Chapter Twenty: The Lamb of Faust.
The Draconequus of Notre Mare.
By Inkquill.
Chapter Twenty: The Lamb of Faust.
Far below him, Discord could see the soldiers fleeing as the deluge of scalding hot chocolate milk rained down upon them from the cathedral gutters; some even tripping over themselves and falling face first into the cobblestone streets as they tried to avoid the super-heated flavored dairy. They were retreating! He had won!
And Fluttershy was safe...
Taking heavy breaths, he turned back towards the bell tower and let a joyful smile beam across his face. “We did it, we really did it.” He said almost in disbelief.
“Darn straight we did!” Applejack cheered; appearing alongside Rarity and Rainbow Dash as they perched on the railing.
“We kicked those guys’ sorry butts!” Rainbow added.
“Normally I appall violence, but what you did, Discord, was amazingly chivalrous.” Said Rarity. “I do believe we won't have to worry about those ruffians knocking on our door any time soon.”
“Right on! Fluttershy’s safe and sound.”
“Fluttershy!” Discord exclaimed, becoming very fidgety as he turned his attention back to the bell tower. “I got to tell her! I’ll be right back.”
His feet nearly flying off the stone, Discord dashed his way into the tower and to the secluded room he had left her to rest. Taking a moment to catch his breath, he paused at the door frame before proclaiming with great joy, “We’ve done it Fluttershy, we’ve beaten them back. Come on! Come and see.”
However, as he turned back away from the door, a strange sensation struck him. The feeling of the hair on his beck stiffening; like dozens of needles signaling that something wasn’t right. Turning back around, he entered the room and slowly approached her. “Fluttershy?”
There was no response. She simply laid there on her back; her eyes closed as the rosé locks of her hair cascaded over her pillow like rivers of liquid azalea. She did not move and as far as he could tell, her chest did not rise or fall with her breath.
“Fluttershy?” He said again as he knelt down beside her.
He felt as if his breath had become caught in the back of his throat as he looked down at her; a sense of dread that came with a tugging possibility he begged wasn’t true.
Placing his paw on her shoulder, he shook her gently. “Fluttershy?” He said again. “Fluttershy? Fluttershy, wake up! Wake up, Fluttershy!”
He was beginning to panic now as she gave him no response as he shook her with more force. “Fluttershy?! Fluttershy, please, you're safe now. Wake up!”
Frantically, he looked about the room, searching for something desperately before his eyes finally fell on a bucket of clean water with a ladle in it.
Reaching over, he picked up the bucket by the handle and brought it over to his side; grasping the ladle in his claws, he dipped it into the water and brought it to Fluttershy’s lips and began to pour.
His heart sank as he watched it flow over her cheeks and chin...
He dropped the ladle; the wooden spoon clattering on the floor as he looked at her with despair. “Oh… oh no. No. No… no, please…” He begged under his rasping breath.
He wanted to scream, he wanted to thrash about and beg for this not to be true, but he couldn’t even move; his body having seemingly gone rigid as he stared down at the lifeless body of his beloved. Where once joy and warmth had filled him, now only a hollow burning resided; the air around him having seemingly gone bitter cold.
Shivering, he reached down and cradled her in his arms, pulling her limp body against his as his eyes filled with hot tears that streamed down his cheeks; his eyes burning from them as his lungs convulsed; the draconequus sobbing violently as he held her there, not even able to notice the new presence near him as it entered the room…
He didn’t even flinch as he felt a hoof come to rest on his shoulder. There wasn’t even a need to look to see who it was. He already knew.
“You killed her…” He said quietly.
Chrysalis stood there over him with a solemn face; her touch tender and gentle on his shoulder. “It was my duty,” she replied. “Horrible as it was… she brought this on herself.”
“Duty?” Discord said venomously.
Chrysalis nodded, placing her hoof on his cheek and turning him to meet her. “Now we can go back to the way things were~”
“No~!” Discord snapped, throwing his arms up and swatting her’s away. “Never go back!”
“...We will. You’ll see.” Chrysalis said calmly. “Don’t you see Discord? At last we’re free of Fluttershy. Now that she’s gone, her poison dies with her. Now that we’re free of Fluttershy, we can go on as close as once we were. Here our sanctuary… our sanctuary.”
