Twilight Sparkle finds an ancient star chart which shows the location of another world, Earth, as well as a powerful teleportation spell capable of interstellar travel. Princess Celestia allows Twilight to go to the other world for exploration. However, due to the Changeling invasion during the royal wedding, the negative energies it produced also frees Discord from his stone prison, who also decides that Earth should be his new playground. Meanwhile the Autobots continue to defend Earth from Megatron, and his Decepticons; ignorant that a new player is about to release chaos upon the world. And Megatron is not about to let another would-be conqueror steal his prize. Equestria also has it's problems when Queen Chrysalis returns to Canterlot, bent on usurping Celestia and Luna.
Twilight Sparkle, and Optimus Prime must save two worlds from three powerful villains.
(This takes place at some point during the 20 year time frame between The Transformers G1 series Season 2 and Transformers: The Movie; and 1 week after the Royal Wedding in Canterlot.)
... not sure what to think yet. Tracking tentatively
stop, just stop. your story fucking sucks
I really don't see what the big fuss is about. I think it's pretty good.
I hear there's grammar mistakes, but I'm no expert in that department.
Another fucking fail chapter. Seriously, stop writing. Take this shit off.
Whoa! Didn't see that coming.
One thing though bothers me about this chapter.
You rescued Applebloom and Scootaloo, but what about Sweetie Belle?
What happened to her in all of this?
526579
She was never abducted. Sweetie Belle was in Ponyville the entire time, which was why Rarity wasn't freaking out like Applejack was.
528086
Oh, okay.
Nice twist!
Pinkie Pie, you are so random.
Sweet mother of buck.
This was an extremely poorly written piece of shit
545797
I quite like it, though it could do with some work on descriptives and action sequences along with some general clean up on spelling/grammar. Those would probably bulk out the story a lot and make it more fun to read, particularly with energon getting splashed around or knowing how the ponies react to waking up covered in gunk.
Personally though, right now I think this writer's biggest problem is your attitude to making comments. Just saying something is a load of hedrachin pharsyn doesn't help people improve things any. If you don't like this writer's work, tell him/her what you don't like about it and why so they can look things over and at least attempt to improve them, or take a hike and leave them alone.
513753
You don't have to be rude to the author like that. It's his story, and I for one like where it's going.
518102
It's his story. Not yours. Please, if you don't like it, don't read it.
Good work so far.
I also apologies for any negative comments you received from a few other people here.
As I told them, this is your story, and in my opinion, it could use some work, but it's still pretty good in my book.
Keep up the good work. =3
Pinkie, No! Megs don't give a shit!
WOW!
Poor Optimus.
545797
I agree with Ghrathryn.
First off, it's his story, and therefore he's the author. He writes the story however he pleases.
If you don't like the story, then follow Ghrathryn's advice, and either just talk to the author about what you dislike and maybe offer suggestions to help improve it, or you can take your negative attitude and leave and don't comment!
Seriously, you're not helping at all. And therefore, I'm disappointed in you.
Overall, I like how the story played out. It almost reads like an actually episode of the G1 series, or FIM. Maybe like a 4-part episode series movie.
Although there are some scenes that could have been more detailed and more well written, and as a few said, the story overall needs work. But I say you get a good job overall. The story may not be great, but it's enjoyable non the less.
I would say you do a sequel, but it doesn't have to show discord nor Queen Chrysalis returning. It could be a FIM crossover remake of the 1986 Transformers movie, with Unicorn as the villain. I would love to see that. And maybe in your version, Optimus would survive but still give up the matrix to Hot Rod.
Anyways, keep writing crossovers like this, and you'll improve more and more as you write.
Keep up the good work. =3
Loved it takes me back to watching g1 love the death-battle reference of RD kicking Starscreams skid plate also awesome use of primes past in the story. I give it 4 out of 5. Also i hope you do have a sequel planed. May be unicron or the changeling queens return.
That was a nice fanfic you wrote. The number of dislikes it has baffles me, for it doesn't deserve them. I don't see much wrong with it to be disliked that much. Liked and favorited.
I really like how you played out Optimus and Chrysalis Prime's battle. Genius, and it flowed very well.
love it very creative
I see BW reference here
hope for a sequel
I though twilight would just stay hiden from the human but knowing her she want to come face to face with them.
522572
Nor did I this is was I called prime vs prime
cant wait for a sequal
545797 Not sure if you're being a troll, or if you're just plain stupid.
Either way, such unnecessary rudeness isn't very nice.
This was probably one of the more enjoyable Transformers crossovers I've seen posted here. Probably helps that I'm a big G1 fan.
Ugh... Me chrisharte97 want sequel.
More please. And I love it
518102 Oh? Well if you don't like it then why the hell are you still reading it? Get out of here, you troll.
OMEGA RULE
W!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I like how this story keeps the feel of the original G1 cartoon on the Transformers side while blending in with the FIM continuity. It does have some faults but then again so did the G1 cartoon. A good story overall.
derpicdn.net/img/view/2013/7/1/361610__safe_twilight+sparkle_crossover_traditional+art_transformers_optimus+prime_artist-colon-souleatersaku90.jpg
Its funny that Megatron throws an energon cube at starscreams face.
this chapter and story is off the charts in awesomeness hope there might b a sequel to this
2-for-1 reference special! Nice! :D
ug discord.....................
pinkie fix megatron please he is to evil
582551
Agreed.
I kinda expected Unicron to appear in the post credits, since this took place before the movie.
That was a much smoother arrival than I thought it would be I kind a like it I’ve had enough drama
Taking the Element Bearers off of Equestria is the worst idea in a long sad history of 'bad ideas'.
It's 'sapient', not 'sentient'. Let me explain. Sentience is what an organism that could think and feel, and have memory and personality, which only occur to most animals, not just humans. Plants, fungi, bacteria, and some invertebrate animals are non-sentient organisms. Sapience is what an animal that develops a high level of intelligence which are capable of building technology depending on anatomy and physiology, this includes humans, while other animals are non-sapient; also some animals, like dolphins, are as intelligent as humans but aren't capable of developing technology, which is called semi-sapience. Sorry for being so nerdy, I'm just giving you information.