guy.” Maud says.
“Many ponies would disagree.”
“That’s because they never took the time to get to know you.”
Anon falls silent at that. Nothing else really needs to be said as the music slowly dies down and their dance comes to an end.
“This was fun.” Anon says.
“Agreed.”
Anon and Maud look over at the judges. They scored a thirty eight out of fifty. They just look at each other and shrug. They weren’t here to win anyway. They walk back over to Pinkie that has her jaw on the floor.
“Can you believe those ponies! How dare they give you such a low score!” Pinkie looks towards the judges. “Hey! You ponies blind! They should’ve at least scored a forty five!”
Anon just shakes his head while the judges try their best to ignore Pinkie. Before Pinkie can say anything else, Maud places a hoof onto her wither.
“I had fun, Pinkie. That’s all that matters.”
Pinkie looks from Maud up to Anon.
“Yeah, it was fun. We never entered to win anyways, right?” Anon adds.
“I guess.” Pinkie looks down.
Anon looks over to a clock, it’s starting to get late but Anon has one last idea before calling it a night.
“How about I cook you ladies up some sweets? How does that sound?”
Maud notices a small sparkle in Pinkie's eye.
“Oooh! What are you planning to make, Nonny?”
Pinkie disappears from where Maud was looking and into Anon’s arms. Startling them both as Anon quickly grabs Pinkie so she doesn’t fall. Once he catches his breath does he look at the pink mare in his arms.
“Maybe something new.” He says. “Come on, let’s go.”
Anon looks down at Maud and gives a shrug. It seems Anon doesn’t like seeing Pinkie sad either. It puts Maud’s heart at ease knowing there’s someone out there that’s looking after her sister. Even if her sister is a bit weird.
Anon walks into the store and sets Pinkie down.
“Alright, let’s not get too crazy. Bonbon and Lyra are probably trying to get some sleep.”
Both Pinkie and Maud nod as he waves for them to follow. He leads them through the shop and into the kitchen in the back. Yet what he finds there isn’t what he expected. Bonbon and Lyra are here, stuffing their faces with various sweets. They look his way when they hear the door open, each showing a bit of shock at his entrance.
“Anown?” Bonbon asks past her full mouth.
Anon closes his eyes, takes a deep breath and one step backwards to exit the kitchen. Once the kitchen doors close does he exhail.
“Anon, is somet-” Anon holds up his hand to stop Pinkie.
He waits a few moments and walks back into the kitchen. Bonbon and Lyra are cleaned up now but the place is still covered in various sweets.
“I’ve brought company.” Anon says and shows Pinkie and Maud into the kitchen.
Lyra looks at Anon, the mares, how he’s dressed and then quickly back at Bonbon.
“I thought you said Anon went to the castle!?”
Bonbon twiddles her hooves. “Well, no, I said he probably went to the castle.”
Lyra lets out a huff and pouts some. Anon just shakes his head as he looks at Bonbon.
“Care to explain this.” Anon waves at the entirety of the kitchen.
Bonbon chuckles. “Well, when Lyra knew you were gone we thought eating some sweets would help.”
Well, they’re owners too, it’s not like they can’t eat the products.
“Alright, just clean up this mess. I’m about to cook.”
“Is it something new?” Bonbon asks.
“Maybe. Anyways,” Anon looks at Maud and Pinkie and points to a small table in the kitchen. “Get comfortable.”
They do so as he walks to one of the stoves and thinks over what he wants to make. So many things but as Anon looks over at Pinkie and Maud, he finds one thing that comes to mind. Rock candy. He’s sure Maud would appreciate that.
“It’s nice having your company, Fluttershy. Everyone has gone off to do their own thing and I’m left here by my lonesome.”
“I know how that feels. Though being alone doesn’t always have to be a bad thing.”
“For someone as old as I, being alone is more of a punishment than anything else.”
Fluttershy thinks that over. Celestia has been around for a long time. Not to mention her time alone when Luna was banished to the moon.
“I guess I can understand.”
Celestia notices she’s putting a damper on the mood.
“Though don’t let an old mare talk about her past. How have you been doing?”
“Great! I love the garden with all the animals. I’ve also made good friends with Blueblood.”