“Sanctuary!?” Discord snarled. “No sanctuary... without her.”
“It was her choice, Discord. This was the fate she condemned herself to… I could have helped her. Could have even… loved her.”
“Love!? What do you know of love?!” He was close again to shedding tears as he stared his mistress down. “Who have you ever loved?!”
She looked at him in surprise. “I loved… I loved my mother! I loved her with all my heart, but she was weak! Wicked!”
“No… you are the weak one. You are the wicked one!” Once again tears streamed down his face. His heart filled with sadness, he turned again to Fluttershy and buried his head into her chest.
“Oh my dear, sweet Discord, there, there, I know it hurts,” she said soothingly; her words accompanied with the slight glint of steel. “But now the time has come to end your suffering… forever.”
Looking up, Discord could see the dark silhouette of Chrysalis towering over him; a long knife gripped in her hoof.
Gasping in fear, he whirled around to face her just as she was about to plunge the fiendish weapon into his back, catching her wrist in his own as her eyes burned with fury.
They wrestled across the floor for a while, neither wanting to lose ground, but in that instant, Discord gathered his strength and with a mighty shove, through Chrysalis off her hooves, toppling over onto the floor as he now held the dagger, his eyes glowing with vengeful rage.
Looking up in fear, she held out her hoof to calm him down, “Now, now, listen to me, Discord~”
“No~!” He roared. “You listen! All my life you have told me that the world is a dark, cruel place! But now I see that the only thing that is dark and cruel about it is wicked ponies like you! And the wicked shall not go unpunished!!!”
“D-Discord?”
The voice was weak and frail, but it rang out like the bell tower’s iron bells, causing Chrysalis to direct her attention to the Pegasus that had been laying across the room. Seeing this, Discord turned; his eyes lighting up in disbelief. There where Fluttershy had laid still and cold, now she moving and sitting up, calling out his name as he read her lips.
Joy overwhelmed his heart as he dashed over to her side, picking her up in his arms and cradling her. “Fluttershy!” He exclaimed, holding her close.
“She lives.” Came Chrysalis in her toxic, venomous tone, drawing a sword from under her robes.
“No!” Discord snarled, dashing by the Queen, carrying Fluttershy in his arms.
Chrysalis swung her sword, but was knocked over by the draconequus’s tail as he forced his way past her and out the door, running out onto the bell tower balcony with Chrysalis in hot pursuit. However, as she stepped out into the night air, she found herself alone, with only the light from fires far below illuminating the stonework.
With her sword bared and at the ready, she scouted the walkway up and down, only to find gargoyles in their place.
However, a sneaking suspicion crept on her. Slowly, she approached the railing and peered over.
There, dangling from one of the stone gutters was Discord and Fluttershy, the fire light bellow making them quite visible.
She smiled deviously. “Leaving so soon?” She said as she swung her sword down, trying to cut them down, but only striking stone as Discord swung out of the way.
“Hang on!” He shouted as he leaped from gutter to gutter, Chrysalis all the while swinging at them with murderous intent.
Finally managing to gain some distance from her, Discord swung to one of the nearby gargoyles, helping Fluttershy clamor out the side and shoving her out of the way as Chrysalis brought her sword down, nearly decapitating the stone beast.
“I should have known you would have tried to save that gypsy witch.” Chrysalis spat as Discord managed to his feet, standing atop the statue. “Just as your own mother died trying to save you.”
Discord hesitated at that, “W-what?” he said, feeling very confused.
Seeing her opportunity, Chrysalis grinned, “But now, I’m going to do what I should have done, twenty years ago!!!” She exclaimed as she tore off her cloak and used it to lasso the draconequus.
Discord staggered, losing his footing and tumbling over the edge.
“Discord!!” Fluttershy screamed.
However, thinking fast, the chimera grabbed hold of the cloak, using it to swing back onto the cathedral wall, pulling Chrysalis over the edge along with him.
Fluttershy, meanwhile, reached down and grabbed Discord by the wrist, trying to help him up. “Hold on, Discord!” She called, putting every muscle in her body to work as she tried to save her friend. However, as the smoke from below rises, it made it extremely difficult for Discord to breathe; his head going numb from the lack of oxygen.
Meanwhile, Chrysalis scanned for any means to save herself, spying a nearby gutter and swinging over to it and grabbing hold just as Discord’s grip on her robe faltered.
