Pound and Pumpkin Cake are twins who work together through any situation. When their foal sitter Pinkie Pie has a daughter of her own, the twins get to foal sit. The twins believe that foal sitting a one month old foal would be a piece of cake, but it didn't turn out as planned. This one event could change how the twins work together.
3/22/17
*I have decided to revive this story. I am just in the process of rewriting the first two chapters. Wanted to do that before moving on. My writing has gotten better since I first wrote this story, so I wanted to update it.
Chapters (2)
Heh, can see the potential.
1.
What does
mean?
2. Why do we need to know about the other Mane 6's foals now? From my perspective it feels a little like exposition.
3. Why not end the chapter with one of the twins saying after pound says
with
*rimshot*
another typo. But I forgive you for setting up for good humor.
5549287 thanks for the advice. I'm only in 8th grade so my writing skills aren't that good
5549235
1. I meant a foal (which I fixed)
2. I honestly don't know why I put them in there. I guess I needed an excuse on why Pinkie didn't want the mane 6 to watch over Cheesecake
3. I like what you did there
Cool! Do you think you could continue this story anyway, even though it's canceled? :)