“It’s always nice to hear when my nephew makes new friends.”
“Yeah... Princess, do you mind if I asked a personal question?”
“Sure.”
“Um... Is Blueblood Luna’s son?”
Celestia can’t stop herself as she laughs a bit at that. She understands where Fluttershy is coming from but that’s not the case.
“Sorry for laughing, Fluttershy. It’s just amusing to think my sister would bear child. No, Blueblood was adopted by me. For one reason or another he called me his aunt and since then he was my nephew.”
“Oh, so Blueblood isn’t really a prince?”
“No, that’s just a title he’s quite fond of.”
“Wow. There’s so much that I don’t know about him. We’ve talked a lot but he really doesn’t talk too much about himself. Just about the garden, Anon or me.”
“Blueblood can be very shy when he first meets somepony.”
“I usually don’t like meeting new ponies either but Blueblood is very sweet.”
A silence builds between the two of them as they eat their meals. It’s not really awkward for either of them. Well, maybe a little awkward.
“Fluttershy, may I ask a personal question of my own?”
“Of course.”
“What do you think of Anon?”
That catches Fluttershy off guard.
“To be honest, I don’t know him at all. I always wanted to get to know him but after everything that happened in Ponyville it never worked out. Though I’m happy he’s been as willing as he has to open up to me. It must be very hard for him to face his past, even if I wasn’t the worst of it.”
“Anon is complicated.” Celestia admits with a sigh. “It’s hard for even me to know what is on his mind. Yet when he looks at me it’s as if he can see right through me. I’ve never known a creature like him, other than Discord perhaps, though not for the same reasons. Discord used his powers to manipulate others, Anon uses it to guide them away.” Celestia closes her eyes. “He’s come a long way from where he was. Maybe he doesn’t see, maybe no pony else sees it, but I can. He’s recovering slowly and starting to live his life.”
“He does look awfully happy when you’re around.”
Celestia feels her heart flutter at hearing Fluttershy say that. For some reason just hearing that makes her feel as if there’s hot air in her chest.
“Do you truly believe that?” Celestia asks.
Fluttershy nods. “Of course! You and your sister are really important to him. I don’t know if he says it but I could see it when you three were together that one time.”
“Well, we did have a bit too much to drink.” Celestia admits with a blush.
“True but Anon trusted you three enough to drink. I think that says plenty on how much he cares about you two.”
What Fluttershy says is true. Anon does tend to let things play out more when he’s with both sisters. Celestia still remembers when Anon would push them away and refuse to follow along with whatever they were doing. Now, now he simply trusts them enough to keep his best interests and feelings in mind with what they do. Celestia feels an ache in her heart. It happens whenever she thinks of Anon when he’s not around.
“He means a lot to me as well. Before I met him things weren’t this complicated or fun. He’s changed so much, not just himself but both my sister and I as well. Even the ponies have changed, if only a little. It was not too long ago when seeing my sister sit on the throne was enough to stun anypony that walked in, now it doesn’t even phase them.” Celestia looks at Fluttershy. “Anon may seem emotionless at times but I swear to you that he feels more deeply than anypony could ever imagine. He’s just too afraid to show it.”
“You’re not a bad pony.” What Anon said to her when he was intoxicated enters Fluttershy’s mind.
“I just wish I could get to know him as a friend.” Fluttershy admits.
“Give it time. I’m sure Anon will be the one to approach you when the time is right.”
“I hope so. He seems like a very interesting person. I mean,” She looks up at Celestia. “If you’re his friend, he must be amazing.”
Celestia feels a warmth on her muzzle.
“Well, as odd as it may seem, I think what I like about him the most is who he is. I wouldn’t want to change that for anything.”
“Whatcha makin?” Pinkie asks as she peeks over the counter at Anon.
“A secret.”
Anon grabs a few things off the counter and drops it into the pot.
“I love secrets. So what is it?”
“You’ll find out in about ten minutes.”
“Why so long?”
“Perfection has no time limit.”
