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Sketchy Changeling


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Hm.... I like. Favoriting and thumbs up.

Dammit, now I want a Jackalope as a pet. :applecry:

Have a fave and a like.

The long awaited Hate Thy Neighbor is finally here! And it... Is.... Glorious.

This was a great chapter, believable characters with great introductions. Though I did find one mistake.

facing the threat of being kicked out if I were to try anything funny I could still feed,

I feel like there should be a period between "funny" and "I".

First... off: I like this. Fave as usual but I'm surprised about Rusty. Never knew rabbits could speak. Sure Jackalopes are magical but I'm still surprised.

Where did Adrian get a talking jackalope? Will that be explained later?

Anyway, good start so far. I could see why they dislike each other, but there may also be misunderstandings that's going on between them. Whether they'll have the galls to talk it out or not is to be determined, but I'm curious to see where this will go. Looking forward to seeing more, keep being Sketchy.

This is Dudeler, signing off.

Ah yeeeah, I've been waiting for this. It's great so far, and I'm really interested to see where this setup takes us.

OK, thank you for putting this story. I absolutely love the characterization of the three so far.

HMB

Nice premise. I can tell that I'm going to love this instantly!

I like it! I will follow this story closely.
Can we expect regulary updates?

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Definitely. I'm actually gonna start working on the next chapter tomorrow.

Yep, I liked this. No suprise there. I'm certainly gonna follow this story to see where it goes.:twilightsmile: If I had one criticism, it'd be while Adrian's reasons for not wanting to move are made clear, you don't really address why Trixie and Chrysalis stay in this place.

So if Adrian lives on the second floor and Trixie and Chryssy on the third, what's on the ground floor? Just the lobby?

Finally, since I know how you like the comics and how you seem to be taking that continuity into account, I fully expect a cameo from Babs Seed somewhere down the line, since she previously bonded with Trixie and also lives in the city.

This is gonna be good. Thumb up and fave.

Oh yeah, I was right when I said I was gonna like this.

Y'know, if I were Adrian, I woulda paid a unicorn to cast a sound proofing spell over my ceiling.
Though I guess that'd defeat the plot somewhat...

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If I had one criticism, it'd be while Adrian's reasons for not wanting to move are made clear, you don't really address why Trixie and Chrysalis stay in this place.

Oops, that was my boo-boo.

So if Adrian lives on the second floor and Trixie and Chryssy on the third, what's on the ground floor? Just the lobby?

The lobby and the laundry room.

Finally, since I know how you like the comics and how you seem to be taking that continuity into account, I fully expect a cameo from Babs Seed somewhere down the line, since she previously bonded with Trixie and also lives in the city.

...

:raritywink:

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Apologies in advance for the incoming fangirling.

Thanks! That means a lot coming from you! I really like your stories! Thanks for the comment!

Ahem. Look forward to hearing from you again.

well, as I can tell they all hate each other, wonder how long till that change?

Very nice start. That being said, I found a very minor thing that you may want to edit. There's a point where you forgot to put a period.

Anyway, as a Changeling, she has to feed off of love in order to sustain herself, so she regularly brings guys (and sometimes girls) back to her apartment for… nighttime shenanigans, to put it lightly Now, that wouldn’t be so bad…

Well don't they get along just fine. Throw in Gilda and then its a party. :ajsmug:

( 1st thought ) not a romance thats new sort of

(2nd thought) not sure where this is going

(3rd thought) this is the greatest thing ever

looking forward to more. the shenanigans they will have



stay classy:moustache:

I don't Think i have ever read a HIE fic quite like this Before, and i like it!

Featured on the day its published!? Just mind blowing:applejackconfused:

Chrysalis is gonna bring home the most obnoxious loudmouth girl she can find just to piss off adrian
My guess is gilda

but it was all for noting as I could still here the changeling’s moans

Pretty sure you mean 'nothing' and 'here', repectively. There are a few other minor mistakes, but nothing too serious. Maybe get an editor/proofreader to go over your stuff to pick up these small mistakes.

Anyways, it is an intriguing story premise, and I cannot wait to see how these three continue to further interact/think of one another in the future. You sir get a fav and a like.

Sketchy this story hurts me since there isn't more for me to read.

Am I the only one tripping about the talking jackalope???

Very interesting concept.
From that prologue I can say only that Trixie could use of provisional silencer and its freaking ease to do in that way she have least to say,
Chrysalis not so because of thumping and bedroom must look somehow attractive. I really liked how you show her that attitude but without nonsensical bullshit, she dislike but with some reason.
Andrian not sure what to think about him yet im kinda offset about jackalope but gonna just ignore my distate for sake of good fic :p

looking for more

Dude this is awesome can't wait for another chapter

again, just strong language and sexual innuendos wont get you to mature rating. you can just leave it at teen rating.

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Well, when I read the FAQ on whether or not to give this a Mature rating, this is what I found:

This is an answer that's difficult to pin down, so here's a quick guide to follow: 'Everyone' = content that would be acceptable in the show, with some bending for things like alluded shipping or very light affection, 'Teen' = content that is more mature than the stuff that appears on the show but doesn't push the envelope too far (light foul language, some romantic description), 'Mature' is anything that involves material that would require an 'adult supervision' recommendation on a tv broadcast (sex, extreme violence, etc).

Given the content of the story and what I plan to do with it, I think it'd be better off as a Mature-rated story.

I can honestly say: Color me intrigued. I'll keep my eye on this. :pinkiesmile:

Well, you sure do a lot of 'telling' rather than 'showing'. The mac n'cheese bit for example could have been her putting it in the microwave and done's done, as it would show the changelings here can eat regular food, rather than monologuing the statement "Changeling can eat regular food".


Overall, this sounds interesting.

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Thanks for pointing that out. I've been working on showing and not telling in my stories and every bit of criticism helps. I'll be sure to look out for that in future chapters.

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Yeah, this first chapter is almost entirely 'telling'. I'm sure you already know, but 'showing' involves the actions of a character or how that character reacts to an event. Like placing the mac n'cheese in the microwave or requesting your neighbor to quiet down.

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