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Secret Pony


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Vinyl Scratch suddenly becomes a magnet for bad luck and odd situations. After a bad reception of her newest music, she decides to take a break from being a DJ and try to fix her music. But what happens when an not so unfortunate accident involving a sandwich makes the answer more insane than a simple shipping story should be. Watch what happens when worlds collide, the 4th wall is broken, the narrator is extremely handsome, and Muffins may be the answer to everything!

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 95 )

Well, this story isn't half bad. There are a few problems with tense agreement and some grammar issues here and there (which I'd be happy to address in a PM, if you wish), but this story still seems enjoyable. I'll be keeping an eye on this.

That...

That was beautiful. (referring to Vinyl Scratch's adventure)

I loved everything about it. That alone will have me tracking this story.

Trackin'
Anything with Vinyl+Octavia is good in my book :twilightsmile:

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YES PLEASE!!! Oh thank you Celestia! T-T no one ever comments on the DA version so I had no idea what to fix.:yay:

Seems like you had a lot of fun in the beginning.

This story is still shaping up nicely, let's see where this goes.

Nice first chapter, its on the short side but it is a good set up.


:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

again the story is good, but the chapters are on the short side, you could have had her find the source of the music then cut the chapter for a little cliffhanger

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Thats what I was originally planning, but the story took control at this point :pinkiehappy:

Now this chapter was fun, I liked it a lot, and to have Octavia play many different instrument is a great Idea! good work!


:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

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Thank you kindly, this was very fun to write, And actually all her friends play multiple instruments, Octy's favorite just happens to be the cello

Odd starting, like super odd LOL but I am really liking this story, and I want to see more of it, Keep it up.


:rainbowhuh:

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It was inspired by an odd video XD
But seriously I must thank you for commenting on all the chapters so far. It makes me happy. =D

And suddenly readers were super confuzed said the readers. Na It was really good and I like the way you've brought them together. Well done sir.

interesting begging... want moar

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I assume you mean beginning as opposed to begging haha and thank you I will soon deliver:twilightsmile:

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Ok, so I have changed my mind, if you see the narrator, its just something you don't understand yet! :rainbowlaugh: BECAUSE I'M EVIL!!!

interesting story. i'll be watchin this

you certainly remind me of Douglas Adams.
great story, I cant wait for more

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Thank you, I hope to be able to put chapter 6 out soon! :pinkiehappy:

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YES! WOO! Someone finally got the reference WITHOUT me telling them! You just made my day. :rainbowkiss:

As someone who can relate to feeling like their work is going nowhere and attempting to start fresh, I know exactly how she feels. it's hard, but at the same time, rewarding!

Something tells me that that prisoner is distantly related to the Pie family.

Okay, first of all... what?!

Man I have to say this story is great so far, if only a little confusing :twilightsheepish:

The beginnings though man, the complete randomness is awesome! This story has impressed me, and I can't wait for more to come. I will be tracking this good sir :trixieshiftright:

P.S. The Octy rage frightens me a bit, I wont lie :fluttershysad:

I love it to death, this is an interesting take on Scratch and Tavi and I love it already. I'm fully ready to match this one up with Allegrezza and Two's Company. Both are personal faves of mine and I'm already entranced with this one.

this is a great story, and Its funny as hell that She almost killed her band mate and never gave Vinyl a secant thought when she calls her Octy LOL god work

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Whats funny is that originally Octavia was alot meaner to Fredric in general. Like she was suppose to strangle Fredric with her bow, or kick him in the stomach on his way out of the appartment but I couldn't make it work :derpytongue2:
And trust me, she is only being nice to Vinyl for a reason, and its not because she has a crush on her...yet. That comes later. But for now, lets just say that she knows much more than you think she does. :trollestia:

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After reading this my eagerness increased ten fold! :pinkiehappy:

My mind is know being rapidly filled with speculations and little theories, curse my imagination :facehoof:

Anyways, you sure seem to know how to severely decrease a persons patience a great deal, quite commendable I must say ^^

First part-Whut? The rest-Moar

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If you like the first part of this chapter and the description of Vinyl's night back in chapter 3, just you wait til chapter 6 haha it will be beautiful :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild:

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haha XD I think you would have liked the original smack-down that I wanted Octavia to give Fredric. :rainbowlaugh: I haven't thought up a reason yet, but she REALLY doesn't like Fredric. In my head, for some reason, every scene I pictured them in together other than the one where they were practicing she was giving him dirty looks and such, but Fredric being well Fredric, doesn't notice her strong dislike of him and just keeps making her dislike him more :facehoof: its a never ending cycle haha

also, pass some of those theories/ideas my way, I might use them :twilightsmile:

This is by far one of the best MLP stories ever. I love the personality you gave Vinyl and Octavia. Keep up the good work I hope to see more chapters of this! P.S you should tots add Derpy :derpytongue2: in this.

Just to let everyone know, I do reply to every comment, I just like to reply through Private Messages :twilightsheepish:

This was brilliant on so many accounts. The internal monologue of the floor, the random interludes of narrator vs Octavia, and now apparently a twist considering the mention of a mission briefing? To say I'm intrigued doesn't really cover it.

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You people that comment make my day :pinkiesmile:

That poor floor. Nopony ever acknowledges its existence.

Can't imagine what its therapy bill must look like.

Excellent story. Very nice writing, and an almost Hitchhiker's Guide esque spree of tangents (while not detracting from the story at all).

Brilliant to read, can't wait for the next chapter!

Wooohooo! New chapter! :pinkiehappy:

I am intrigued to see what comes of Octavias apparent slip up, and just what past experience she has ever had with Vinyl ^^

And how can Vinyl not remember, does it involve some sort of Men in Black type technology? So many questions to, hopefully, be answered in the future :twilightsheepish:

I look forward to all of it good sir!

37528 LOL I think it would have been funny for her to beat him :rainbowlaugh:

WOW. ok this is a twist, mission briefing? past experiences? Vinyl dear? What the Hell is going on? I am lost amd confused.?

Guesses.

Vinyl lost her memory. ?:derpyderp2:
Octavia cheating and her lover and had her mind erased?. :twilightsmile:
Octavia is a secret agent for the Roley Cort, had a fling with the J and fell in love, so after drugging her to clean her memory, Octavia is there to win her love?:moustache:
You sir as a writer need to lay off the drugs.:pinkiesick:
Vinyl is form Mars.:coolphoto:
Octavia is so good at sex she gives other ponies brain damage:pinkiecrazy:
and last one is Octavia is Twilight's real mother. :facehoof:


:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

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Its always funnier to see Fredric get beaten

SO MUCH EPIC WIN!!!! You go good by the floor sir. But really was awasome, beautifuly written wat else can I say expect :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:. You = Win.

So far this story has shown me:
A fourth wall aware Octavia,
a complete jackass of a narrator,
and a full paragraph about the floor.
This is one of the biggest mind screws of a story I've ever read, and I love it.

Do I detect a bit of a Douglas Adams kinda thing going on? I'm Hearing the Narrator with a bit of Discord and the Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy

And just like that,the floor's hopes and dreams were crushed.Twice.:pinkiesad2:

... What is it with this fandom and their inanimate objects? Sheesh...

Great so far. Vinyl is my 2nd favorite pony, so I'm exited to read the rest. :twilightsmile:

Can't wait for chapter 7!!!!:pinkiehappy:

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