Anon adjusts the flame so the boil is lower. He walks over to a cabinet and grabs a few more items. He sets them beside the pot and takes a second to think over how he’ll present them to ponies. Sure he can put it on a plate but that seems lazy. Not to mention if this does end up being sold at the shop, then he needs to make it earth pony friendly. It’s a constant thought he has when creating new things for his customers to enjoy. If it’s too hard for an earth pony to eat, then he doesn’t make it.
A spark of an idea comes to mind. He remembers those weird candy necklace things. He’s sure if he keeps the rock candy small enough, it’ll fit just fine. Not to mention they can easily be carried and eaten by earth ponies. Anon takes some string out of the cabinet as well, while Pinkie returns to her sister and the two other mares.
“Anon looks concentrated.” Pinkie remarks as all four of them watch as he gives his full attention to what he’s creating.
“Yeah, he’s thinking about how it’ll be served to a wider range of ponies.” Bonbon says.
“Why would he think that?” Maud asks.
“Anon is always thinking of ways to make his products easier to eat.” Lyra comes in. “He knows it’s hard for earth ponies to use things that unicorns take for granted. So if his sweets can’t be easily eaten by earth ponies then he tends to drop the item.”
“That’s rather considerate of him.”
“He’s spent many hours reworking how we sell things. Even the bags we give to ponies can easily be carried by earth ponies. Honestly, I’ve never really given it as much thought as he has.” Bonbon says.
“So what do you think he’s making?” Pinkie comes in.
“Now that’s something I can’t answer. It could literally be anything.”
“Whatever it is, it smells nice.” Lyra adds.
“We should let him work. So what were you girls up to? I know Anon told me that you took him out to meet a friend. Is this her?” Bonbon looks over at the gray mare.
“Yup! This is my sister Maud.”
“It’s nice to meet you.” Bonbon extends her hoof to Maud.
“Same.” Maud shakes hooves with her.
“So why are you two dressed so nice if this was just a meeting for friends?” Lyra comes in.
“I made a reservation at a fancy restaurant. My sister’s never been to a restaurant in Canterlot before.”
Lyra can’t help but feel a bit jealous. The thought of going out to a fancy dinner with Anon sounds great! She would be dressed in one of her silk dresses. She then looks up at Anon while he’s still dressed in his suit. She feels a large blush on her muzzle as she covers her face. Bonbon can practically hear Lyra’s thoughts as she just shakes her head and returns her attention to Pinkie and her sister.
“So what else did you do? It’s rather late, so did you go somewhere else?”
“Pinkie took us to a dance competition. We didn’t win but it was fun.”
“Oh? I didn’t know Anon could dance.”
“He’s great at it!” Pinkie speaks up. “I would say he could do is professionally if he wanted.”
“I wouldn’t say that.” Anon’s voice breaks the four out of their conversation. “I’m decent but where I’m from there’s much better.”
“Are you done?” Pinkie asks with excitement.
Anon nods, holding something behind his back.
“Can you four close your eyes?” They aren’t sure what he’s planning but they do as they’re told. Each of them can feel something being places on their necks. “Alright, open.”
When they open their eyes they all look down to see a necklace of sorts made of candy. The candy itself was as clear as any gemstone and yet they smelled of strawberry. This was candy? Bonbon hasn’t seen something like this before. Anon can see that Lyra and Bonbon are surprised but when he looks over at Pinkie and Maud he spots something else. They’re both shocked. The weirdest part is that Maud’s eyes are fully open, instead of her usual lazed look.
“Uh... Do you like them?” Anon asks unsure about their reaction.
“Y...” Pinkie is at a loss for words.
Anon made them a rock candy necklace. How did he even know how to do it? Sure it’s not as extravagant as what Pinkie and her sister make but Pinkie didn’t even know he knew how to make this candy. She just thought it was a Pie family recipe.
“Anon, where did you learn to make this?” Maud asks.
“It’s just one of the many things humans have made. Is that a bad thing? I know you like rocks so I thought you’d like something like this.”
“It’s great... Just a bit surprising is all.” She looks up at him, her eyes back to the usual lazed look. “Pinkie and I make rock candy too. Just... We make it for a different reason.”
Anon has a feeling that it’s personal.
“Oh, well I hope you like them. I’m not sure how you and Pinkie make them but this was my first time making it so I hope they turned out alright.”