Desperately, Fluttershy tried to hold on to Discord as he dangled freely, having passed out from inhaling to much smoke, while Chrysalis pulled herself up, towering over her grinning wickedly as the fire light bellow cast dreadful shadows across her face.
Raising her sword, she laughed triumphantly. “And She will smite the wicked and plunge them into the fiery pit!” She proclaimed, not noticing how the gutter she stood upon began to crumble.
Looking down, she could see the stone cracking at the neck, the stone gutter, carved in the likeness of a demon shaking beneath her hooves, knocking her off balance.
Panicking, she grabbed hold of the collapsing thing and froze in fear; her eyes meeting with it as the stone seemed to come to life, laughing fiendishly at her and grinning with vicious intent. She screamed at this, but as she did, the stone gave way, letting both it and her plummeting down into the fire below.
Fluttershy watched on in horror as the Marisian Queen vanished into the blazing light as smoke; her screams dying away soon after she disappeared from view. But as she looked on, to her great dread, she could feel him slipping from her grasp.
“Discord?!” She called down to him. She felt him slip again. “Discord!?”
Until finally, he fell from her, plummeting down towards the flames. She screamed out to him in despair, but then something happened; he suddenly stopped falling, his body now enveloped in a shimmering purple aura.
Peeking out from the lower section of the catwalk, Fluttershy could see Twilight and Flash waving at her as the unicorn levitated Discord back onto solid ground.
Seeing this, Fluttershy rushed to the stair well and made her way down, practically jumping onto the landing as she galloped to Discord’s side, taking him in her hooves and embracing him.
“You saved him.” She said through joyful tears.
“Well, of course.” Twilight replied.
“He’s our friend too.” Flash added as Discord began to stir.
Raising his paw to his head, he rubbed his brow and opened his eyes; the crimson of his meeting the brilliant cyan of her’s.
They stared at each other in silence, both smiling warmly at each other; simply enjoying each other’s embrace before they separated and Discord returned to his feet. His eyes never leaving her’s. That was until Fluttershy closed the distance between them, wrapping her hooves about his neck and pressing her lips against his.
Discord felt his heart skip a beat as she kissed him, unsure how to react at first, but soon melting away into that kiss, wrapping his arms about her passionately.
Flash and Twilight looked on in surprise, but smiled soon after; the two of them nuzzling against each other.
The danger was gone… Maris was free, and them along with it.
Eventually, the morning came; the smoke from the fires having died down, the crowd having gathered outside the cathedral doors, waiting for their champions to appear. They waited anxiously, hoping and praying that they had managed to get through the night.
Finally, the doors began to open, with the figures of Flash, Twilight and Fluttershy appearing out of the darkness.
Fluttershy turned and smiled, reaching out her hoof to Discord. He was hesitant, still keeping back in the shadows, but slowly, he took her hoof and followed her out.
The crowd was silent as they stared at the odd creature before them, not looking at him in fear as they had done before, but confused curiosity. Among them was a little filly who stood by her mother’s side. She stared at the creature, her wide golden, cross-eyed spheres looking on in wonder.
Silently, she looked to her mother and then to Discord before slowly ascending the steps and over to him. He stared at her for a moment as she observed him, kneeling down a little as to not appear too threatening.
However, something unexpected happened. Instead of running away, the little filly reached out her hoof and gently placed it on his cheek. Discord tensed up momentarily, but feeling the gentleness of her touch, he let out a sigh of happiness, letting her hoof rest on him.
She smiled and in that instant, reached up and embraced him.
Discord could feel tears welling up in his eyes as she did, with Fluttershy coming to his side and taking his claw in her hoof.
Finally, the little cross eyed filly released him from her hug, taking him by his paw and leading both him and Fluttershy into the crowd.
“Three cheers for Discord and Fluttershy!” Pinkie exclaimed as she stood upon the partially burnt pillory, inciting the crowd to raise their voices in applause.
“Morning in Maris, a new day appears,
Sing the bells of Notre Mare.
Ending this tale of our poor balladeers,
Sing the bells of Notre Mare.”
