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TwahlahtSporkle


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Twahlaht Sporkle is tired of exams, tired of being different, tired of her seemingly go-nowhere life as the pupil of the ruler of Equestria. One day, as she hides in the woods from another wretched exam, she discovers a mysterious portal. With hardly another thought, she leaps through-- only to find herself... in Equestria? Has her adventure ended before it even properly began?

Follow along with Twah as she discovers just how different the same old boring place can be with just a few "minor" changes!

Cover art courtesy of assuming-control of equestriaforums.com

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 53 )

Thanks in advance for any comments and ratings I may be fortunate enough to get. I would ask that, if you thumb the story down, you please let me know why, so I know what I can do better in the future. :) Thanks!

...this story is relevant to my interests. I'll be keeping an eye on you.

-Tricondon

Dafuq did I just read.
And why do I want more?

You're absolutely sure this story is complete? Because I think you should continue it. :pinkiehappy:

I'm interested in seeing where this will go. So far so good I think. Twahlaht Sporkle :rainbowlaugh: great name imo

This story is quite interesting. Too bad it's marked 'complete,' I would have loved to see it continued :fluttercry:

When do we get to hear about Twahlaht Sporkle's balewn?:rainbowlaugh:

Gosh. :twilightblush: I hadn't planned to write more; I mostly just did this as backstory for an Ask thread on equestriaforums. :twilightsheepish:

But... if people really like it, I may do another chapter or two in the future. :3 Maybe I'll even include Balewn. xD

Thanks, everybody. Your comments mean a lot.

DO IT

MORE TWAHLAHT SPORKLE IS NEEDED

Seriously, please continue. This is already hilarious.

Please write more, I am very curious to read the continued adventures of Twahlaht Sporkle, and see the alternate versions of the other Mane 6.

My dear lass... Is that a utensil on your forehead?
That is easily one of the most ridiculous alternate versions of Twilight, yet it's a pretty well written crossover introduction. You seem quite competent at characterization and expression of personality. Yet I realy don't know where you could take the story? Perhaps strange creatures from yet another dimension invade that can only be defeated by spork magic? And Twah eventually becomes queen of the utensiltopia dimension?

....:rainbowhuh:

The Entity of Chaos both likes and is horribly confuzzled at this concept


I like it:yay:

Bual - Assuming I continue this (not guaranteed!), remember that Twah is stuck in the "real" Equestria now. :) So we'd possibly see her reactions to "our" mane six, if I were to bring them in; but we wouldn't actually meet the bizzarro-world versions.

DPV111 - Honestly, I have no idea. As I said a little bit ago, I hadn't put any thought into taking it further. I'd have to think on it more thoroughly. I don't know if I'm prepared to tackle an invasion idea, although it's an interesting thought! I had been writing under the assumption that Twilight messing with a spell while tired accidentally opened the portal... but maybe there's a more malicious explanation. :rainbowderp:

Periphery -- I love that picture dearly. That's part of my extensive collection of Sporkle art. Only the fact that it wasn't specifically made for me prevents me from using it anywhere :3

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Well I'm the one who made it, and I don't mind at all if you want to use it for stuff.

Periphery -- I appreciate that! :D Thank you very, very much!

why is this marked 'complete' when its clearly just beginning?

While there is not enough here for me to rate it either way, it is certainly intriguing. I would probably read more if you wrote it.

Chapter 2 added. I hope you will enjoy it.

Hmm, I think i missed something going from Ch 1 to 2, not sure what, but the transition felt off. Otherwise, pretty good overall for an alternate twi story, especially one so very different. :pinkiesmile:

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A continuation! SWEET!

This was good. Slightly less funny, but just as good.

Honest Lunar Raven - Hmm... I don't see it, but then I wouldn't, would I? :derpytongue2: If you can put your finger on what's wrong, that will help me with later chapters.

DPV111 - I plan to do three more chapters. :) The next one should be funnier, I hope. I can't promise to crank it out as fast as I did this one, but I'll try not to keep you waiting. :twilightsmile:

This will not be the best week ever.

515479 Could be, could be... you don't know. :pinkiecrazy:

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Take your time and keep bringing the goods. I almost want to go buy a spork now. Not to tape hair to it and brushie it of course...:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright: Heh, no I'll ... eat... stuff... with it!:trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft:

A short, self-contained chapter for a dear friend. I hope you will enjoy it. Scruffy will probably end up being a recurring character, if he doesn't object.

515479 See? Told you it would be the best week ever.

Well I felt something was missing from my day. Now I know it was this update.
I was feeling pretty crap, now I feel pretty good.
Lonelier, but still better than before.

Yes, more Twahlaht Sporkle. That brightens up my day.

I have to say, when I saw the premise of this story, I had my doubts, but as with so many things that come to our attention, it's a matter of execution.

And you have executed marvelously.