Anon looks over to find Pinkie is already eating hers with a large smile and tears running down her face.
“It’s so good!” Pinkie compliments. Her eyes then snap open. “We should cook together sometime and I can teach you how we make rock candy!”
“So there’s a difference?”
Maud nods. “Yes, I can tell that you used various sugars in place of rocks.”
“Rocks?”
“They are a special kind of rock. Edible. It adds a slightly different texture to the candy but overall they are largely the same.”
“The same?!” Pinkie shouts. “Can’t you taste the finesse, Maud? It’s almost like I can taste every grain of sugar.”
“My palate was never as refined as yours, Pinkie.”
“Well, I don’t think it deserves that high of praise.” Anon speaks out. “I could probably improve in a few areas.”
“No way! It tastes perfect!” Pinkie insists.
Anon doesn’t know how to take these compliments, so he turns over to look at Lyra and Bonbon.
“What do you two think?”
“I agree with Pinkie, they taste great.” Lyra says.
“These would sell well with kids.” Bonbon adds.
Anon looks over at a clock. It’s starting to get late now and these compliments are making him feel uncomfortable.
“Look at the time. You two should hurry back to your hotel before it gets too late.”
Maud looks over at the clock and takes note of the time.
“You’re correct.” She looks over at Pinkie. “Let’s go back.”
“Sure thing!” Pinkie gets out of her seat, walks over to Anon and wraps him in a hug. “Thanks again for meeting my sister.”
Anon feels a bit uncomfortable but settles a bit as he returns the hug.
“Yeah, it was fun. Now go and get some sleep.”
She lets go of him and starts walking towards the kitchen door.
“Let’s go, Maud.”
Maud and Anon look at each other for a brief moment.
“Bye.” Maud says.
“Bye.”
That’s all that’s needed to be said as she walks out of the kitchen with Pinkie. Oddly enough Anon noticed she hadn’t even eaten her necklace the entire time. Well, maybe she’s just a shy eater? Anon looks back over to Bonbon and Lyra.
“Well, I’m tired. I’ll be heading off to bed.”
“Just make sure it’s not our bed this time.” Bonbon jokes.
“I’ll keep that in mind.” He walks behind them and gives them both a hug. “Goodnight.”
“Goodnight.” They respond just as Anon gets up and walks away.
Pinkie and Maud are back in their room getting ready for bed.
“I never expected Anon to make us rock candy necklaces.” Pinkie says as she shimmies herself into bed.
“That was a pleasant surprise.” Maud adds.
Pinkie looks over at Maud as she pulls out a small box, still wearing her rock candy necklace.
“Why didn’t you eat yours?” She asks.
“I’ll eat it later.” Maud adds.
Maud opens the small box filled with her sister’s rock candy necklaces. She takes off the one Anon gave to her and also sets it inside. She closes the box and lays down in bed. This has been a great trip. However, there’s still something else on Maud’s mind.
“So, Pinkie... What happened between you and your friends?”
Pinkie lets out a sigh.
“Well, it’s a long story but it started when Anon moved in with me. I didn’t know it at the time but my friends did some really horrible things to him.”
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WOO! IT'S BACK! Now I've got something to be thankful for (besides Derpibooru, I mean).
Yay, progress~
Woo, thanksgiving!
what a nice surprise it was and its not even Christmas.
I pretty sure it would be "bear a child" or "bear children."
WOOHOO UPDATE
Yay. New Chapter!!!
Maud is going to hear it straight from the Pinkie mouth
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Erhmagosh! An update! can we expect more of this soon?
I'm honestly hoping when Cadance makes her plea, Anon will ask if she would ever forgive someone if they imprisoned her and tortured her. Would be such a twist for her to think about those words after the events at her wedding~
It's nice too see Tia is starting to realize the feelings she has for anon. Blushing alicorns are adorable.
Update! And now Cadance is gonna take a hand. And she should, Twilight is in a very bad place right now.
awesome holiday treat you provided us! thanks and have a great holiday!
Anon may rightfully have problems with Twilight but it's clear Twilight has mental problems and is trying to better herself.
If he refuses to at least to try and help Twilight when she at this incredibly dangerous point, that's really fucked up.
