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PseudoFiction


Okay, now I know the empty bottle of whiskey on my desk 'looks' bad, but there's a perfectly sober explanation.

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One minute he's sitting in his bedroom playing on his Xbox. The next thing he knows he's face down, eating Equestria dirt...

Meet Rabbit, aptly named because this human was dragged into Equestria when Trixie's 'rabbit-in-the-hat' trick went horribly... awry. I'm going to use the word 'awry.' Very much stuck in a land of namby-pamby ponies and harmonious friendship, Rabbit teams up with The Great and Powerful Trixie in an attempt to survive whatever Equestria can throw at him.

Rated Teen for harsh language and some suggestive themes.
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Chapters (15)
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:trixieshiftright: Interesting....

You made my sleep-deprived mind laugh sir. Plus, the awkwardness level went over 9000. Nice. Interested to see where it's going.

Daww poor trixie, anyways whenever I see the word rabbit used as a name I can only think of rabbit from the current medal of honour

Not bad, we'll see where you take it from here. :trixieshiftright:

meh why not, ill stick around and see where this ends up going. Pretty entertaining so far.

Great idea, but I wouldn't mind a little flash back to when Rabbit was pulled to The Great and Powerful Trixie's show. :twilightsmile:

As one of the countless people who are reading this when they are meant to be studying/sleeping I demand that you make more right NOW!

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Nice.. It's just the first chapter and it's already epic. You don't see a lot of those here. Keep the momentum up, I'm really looking forward to where this is going!

You have something really good with a lot of potential here. Very original as far as an HiE goes, too.:pinkiehappy:

I love it, and it's really nice to see this side of Trixie every once and a while. :heart::heart::heart:

Please make more, and if you can, add a romance tag. I think that would get more attention.

A thump for you my good sir :moustache:
This was indeed a marvelous chapter :moustache:
Will be waiting for the next one :twilightsmile:

This is very promising.
A human abusing the innocence of the Equestrians, Trixie is in the story and she is actually being nice. Go on with this story. :moustache:

Pardon the pun, but at the end there why didn't they fuck like rabbits?

The slug was the best character in the story! :fluttercry: HOW COULD YOU KILL HIM! :flutterrage:

Seriously though, nice chapter. Plot thickens, fights occur, and I have a new favorite saying. Props to you good sir.:pinkiehappy:

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New favourite saying? Okay, I'll bite. which is it? :pinkiehappy:

553593 It's something I want to say, but let's just say I don't get into fights much. Perhaps the only reason why I like this saying is because I imagined Rabbit saying it in an action-movie hero voice.

"I'm going repeatedly punch you in your face now. Hold still."

I can just picture some battle-hardened man telling that to the main mafia boss or something. :rainbowlaugh:

Your story, it entertains me. Even slugs are epic in it. :rainbowdetermined2:

I am just itching to find out where the hell nightmare moon came from. :rainbowhuh:

You like halo and skyrim and your kissing Trixie you are my hero

Man, I couldn't find Rabbit and Nightmare Moon after they teleported, guess I'll just stay back here and steal as many golden weapons as I can carry. :ajbemused:

Great story btw, keep it up

Rabbit teams up with The Great and Powerful Trixie in an attempt to survive Equestria.
do ya mean
Rabbit teams up with The Great and Powerful Trixie in an attempt to survive in Equestria. ??

Am I the only one that read 'Rabbit' and thought 'Eminem'?

Sorry, just not feeling it.

So while our protagonist stretches to regain feeling in his toes, let me introduce you to his gear. Oh, you don’t want to know about him, our main-man is fucking awesome, ain’t much more to tell.

Au contraire. The first thing i want to know is who we're following around. i could care less what he looks like.
Also, calling him "fucking awesome" is making you come off as quite the feedbag.
What's more, using a casual narration style like you have here is great for later in a story, when used appropriately, but you're just jumping in to the minutiae without telling us what's going on.

The snail is back! :rainbowdetermined2:

We're seeing him again, right?

So whats the relationship between Rabbit and Trixie?:derpytongue2:

The fun.......Doubled? FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-

Seems legit.

This is... amazing.
I agree with IlitterateDragon. I need more of the snail. I don't know why, but I like him.

Somewhere between the thresholds of shadows and orange juice? Really? I don't seem to know this place.

between shadows and orange juice... nice place. don't visit when th' pear relm is attacking though.

five bits he ends up getting kissed by Celestia too.

You know. After defeating an evil like Nightmare Moon, you would think he would look around a little bit first for things of value. Like, oh I don't know..., THE SKELETONS MADE OF GOLD!!! Geez! They're right there for the taking, their is bound to be a number of bags or carts laying around to move them around, just exchange it at a bank or someone else who would give you a good deal on the stuff! My god, all that gold laying there and he just leaves it...:facehoof:

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I think it's located just beyond whimsy, and south of 3.

632934 Maybe he forgot it in the rush of... I don't know.. saving a princess, needing to see if Trixie is okay, defeating a super-powerful being, using his imagination to summon a shield... all that crazy stuff. I would have forgotten.

i thought i was below it but now I have to do it...... silly rabbit trix are for kids

Fuckin' epic.
I want moar RabbitxTrixie. Trixie needs more romance. And the slug, I hope he shows up again. or maybe he's still in the gem. gonna be all 'HEY LISTEN' for Rabbit.

WELL. Alrighty then Luna...

Anyways, I sure hope that slug is alright. I'd feel terrible if he was stuck there. Good chapter though.

Apparently in your story slugs seem to be the wisest and down to earth creatures alive. No better choice could have been made. :twilightsmile:

did you get that snail bit from the abridged DBZ series? :rainbowlaugh:

I've read through it and to be honest, the meta commentary... I can see how it would throw people off a bit. On the other hoof it is very well written and the flow between Trixie and Rabbit is good-I want to see a lot more of that.

"Unicorns in particular had alicorns..." :facehoof: Look, I know what you mean by this, but it's really unnecessary. Besides, in Equestria where the other definition of alicorns also exist, and are the predominant meaning to the fandom, wouldn't it be easier to just put "Unicorns in particular had horns..." instead?
Also, I noticed a switch in perspective from third to first person. I only noticed the one, but you may as well change it for the sake of perfection.
"And a grappling hook was what I needed." Shouldn't the "I" be "He"?
All that aside, I didn't see any other grammar or spelling mistakes at all. Good job on that, and also well done on the actual story. It's pretty fun so far. I'll keep reading, so you keep writing! :raritywink:

If that's okay with you...:fluttershyouch:

Pure awsomness, that's all i can say about this fic.

He just squinted his eyes and held on tight to his climbing-axe as an invisible hook impaled his belly-button and yanked him sharply backwards.

...
Ever thought about getting an arm torn off?
What you are feeling after reading that sentence is what i am feeling about the quote from the story except feeling what was quoted.

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no...no...
Humans are terrible at directions.
It is a moonie south-south-zuul of the Galaxy Far Far Away.

I'm a sucker for romances, and when it comes to MLP fics, HiE. This has both. A favorite for you.

For aome reason i thought thia was a FFXIII-Versus crossover

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