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I have not even read the first chapter but the name got me into it


Tell me before I read, is this going to be a Luna love story? I can't really tell :rainbowhuh:

Hahaha blazeing archangel it will be. I was hoping to develop it into a story where Luna grows alongside another pony similar to her. I'm having this take place a little after Tirek is defeated. Made a little more sense after I thought about it.

So, what pairings will appear in this story?

Well Commissar Alexer, Luna and my oc is one pairing. Any others...hm. That really depends on which way the story goes. If a pairing feels right, I might put it in.

Much appreciated Dr. Vodka

Hm, Mane 6. Luna's nocturnal, she needs her beauty sleep and she needs to mull over her inner thoughts a little bit.

Man, he is going to get such a talking to. And then a mind reading...and then possibly smooches, I don't know.

Man this is good, hope the next chapter will come soon

Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha, twilight is kinda a bitch in this. But I still love it.

Honestly Rowan, as much as I love the mlp series, each of the mane 6 have their faults in them. Twi can be bitchy, Rarity snobbish, Dash arrogant, Applejack proud and Fluttershy a downright pushover. The show hints at these faults, but never really goes into them. I will XD

Just saying, but it is going to take more then a few months for Twilight to gain his trust back. They barely know eachother and she already assaulted him in the worst possible way for such a small thing. I expect him to truly fear Twilight considering her crazy tendencies.

That was my goal Muza...each of them will have to slowly earn his trust; Twilight more than the others. I noticed that twi "makes friends" too easily, so for once, I wanted her to WORK for that friendship

Interesting OC. I tend to like human-in-Equestria-that-is-now-a-pony stories. If done a certain way. I will keep an eye on this. BTW, Discord doesn't have anything to do with this, does he?

P.S. Do you think I should have the Mane 6 hunt him down, or Luna?

Before anyone hunts him down, he needs to bump into Ponyville's official welcome wagon pony.
:pinkiehappy:: I just hope I remembered to clean out the cake batter.

Frankie2 - Eh....sort of. I want him to have more depth cause honestly: the guy has possibilities. What role he plays, I won't say. If I can end this like I want to, you'll see a different side of him. I already kinda hinted at it...and now I'm saying too much:pinkiecrazy:

WAS THAT REALLY NECESSARY???!!!

Now I expect him to be even LESS cooperative with Twilight.

Well, at least it's Fluttershy and not any of the other Element Bearers. I still hope Twilight has to give birth without the use of drugs or magic to know how it feels. Right now, I can see Frost with Fluttershy instead of anypony else. At least, until he acclimates to his new body. I know Discord isn't going to tell this guy anything.

Oh yes, he left the house without saying so to your face but left a note. That totally justifies wanting to hurt him (in case you couldn't tell, the bold lettering represents my raging sarcasm)

Well...after reading through this entire chapter I will now make it my mission to teleport to that dimension and personally bitch slap everypony (except Frost and Discord, they don't deserve it) So prepare your body for that shit.

i hope the next chapter comes out soon...
any way keep up the great work ^_^

I completely forgot what this story is about so now I have to re-read it all... Oh well we're dead at work anyway

Are we going to find out who HER is? And good for 'Frost' for speaking his mind. Especially, to Twilight. Well, hopefully, the next chapter won't take as long next time, but real life happens.

I honestly think that the girls should be punished. Twilight PHYSICALLY ASSAULTED him and the others tried to force ably take him. He was not obligated to stay there and he stated that he needed time to himself

I suggest a harsher punishment for Twilight

I suggest a harsher punishment for Twilight

she is now a princess to understand that every action has a consequence

so as I said I hope she has a harder punishment

and it is given by Princess Celestia

and what he said just turn the page please twi not all problems are fixed that easy

Call princess friendship think you need a lesson in humility and think things before acting

I think in this story twi rose too fast

ps I hope not much later the next chapter

This story, I don't, ok here's how I feel. The plot is almost nonexistent as all we know is that Discord brought 'Frost' here because meh and you know reasons. The pacing is insane, I feel like I'm just getting summaries or clips of the full story so nothing really fits right. Everyone is hyper emotional to the point of if a pin dropped someone would explode in response, for some reason frost is supposed to be wise and mature beyond his years but his first response to being dropped in Equestria, a place that you imply he knows plenty about, is to run away from those most likely to help and go off and figure things out on his own? That sounds pretty immature to me. Also as a nitpick of mine, stop trying to use so many big descriptive words, when done right it can be clever but just because you know the word husky doesn't mean you know the right context. Most of this is just my own frustration and you shouldn't take it personally, if I had to guess you're young or you're still new to the writing process, but I see your potential behind your clutter. Keep trying , take criticisms, find good people to help you when you need it. DONT ASK YOUR FANS FOR HELP, I know it seems like a really easy way to find someone to help you out but trust me a fan of your story is way more biased towards you and won't give you the criticism you'll need to better yourself as an author, maybe find another author you haven't really met before and see if they can help you a bit. Sorry for the rant and good luck!

Weak punishment if you ask me. Then again, I don't know for how long Frost will be avoiding Twilight. It might take a few months at the least. When someone you don't know attacks you, it will be near impossible to become friends with each other later on.

Blind Teller, much appreciated. Like you said, I'm fairly new at this and I will COMPLETELY take what you said into consideration, especially about the pacing, wording and emotions. Again, thanks!

Why was Luna going to scold Frost? Everything he said was true. The only one that made an effort to do right by him so far are Luna and Fluttershy. Discord did a little, but he's the reason Frost is here in the first place. Pinkie did bring the ice pack, and I think she is just waiting for the right moment to have a surprise party for him.

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No discord said that he wasn't the reason he was here, it was because of (unknown). Discord KNEW of the whole thing, but he didn't DO the deed himself. My bet....celestial did it....or another draconequus maybe?

Maybe...Faust herself (dun DUN DUUUUUUNNNNNNNN!!!!!!) :rainbowderp:

But yeah, when flutter shy was getting the tea discord says he didn't cause the thing, but he does know.

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