To right a wrong of long ago, Princess Celestia and Luna use their magic to return an exiled pony during the spring starfall festival.
Please note: This is the original story released on DA over 2 years ago and - despite how hard I tried to give it a connection to FiM then - it didn't really stand the test of time. Still, even with all its issues, this was my first fic for MLP and I wanted to give it a permanent home on here.
This story lead to the prequel Dominion of the Night, the spin-off Nightfall, and multiple other stories that have yet to be released. Even so, Starfall was originally a stand-alone story so you won't need to read anything else beforehand. Also, because this story is mostly unedited (and was my first attempt at really writing a full blown fic), it has numerous grammatical mistakes. I've touched it up in places, but some sections would require complete rewrites which would be a bit too much work.
Last but not least, the story centers around an OC of mine named Star Flare which is clearly a mary sue. Love her or hate her, she is what she is. /shrug
tldr; version: is the original story, has a mary sue, only has touch-up edits
I remember reading this and liking it despite flaws so instant upvote and such from me
5254331
lol thanks!
I reread it a few times while getting it set to post here and luckily I never came across anything cringe worthy... there were lots of mistakes here n'there for tenses and jumping back and forth on perspectives (a mistake I still make often... oops!), but the story still works pretty well overall.
That is, of course, if it isn't in any way connected to FiM cannon... It is definitely a 100% AU story now.
Interesting work therein, granted it seemed to miss several points, but you admitted to those readily. That all being said, its a different take on things and as such is worth looking into.
5256830
A lot of the issues makes me wish I had a bit more time... I'd love to (perhaps at some point) go back through and do a full rewrite, especially with how much has changed in FiM since its first season. Still though, even in its current form, I'm happy with how everything comes together, especially in the finale.
If anything, it's a glaring example of just how badly I've always needed an editor... especially back when Starfall was first written.
5256997
We all start somewhere, that is one thing I can promise you.
very good storie so far i like bthe plot in this story and i would like you to make a sequel and if you need any help just ask
Why has no one commented yet?
so a battle right?
yes Sparky a battle, through it's really a battle between two bosses
Alicorn battles! Round 1
7145885 Hey, its sparky. I just got through reading one of your fics.
7599048 ok
Pretty good story
Poorly paced, still a good story. 8/10