Applejack and the Garden of Eden

As Apple Bloom escorts a drunken Applejack home, Applejack decides to tell her the story of how Equestria came into existence and how ponies were made.

What little of it she can remember, anyway.

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Sind

Sind #1 · Dec 13th, 2014 · 2 · ·

Pretty good story you got here ;)
It's mostly humorous. Even if it isn't quite as funny as I might have hoped for, it was enjoyable all the way through.
One thing that kinda felt off to me however was AB's characterization, though I'm not quite sure how. Perhaps she just acted a bit more mature than I expect of her?
Lastly, the ending was a slight bit... rushed, I guess. It's nice, but doesn't really tie that well in with the rest of the story =/
Either way, it's a fairly cute story, and a nice read, but doesn't quite achieve what it could.

Jake The Army Guy

Jake The Army Guy #2 · Dec 13th, 2014 · 1 · ·

Funny and cute! Nice work.

Emptybee

Emptybee #3 · Dec 13th, 2014 · 8 · ·

As much as she’d love to have something adorning her butt, a special talent involving Pinkie Pie didn’t sound very appealing.

Wise beyond her years, our Apple Bloom is.

“Were they mares or stallions?” Apple Bloom repeated. “I’m as much of a farm pony as you, and Twilight was kind enough to teach us some basic genetics, though she just did it with plants. With only three ponies to start from, and only one of each species… well, what was the gender ratio?”

That was worth a chuckle.

FanOfMostEverything

FanOfMostEverything #4 · Dec 13th, 2014 · 5 · ·

Try again when you're not drunk on rainbows, AJ. You'll probably recall a bit more of it.

In any case, a touching story, amusing and heartfelt by turns. And I'm a sucker for creation myths, no matter how they're delivered. Thank you for it.

NecromancerKing