This story, and this chapter in particular, are oddly endearing, with just enough wackiness and believability and poignancy that this fic has quickly risen to the top of the list of stories I hope will continue to update, that I hope the author—that you—will see through to the end as we follow Twahlaht on her journey. I especially liked how you dealt with the boring mainstays of AU fics—the confusion, the doppelganger effect, the angst, all that—succinctly and deftly.

Maybe it's just that I have Prachett on the brain recently, but as I finished what you've got published—and this chapter in particular—I'm feeling echoes of that special blend of storytelling that makes his tales so engaging, and which really has me smiling. I think the present tense flashbacks are an exquisite touch in particular, as are the shifts into third person omni for them.

The last comment here was 15 weeks ago, and so I know that the chances of this being updated are rather slim, but I'll hold out hope that you'll get the attention this story deserves, as I'd love to see where it goes.

And months later, after being featured on One Man's Pony Ramblings, you've found yourself another reader. There's a real charm to the way you write, and I found Chapter 1 to be very agreeable. Characterization's there, and concept is pretty good, but your style brings it all together. Good work, author!

Pretty good story.:twilightsmile:
You mentioned previously that you had plans for a few more chapters, I know it could be left right here and that it's been quite some time since you updated it, but I'd really enjoy seeing more of Twahlaht Sporkle in the future.:pinkiehappy:

I want to thank DPV111 for notifying me about this amazing story. It's a little random but it´s works. The characters are believable (as far as magical pony are believable) and I can't wait for the next chapter! I hope you will reach the feature box!

I was going to dismiss this completely out of hand, because honestly. :unsuresweetie: But whatever, I might as well read the next two chapters are well.

Oh, a very promising star. Weird, but promising, and you get to the business with commendable alacrity. :twilightblush:

Interesting 'twist' on using a ridiculous/comedic premise and handing it in a way that's 'serious'. I use quotes because those aren't quite the right words, but are pretty close.

This last chapter was fun. It's good to see Sporkle adapting. I do hope she does eventually make it home, if she still wants to, but it's great that she isn't still chasing that so hard she's missing life. I kinda want her to talk with Pinkie more, simply because I loved those two. I guess you're not likely to write more, given teh amount of time that's past, but if you do, I'd love to read it.

To come in a lot later than almost everybody else, this story seems really good so far. My only comment would be that you used 'people' and ''person' rather than ponies and pony. Just a little thing that might bug some people. Personally, I feel that ponies are people too. It just felt a bit odd to see it in text.

DPV sent me, sorry about taking so long to get around to reading it. Definitely fav'd, watched, and hoping for your return.

This is hilarious and wonderful.

504063 And that picture is the greatest image of all time.

Ow, ow, ow, ow, ow.

This was arbitrarily placed on top of my read later list. I didn't remember why I had it there, and I apparently zoomed past the tags in my haste to get to chapter 1. When I read the first bits, I fully expected a fast-paced comedy, and that was okay; just what I was in the mood for.

Now, my gut hurts. I did not expect this, and I love you just a little bit. Sure, I think the story was a little rushed in the sense that I wouldn't mind having the exact same points and scenes played out at half speed - you raise some very nice issues here. But all in all? Hm. I've never been one for flash fics, I find the idea of trying to generate disproportional effect like that silly, but this here little nibble of a fic? Yes, yes and yes. Different in just enough ways, but still easy to connect with.

I'd recommend this any day of the week. Is there a reason for it being incomplete? It would very much work just like this, and the only thing that causes me distress now is the actual incomplete tag, not the way it ended.

My goodness. O.O I haven't checked back before today because I am ashamed of how long it has taken me to update. I had no idea i'd been featured on anything or gained new readers, and i'm insanely flattered at being compared to Pratchett.

Yes, folks, I DO plan on updating-- within the next week in fact. The very long wait is because I was waiting for Scruffy to draw my villain for me. I'm not so good at conceiving of baddies, but he has quite a fertile imagination :twilightsheepish: .

I think (I hope!) you'll find the next chapter exciting and fun to read. It'll be the second to last in this fic, and I'll do my best to make it worth your wait.

And now that the reviews have been posted, I'm free to make comment on the story.

This is a sweet lil' thing that I'd love to see continue. Good job creating such a character in Twahlaht; there really is this inexplicable charm about the whole thing.

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Within a week, three weeks ago? Oh dear.
*shrug* Isn't that something we all do, though? I only wrote a half-chapter and promised to have something out within the next few days ... a week ago. Oops.
I have a similar problem with bad guys. Unless the villain is part of the story's conception, I find it hard to create a fitting conflict between hero and villain.

But continue, continue! I really like your style and I want to know what's gonna happen to poor 'ole Miss Sporkle.

I'm not sure what to say. This little story reminds me of one of the reasons why I got into reading fan fiction in the first place. You've somehow told a story unicorn with a spork for a horn, and somehow made her into a relatable character I can sympathise with. In what other type of media would that happen?

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