Happy Thanksgiving!!!
Does this mean you're gonna write more chapters?
NOOOOO! Both stories read and now caught up in 4 hours what am I going to do now!?!?
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Yeah, but two people seemlessly matching up in a moderately complex dance (one of them a first-attempt beginner) who're both so drunk they've reached the point where they can no longer form short term memories?
One person managing it once is believable, if quite improbable.
But the chances of TWO people AT THE SAME TIME and TOGETHER managing this are nearly (if not literally) astronomical.
Hell yea, can't wait for the next chapter. S***s gettin real.
You put in a bit of effort to make sure the word count for this chapter matched that of the last, didn't you?
And the wait for new chapters...begins.
Seriously though, glad to stumble on this story. I hope to see the backstory behind this soon.
7746797 Realistically he's not going to know or care to know(and you can't really blame him) that though. Sure she could desperately use the help but the person who was wronged is very rarely gonna try and see things from their abusers perspective.
As brutally honest as I may be,but Twilight really deserve it.Anon have no reason to care about her whatsoever and deserve to enjoy his life with the ones that he cares for instead of having to deal with her.
She tortured him,she got punished.The end.The best thing for both of them is to not see each other anymore in their entire life.In short,she should accept the fact that she actually hurt him and face the consequences aside from being a pathetic sod.
>tfw speaking from experience
Can't tell if Twilight has feelings for Anon that she herself doesn't know and that's why she's unstable. Her obsession with him is heading towards yandere levels. With all the potential love interests, makes you wonder who will make the first move?(place your bets.)
Anon, nice? Ha!
7746974 well there is the prequel story
Oooooo, an update! And a great one at that!
Well, at least Twilight admitted the wrongs she did. But Cadance is right - in order to be forgiven, she needs to forgive herself first. This is going to be a long, long recovery.
Fluttershy and her words of wisdom. You go, girl!
So, rock candy, huh? Let's see how much of a misunderstanding it creates down the line, even if Anon immediately admitted he didn't know what it meant to the Pie sisters
Sometimes I feel like I'm the only one who wants Anon to forgive Twilight and let them both heal from their experiences. I know what Anon went through is a serious issue, but I still feel it's better for both parties for forgiveness to be given; Anon went through the ringer with Twilight, and Twilight is going through it now herself as she is mentally torturing herself and is clearly unstable. It's not like they have to be friends or even see each other again, though that would be the ideal situation. Anon could find it in himself to forgive Twilight which would personally help him overcome and move past what was done to him, this would also allow Twilight to move on with her life as clearly she's not some villainous evil character, she clearly shows regret for her actions and wishes she could go back to being friends with Anon, so his forgiveness would help her move on and live her life a better pony with lessons learned, and after that they needn't ever see each other again should they choose so. But they will have both moved on with their lives.
That's my opinion anyway, seems like most of the comments here want Anon to really lay into Twilight all the time, and to turn Cadence against her in some way etc etc. I can see where that comes from, but this is my take on what I hope happens.
If Sarcastic Brony is reading this, stop, just write more horse words please. Nice chapter by the way, also other commenters please don't hate me please sorry sorry sorry.
7747456 I agree with you, but you have to remember that you have the benefit of an outside perspective, which is rather removed from what anon feels about the situation. So how you think he should act is not necessarily a thing he sees as an option. He hasn't seen Twilight's emotional anguish. We have.
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Ah. And here I was thinking it was one of those stories that has an established history that gets revealed through backstory/flashbacks. I'll go read the other story now.
7747527 Yeah I see your point, but I do understand this and this is why I said it is what I want Anon to do, not necessarily what I expect he will do given the situation. I just wanted to give my contrasting opinion since I tend to be at odds with most commenters on this story (and the last one based on my comment downvotes haha) who actually want Anon to be harsh and unforgiving. Anyway we'll see how it goes, I know it would be hard for Anon to forgive her but I feel it's usually the best option if you can find it in yourself.
WOOOHOOOOO an update for one of my favourite fics!
Man, Sarcastic. I got to ask who exactly are you gonna be shipping Anon with? Cause right now it's a contest between Maud, Celestia and Luna. Or are you going to decide to make a herd shipping?
