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Knight Breeze


Just your average gaming geek/college student. I study computer science, play pathfinder, and write stories, and have a patreon!

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This story is a sequel to What I've Become


It is highly recommended that you read What I've Become before you read this story, since this is the second story in The Humanity Within Trilogy, and you will be lost if you just plunge into this without any preparation.

Also, this story already has a sequel: What I Am!

Things have been turning up roses for me lately. I'm no longer fighting to survive, I have people that I can turn to, and I have my face back, all because of the kindness shown to me by strangers.
But will they continue to help me once they find out what dark secrets haunt my past? Will they shun me for the evil deeds that my abductors forced me to do while I was in their service? Will they continue to protect me from the monsters that destroyed my life, once they realize what kind of monster I really am?
How does one forgive a murderer?
WOOT! Feature the day it came out! (how did that happen?) 12/1/2014
Edited by Malefactory. He is fantastic at this kind of thing!
Proofread by Cantankerous. He's freaking amazing.
Also proofread by PhiliChez.
Cover Image done by the very talented PaintSplotch! You can find his FimFic account here.
And here is his DeviantArt Account!

Chapters (28)
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Comments ( 2937 )

Instant fave and thumbs up. Though I'm a little concerned with the whole 'Dark secrets in my past' thing.

:yay: Sequel. I shall read the chapter later tonight when I get time. :twilightsmile:

Just a quick heads up, -redacted-. Yep, sounds about right.

I put a thumbs up to find someone also put a thumbs up at the same time.

IFUCKINGLOVETHISYAYFORDESTRUCTIONBLOODGOREANDDEATHFOREVRYONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Just for kicks and grins, a group of changelings should disguise themselves as those other quadrupedal insectoidal creatures, and get themselves "rescued" by the aliens. It would be hilarious! What a great prank! :pinkiecrazy:
Sorry, really... I'm not being serious. I just wanted to mess with the aliens a little, and maybe find out if the hive mind can function over low-orbit-space distances. :trollestia:

I'm worried something may have happened to Earth. Also I'm wondering if there's going to be an even greater threat than a few bugs trying to start a coup in their government.

Only one thing can save the day... Pony Space Princess!

5335756 Blood for the blood God!

I was pissed of at the last story when I read it was completed and it cut off at a cliff hangar. Now I am happy that there is a continuation! But now I'm annoyed again cuz I realized I have to wait for more of this great story... fucking Roller coaster I tell you what.

So...... s'there any cover art? Because this definitely deserves something awesome.

Comment posted by LazyPone deleted Dec 2nd, 2014

I like that the Griffon Chancellor isn't a war mongering asshole.

5335973 By the Gods (Old and New), the Mantle of Responsibility and Harmony.........!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! A Griffin character who isn't a Khorne loving rascist/specist bastard?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!?! HERESY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Nah, JK! I love that Griffin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! New favorite Griffin OC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Also great story!!!!!!!!!!!!! Waiting for more with bated breath!!!!!!!!!!!!

Like and favorite. Enough said.

Man, weird. I just finished the prior story that I downloaded a couple days ago. I come looking for a sequel, and this was only just posted. Well good on you. Please avoid the more emo stereotypes for the "I have a dark and piteous past and ANGST" trope. The fandom needs more good Sci-fi.

It's time. For another story to be raised up. Let's do this.

5336094 I swear, no angst, just PTSD. I've been trying to depict a character who is desperately trying to keep an upbeat attitude despite everything that has happened to him. It has been hard, especially since the aliens made him murder people.

Whelp shit I was invested with the first one I can,t stop now

Gonna read this right away :pinkiehappy:

Also, is it just me, or does this sentence make absolutely no sense?

Things have been turning up roses for me lately.

Very nice. I'm guessing that she has yet to reveal more of the report of the incident. Apparently, their weapon fire was absorbed by the guards' armors... And though the skirmish was brief, the aliens were clearly surprised by it. And examinations of both the wreckage and the fugitive combined with that reveal a surprising conclusion... that it may be possible that they have never encountered 'magic' before, for all their technology has no signs of a magical signature within them.

5336145 its an old saying that meant "things have been looking up" or "my luck has been getting better."

“Wait, you mean to tell me that you are currently housing an alien fugitive? One that his former captors seem bent on recovering?” Silver Back asked as he rose from his seat.

“That is the long and short of it,” Celestia said with a bow of her head.

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Insta~fav:pinkiehappy:

5335923 Really? He made it pretty clear he ended that one to continue it as a sequel...

Ok, an excellent beginning for the sequel.
Even though its short.
Shut up rage.

Whoooooo!!!!!! YEAAAAAHHHHHH!! I'M SO EXCITED!

*skip to 1:10* Seriously, though this is a really awesome story and you should feel proud about it!

WOOT! Sequel! I am going to be disappointed if an alien ship does NOT get smacked or cornered by intelligently controlled asteroids (moonlets), a moon doing loop-de-loops, or a solar flare chasing them like water from a fire hose...

