The angriest pony in Equestria

Anger comes in many different shapes and forms. For Bonbon, it is nearly everything in her life.

Whether it's her room mate, or her personal life. Something is always chipping away at her Sanity.

And this is how she deals with it.
[Slapping together something, let's how this works out in writing]

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SiIver Spoon

SiIver Spoon #1 · Nov 25th, 2014 · 2 · 8 ·

Expect a review soon. XD I'm not gonna review this story.

Ernest Wood

Ernest Wood #2 · Nov 25th, 2014 · · 1 ·

This was... The funniest shit I've seen all afternoon! I love stories like this because the're so rare nowadays! Anyways onto the story itself: The story is good and had me laughing through it, and there were no grammar mistakes or atleast any I could find. Our main character Bonbon was interesting and who knew she hated that many of the main six? Anyways I really did enjoy this story allot, and I hope you have a good day and write many more great stories.

Sincerely: Ernest Wood

Perteks

Perteks #3 · Nov 25th, 2014 · 3 · ·

BonBon is clearly not amused

Ginja_X

Ginja_X #4 · Nov 25th, 2014 · · ·

that was... confuzzling. it was humorous, nonetheless

Samey90

Samey90 #5 · Nov 25th, 2014 · 1 · ·

Bon Bon needs to get laid... Alternatively, she deserves a well-placed kick in the butt.

To be honest, I've seen this concept many times before (Letters From A Disgruntled Friendship Student, RainbowBob's Dear Princess Celestia: I hate you, Aku's Alcohol's Effects on Friendship come to my mind). In comparison with those, this story falls kinda meh so far.

I think the main problem with writing the frustrated characters, like Bon Bon here, is showing their frustration while making them at least somewhat likeable to the audience. They need a reason to do so (maybe everyone else is stupid, or they're constantly stressed for some reason), or have to be written in so over-the-top way that it crosses the line twice (just what Letters From A Disgruntled Friendship Students does). Bon Bon here is neither; there's barely any build-up; she just sounds like a boring, sad jerk, complaining about everything. Applejack's part is the worst offender: I've read it a few times and I can't stop think what the fucking problem Bon Bon has with Applejack? Rarity at least annoys her with her screaming and I can get that Bon Bon lacks a distance to herself enough to get offended by Pinkie Pie's cake, but Applejack? All Bon Bon does is sounding pathetic, offending Applejack for some imagined reasons, because she apparently has wet dreams about Big Mac.

Genjen

Genjen #6 · Nov 25th, 2014 · 5 · ·

This started out amusingly enough but the quality of wit involved slowly degraded as swearing and gratuitous violence increased. It had some clever moments I truly enjoyed but overall it felt underwhelming by the last half. I'd say Pinkie's and Twilight's parts were the best the story had to offer.

As a side note, considering she's talking about ripping a filly open to plant a bomb inside her, amputating a certain someone, along with other murdery type stuff, you might want to consider a dark tag.

Jman14102