I love to tell story, good ones. i really hope you like them
This is the story of the most interesting parties they face each month of the year they are together. As the year goes by, Both Pinkie and Cheese begin to change in how they act and how they feel about each other. This trip will decides what becomes of their future, for better or worst.
-Each chapter will basely be one party they face each month (not including the first chapter)
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Wow, good start. Well, in my case.
But you should probably go over your story. I found a lot of mistakes like no periods, capitalization, and other things as well. The thing that kinda makes me 
I just don't like Spike hate. It just sounds like he's being that over protective kind of guy. And then everyone starts disliking him. But yeah, I think your going to do great on this story. You got me interested, and now your stuck with me. 
Can't wait for more, and good luck! 
cringeannoyedsad is the part with Spike. I mean, I don't think Spike would be like that. I think. But if you think so, go for it.Oh and your desription forgot a word.
You forgot is.
This is the story of the most interesting parties they face each month of the year they are together.
*falls over dead* This ship is killing me man! you can never get enough cheesepie.
5444360 Mwhahaha! Let the cuteness of this ship take over the world!
http://i.minus.com/i8NfJSFwFPTaJ.gif
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ha ha ha yes! let the ship take over the world because it sure needs more of it. XD
Honestly, this seems like it could be something good but this needs an editor badly.
That said, I'll favorite this if only to see if this gets better.
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Thanks for the advice! I'm glad you enjoyed this and I will make more soon. I understand how you feel about Spike but the reason why I wrote him this way was to give a "brother-like" character to the story. I'm still new to this, so that can explain why he seems overprotective. But, I am very grateful to be in a community that's supports and help each others grow. Once again, thank you for the advice and I'll make sure to improve.
5445249 And I'm sure you will improve. Just like how I was a new writer. But I got help from many people, and they are all so talented, that I'm glad I learned from them. So if you need help, you can always ask me. If you want.
sad to see that this is cancelled...