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Scottish Brony


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With some time off from her duties at Cloudsdale, Rainbow spends some time with Fluttershy. Her short visit ends up being longer than expected when the day's storm hits prematurely.

Cover art by zacatron94 on deviantArt and used with permission.

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This was very well-written and cute. :pinkiesmile:

I have said it before on other fics, but...this SO needs to be an eppie.

Good story. Got a bit ramblly at parts but otherwise rather enjoyable

Wow, very Slicey-of-Lifey! I enjoyed this story!

Oh dear. I didn't realize how much Flutterdash-cute was in this fic. I think I overdosed . . . :pinkiesick:

Excellent story! It's amazing how much story you can get out of such a simple concept. I saw nary an error in it, grammatical or otherwise. Except for one:

"Um…" Rainbow hesitated, not sure how to say what was else on her mind, "Hey, listen… uh… I… thanks for doing what ya did. I probably never would have known how bad it was for Fluttershy. Um… sorry for being a jerk."

"I take back what I said about being a jerk, ya jerk!" the pegasus yelled after him, shaking a hoof at where he used to be — or probably still was, only invisible.

I'm a little confused here. Is Rainbow taking back the fact that she called herself a jerk? :rainbowhuh:

5258252 I don't know if it would work as an episode, but thanks nonetheless.

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I'm a little confused here. Is Rainbow taking back the fact that she called herself a jerk? :rainbowhuh:

Yeah, she got ticked off at him pranking her again, so she took it back.

5261679 Well, yes, except that Rainbow never actually called Discord a jerk. First, she apologizes for being a jerk herself, then takes back calling Discord a jerk?

Well, that was cute. :yay:

As one minor point:

"What happened, pal? You were never this scared, before…"

"It's okay, buddy, thunder's just a sound."

I might just be being really pedantic, but I can't see Rainbow calling Fluttetshy "pal" or "buddy". She never has in the series. It's probably just a problem on my end, but it tore me from the scene every time it happened. :unsuresweetie:

That's a really stupid complaint though. Overall, well done! :twilightsmile:

5263492 Rainbow Dash: "...Yeah. So, like I was saying...
Fluttershy, pal, this won't cut it
I need a pet to keep up with me"
From, May The Best Pet Win.

Also, in Magical Mystery Cure, Rainbow Dash says to Twilight, "A new flying buddy!"

5264303 ...Not really what I mean, but fair enough. :twilightsheepish:

5262004 No, she took back her apology for being a jerk towards him.

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I was going to write something like that, but I was beaten to it. Besides, Rainbow is one of those characters whose vocabulary is very casual (as opposed to, say, Rarity's). It just made sense to me.

This…was…aewsome. Have a like, a fave, a follow, and the ever-important moustache:moustache:

Good story,carefull about LUS though.

I thought this could evolve into a lovely romance+sex story between those 2 ponies :3

So, you're one of those writers who sees Discord as a FlutterDash shipper, huh? Same with me. You should check out two of FlutterDash stories "Cupid Has A Bat Wing" and "I'm Foreign?!".

6716250 Actually, I didn't think of it like that. To me, it's just Discord showing his friendly side, and the only shipping going on is friendshipping. I don't write romance or anything like that, because I know I'd be hopeless at it.

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