Any way great chapter can't wait for the next one.
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she isn't singing is she?
Okay I try to don't judge it right now.
It is just that the moment they treat the musical numbers in the show as an actually magic moment in their world (story), it is starting to look sappy or overdone to me, but if I'm fair it is alright till now.
I like it, I don't remember every detail, but I like how you write your Characters, even characters like Cadance doesn't seems to simply try to solve everything by a simple order as far as I remember.
What would be important to me is, that Anon continues not to just do what Cadance probably woul ask him to do, if he was meant in her scene. I want to believe that he is willing to do at least so much because he wants to do it, or that Cadance is learning about what Twilight did, and that she can´t just change stuff.
I honestly nearly started to believe that Twilight is in love with Anon and just doesn't knows about it.
Soooo.....normally I'm happy if it isn't a herd story for once, but I probably would totally be okay with Maud and maybe Twilight later, if I like how the problem is solved. Maybe something happens that is letting Anon live longer on Celestias side later in the story.
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The last thing I'm hoping for, is either a sequel, or that he is getting together with Celestia, before the end of the story.
I hate it if a story is ending forever after they had their first kiss or something like that. I'm interessted in what happens after that. (....wild Filly appears.....wild Filly refuses to go away......wild Filly gets adopted
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This is going to fester until one of them offers peace. Carrying around that fear and hatred is doing Anon no good while trying to distract himself with life, and the self-flagellation Twilight is working towards is the other symptom. This whole thing is just too big to ignore. Their positions in society are also going to force the issue, and the longer they wait, the worse it could get. This isn't Earth, there's another set of rules, another pile of cause and effect to keep in mind. Hate and loathing gets you an ulcer on Earth, in Equestria they got Nightmare Moon.
7749838 I agree completely, forgiveness is the final part of the healing process in this scenario I think. Anyway I'll leave this discussion alone now, let's just see how it plays out.
7746912 Eh
In the words of a Wise WILDCAT
'DOH SHIIIIT'
Though I like bits of this new chapter, it could really use some work. You're Telling more than Showing how Anon is. It's like you're trying to say "Look at him! He's deep and troubled without a real reason!" but only slightly more subtly. The omnipotent p.o.v. probably isn't helping either. I think it could be much better if we got less "this is happening" and more "this is what they are doing and these are their thoughts, but with more subtlety and less absolution."
Either way, interesting chapter.
wow, haven't read something this great since nearly a month ago :3
i gave a feeling this'll go some way where anon befriends/pacifies |\|<=||-\//_-/|= and |_|_||\/_ does something and anon gets inbetween and shows eachother stuff or whatever and then they're friends. I also wonder how the thing with <=|||_-\/_ will play out
Such a cute fic, love it.
Anyone else betting that this'll end with Luna making good on her "King Anon" prank from the last story?
I really don't think Twilight should be forgiven because of WHY she is so sorry. In previous chapters it seemed like she was beginning to understand how she transgressed Anon, but then goes right back to "I MUST KNOW, Research!" At first she was only sorry because she had failed Celestia by not knowing everything about him, and now she's gone right back to her self decimating for failure to succeed. That is what Twilight's problem is, she cared more for appeasing Celestia than actually being friends with Anon. At this point she just needs a therapist and to stay away from Anon.
On a separate note, I can't stop wondering what's been happening with Rainbow Dash, Rarity, Applejack and Spike.
Sigh. That moment when you read all the current chapters. Also did Twilight just sing? that was pretty weird.
Man u have no idea how glad I am that this was updated merely 1 and a half weeks ago. I don't think I've ever been this engaged in a fic.
This has got to be one of my favourite fics ever and I've read a lot of good fics. It's that good I managed to finish the first one and this one within 2 days, and I'm a slow reader. I must say sarcastic brony, you have got to be one of if not the best writer Ive ever seen, for many reasons. I very much so look forward to reading on. You have my utmost respect
Huh. Didn't expect to read a musical number. That was odd, to say the least.
Either way, still a great story!
I think you meant "it"
okay so anon is willy wonka [confirmed] and all the slave pones are oompa loompas
edit: what the fuck was i on when i wrote this comment?