Aww yiss :D

War, huh? Hmm. Well, we all know that they shouldn't be fighting, but I wonder how they themselves will find out?

Ending line was awesome. MOAR! :flutterrage:

Nice start to the sequel. :twilightsmile:

5336236
Will be a short war if Celestia decided to smack their ships with the sun. Would be hilarious in my mind to see them flip out back on there own world as they try to figure out how the sun destroyed their ships.

5336644
Thanks for the laugh. :rainbowlaugh:

5336602
I get the distinct feeling that they'd end up with a simple 'what the arsing crapwhycantheythrowaF*$&ingSUN?!'

5336410 I was more pre-occupied reading the chapters to read the foot-note to be honest.

5336644
:facehoof: I'm also snickering.

“We don't deserve a bed, We don't need one. We're animals, loping through the dark, craving blood for our wine and flesh for our bread. And we shall have it...”

That seems oddly... Biblical.

Wow, if this guy is depressed like this now, just wait till he realizes a whole planet is about to go to war because of him. Brace yourselves people. i1.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/136/232/699.jpg

Horray! I am very happy to see a sequel so soon :) I wants to draw the cover but I dunno what direction to take it, since it's only chapter one XD The first story I at least had a couple to get a good feel for what to draw.

I may try sketchin' the aliens, depends on how fast I can finish work this week.

So... is he still super claw man? Or did the face come with a full set of human features?

Moore. Trials and tribulations of his life. He is trying to adapt but he pretty much has a crippling ailment. He might not be full monster bu the pain as his body fight itself is great indeed.

Almost missed this, good thing it was featured.

5335994
I think you missed some exclamation points there.

5336113
If he still has foot long claws coupled with that PTSD, folks had better be really freaking careful around him. Otherwise, you get this:
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Pony shish kebab is not as good as it sounds, and it sounds pretty bad.

So let mercy come, and wash away.

What I've done!!!:flutterrage:

All she would have to do is ensure that the sun's strength was ever so slightly stronger as it passed over your island nation,” Gustaf said ominously.

Sounds to me like so much propaganda. Remember how Twilight messed up the astral bodies' trajectory royally, but they never got closer or farther from the planet? And she was completely inexperienced AND had the power of all four royals for that. Yet, neither sun or moon never got closer or more distant.
I wouldn't put it past government ponies to lie about that (in)capability, though.

EDIT: Wow, it's downvote territory on these older comments. :rainbowderp:

...Remember when Linkin Park was cool?

It's pupil not pupal.
It's great that you don't go the "welp, he has friends now so no nightmares, no guilt, no sane reaction" route. Such a horror will stay with him till the end of his life, rearing its hideous head from time to time even after he's dealt with it coming back everyday.
And Luna at the end of his nightmare and said nightmare not returning was a nice touch.

Here's some proofreading:

We don't deserve a bed, We don't need one.

Capitalization error

hard dirt road

missing a comma

You'll never be rid of me... It whispered in my ear as the screaming started.

Capitalization error

I held my hand out to the nearest one, a familiar orange colored one, as I begged her for help.

I recommend deleting the first use of the word "one."

...It was just a dream...

I recommend removing the first ellipsis. It makes things a bit awkward.

“This... may take some time to explain fully, and many of the things that I am about to tell you may very well be beyond belief. Rest assured, however, that everything that I am about to tell you is the truth. Not only that, but I have proof for every single thing that I am about to explain to you.”

"I am about to tell you"
"I am about to tell you"
"I am about to explain to you"

This word repetition was a bit annoying.

each of them bore. Each of them wore

This was a bit awkward to read.

gray in color with what appeared to be red accents

It would be better to write:
"gray in color with red accents"

Each was naked, fully showing off every detail of their disgusting form. Their pallid skin seemed to be completely hairless, showing off every gash, scrape and burn that they had received with alarming detail

There's a bit of word repetition here with the phrase "showing off."

giving the creatures a faintly dragon-esque look to their appearance.

"look to their appearance" is redundant

Their soulless black eyes seemed to be completely lidless, while in the center of their flat faces there wasn't a nose, so much as there was a gaping black hole that allowed the creature to breath even when its mouth was closed.

This is said like being able to breath with your mouth closed is something strange.

“Hold up, go back a second. 'the deaths of almost all involved?' does that mean what I think it means?” Gustaf said as he leaned forward.

capitalization error

solders

spelling error

“Not only that, but we have autopsied the remains of his kinsman, and we have found a large number of devices that have been surgically implanted into their flesh. One of them directly into the subject's brain.”

I recommend merging these two sentences such as to make it read:
“Not only that, but we have autopsied the remains of his kinsman, and we have found a large number of devices that have been surgically implanted into their flesh- one of them directly into the subject's brain.”
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Also:

Gustaf was a griffon, and as such, he was no stranger to the horrors of war.

I know this was unintentional, but it still makes me uncomfortable. Have all griffons seen war, just because they're griffons?

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