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Spooky Ghost


A Noobie Writer who like almost all Cartoons.

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Daniel was you're average person, 19 years old and not long to finishing college. On his last day everything he knew went wrong when he met a strange Unicorn. After his encounter he died but he was reborn later and merged with something nicknamed 'The Heart'. While this gives him quite a range of powers, he also finds out his mental state is unchanged and he can't fully control them.

With his lack of training with his powers it makes him determined to train and learn to control them so he can avoid hurting himself, and others. As he does this he also does all he can do to keeps himself from using his powers a lot in public, fearing it will hurt his sister Annabelle or it will lead to them them being discovered.

Not long after a event that leaves them without their parents, they enter Equestria and just wish to live peacefully without any of the ponies knowing what they are and what Daniel is capable of, but I seems that fate has other plans for him.

Note: I don't have the best Grammar so if you want to read this just be prepared for Grammar Errors every now and then.

Chapters (55)
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Comments ( 537 )

Uh... I don't know what The Heart of the Universe is. What is it?

5294247
It is supposedly a object of great power in the marvel comics.

oooo he actually made it back to his family that usually never happens i look foreword to what happens next ^_^

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I am having a bit of trouble with writing the story for it but I have a idea of what will happen, I plan to start writing the next chapter today or tomorrow.

Bringing his sister with him to Equestria might help him develop his abilities at a faster pace. Needing to protect her and all.
She can also be a hindrance, so you better decide on your own.

this is a good story so far, and I can't wait to read more of it. :pinkiehappy:

Who dos thow think thay are creature?

If you want this to be more Shakespearean (archaic) it should read, "Who dost thou think thou are creature?" would be more accurate. Thou is the archaic form of you, and dost is the archaic singular present of do. Thow and thay are not even words of the English language. If "thay" is supposed to be thy, it is incorrect. Thy is an archaic or dialect form of your.

Earl Grey, Lady Grey, or maybe Darjeeling.
CHANGE PLACES!

another great chapter you have here, and I can't wait to read more of it. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Noooo now we must wait for the next chapter......

another good chapter you have here, and i can't wait to read more of it. :pinkiehappy:

cub wolf

You do realize they are called pups right, cubs are for bears.
"wolf pup"

5449086 I know and I will fix them, just I have some trouble with this keyboard and the stupid auto-correct feature.

She received a nob from her.

HAAHAHAHAHAHAH OMG I DIED RIGHT THERE!

MOARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR

Daniel and King N: Rock, Paper, Scissors.

Let the duel for the universe start
Oh sorry I mean the universal remote

You really need to establish the difference between your and you're. Your refers something he owns, etc You're is a shortened version of You are.

He should ask for Infinate knowledge.

Here's for hoping he becomes op as heck!

Woooo, I caught up but now I must wait D:

Comment posted by DTMgenuis deleted Jan 17th, 2015

This Is another good chapter. :pinkiehappy:

I thank you should keep it the "Heart of the universe."

it is up to you but the story is literally called the one with the heart if you change it it wouldn't make sense good job by the way see you next time:twilightsmile:

Breaded Ursa major.
Mmmmmmm. Sacrilicious

BTW will pm you later on the story. It was great!

nice job cannot wait until the next chapter:twilightsmile:

Love the constant updates, awesome story, can't wait for your next chapter.

Best idea? Have king N just be a generic black and red armor till you can think of his actual look.

Doesn't have to be black and red armor, just some kind of armor...maybe a helmet with horns with a big cloak on covering his body? Nice way to stretch the moment of exposing who/what he really is.
:pinkiecrazy: now I must go do my daily crazy action. :pinkiecrazy:

Moooaaar erghmegurd meh needs moooaaar NOW:pinkiecrazy: or later if that's ok with you. Hehe sorry:fluttershyouch:

MOARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!

Comment posted by metroid_freak deleted Feb 8th, 2015

Deleted honest (and legitimate) criticism, huh? I think your readers have the downvote and upvote buttons confused.

Huh? I'm confused about the plot, please explain in better detail.

Oh, and why did you delete 5603386's comment? Did he insult you or anything?

Selene! Name one Selene!

Comment posted by Spooky Ghost deleted Feb 9th, 2015
Comment posted by metroid_freak deleted Feb 8th, 2015

Deleted my own comment. Don't blame the author.

5603513 Salami is a better name than that.

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