Pinkie and her hoof-puppets sang as the crowd hoisted both Discord and Fluttershy aloft, carrying them off on their shoulders. The two of them embracing one another in their arms, their hearts filled with joy as the sun rose above them. Flash, Twilight and Spike, meanwhile, watching them from the cathedral steps.
“And we wish we could leave you a moral,
Like a trinket you hold in your palm.
But here is a riddle to guess if you can,
Sing the bells of Notre Mare.”
“What makes a monster and what makes a mare?”
“Sing the bells, bells, bells, bells,
bells, bells, bells, bells”
“Whatever their pitch you
Can feel them bewitch you
The rich and the ritual knells,”
“Of the Bells of Notre Mare!”
~The End~
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Wonderfully done! An excellent story with plenty of variation from the source materials. (And you even fixed Disney's faulty ending). I had hoped for a little more chaos magic, but I see now it would have distracted things too much from the still powerful ending.
Now all that's left is to fix/ponify the sequel where, instead of a convoluted love story, we have the citizens adjusting to life with magic (both theirs and Discords), Flash taking over as ruling figure (with Twi as his advisor and representative of the church), and maybe the threat of encroaching barbarians from the ger-mane-ic territories.
7657806 I hadn't thought about that, but I'll think about doing a squeal. X3
7657823 If you do (which I'm sure all of your fans would love) it'd have to be nearly all original material. The book never had a sequel and the Disney sequel doesn't really fit anymore since Discord got the girl in your story. The Disney one (which most people haven't seen, let alone know exists) is all about Quasi falling in love with this girl from a travelling show while her evil boss/master wants her to play with Quasi's heartstrings to she can get inside intel on a very old and valuable bell he wants to steal. The plot follows along a very dull and cliched route from there. But you could fix it. You've set up enough differences that you could take the story in pretty much any direction.
But that's just my thoughts. Ultimately, it's your decision. And you know what they say about listening to random strangers on the internet.
THAT WAS AWESOME!!!! Finally your story is done!!!! Such a happy ending!!! Fluttercord Forever!!! YAY!!!
Congratulations!!! Hope you'll write more fluttercord stories!!!
Take care!!!
YES! THEY ARE TOGETHER! YES! YAAAAAAAAASSSSSSS!!!!!!!!
Nice ending,
11 outta 10.
A++
Would recommend, even to worst enemies
AAA
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over 9000% gewd
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hue, kek, lol, bur
... k, this comment is dank enough. Story was gewd... now write another!
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As it should be.
Excellent.
Before I begin this review, let me just say congrats to you
Congrats to, not only finishing this story after two long years of hard work and dedication to it, but also giving the Fluttercord fandom another great story to read
Thank you for taking of all us on your lovely, atmospheric, detailed journey
It was a true delight, and I'm thankful to this story for bringing us together Quill
Without this story, we wouldn't have met fun fact
Lol! Anyway, give yourself a big pat on the back and as always, continue giving us great stories to come because you can
Anyway, in terms of this ending, like most of the readers in the comments below, I predictably enjoyed the the well deserved Fluttercord kiss:3 But also, the emotional build up leading to it and how for a nice twist, it was Fluttershy that sparked the kiss first instead of Discord:) Lol! Also, dawww little Dinky and Discord
So precious!XD
HOWEVER, I do have a small nitpick with Chrysallis's ending and overall build up in the story. It had a great start and tension and potential, don't get wrong. But, I felt her backstory could have been touched upon more throughout the story, which I should have suggested you earlier on and I'm so sorry that I didn't but the reason why I didn't was because I didn't notice it till now. But anyway, the only reason why I said this is because, with proper follow through and build up with her backstory within this story, then the moment in this chapter when Chrysallis talks about her mother feels justified and has a weight to it and then evokes emotion out of the reader. So then, when Chrysallis dies, the reader gets a strange but potent sense of tragedy and understanding for her situation. She was still a bad pony who created this kind of ending for herself like Frollo, but unlike Frollo, there's a story to her that makes you feel sorry for her and understand why she's a bad pony and you wish she made better choices despite her circumstance. To me, there's still mystery to her backstory and I need answers. Plus, I was dying for a full on transformation of Chrysallis transforming to her black, holely Changeling self once she starts the fight with Discord. then, it would have completed her corruption process.
But like I said Quill, this is just a nitpick. This doesn't take away any quality from your overall great and wonderful story
Please continue with your great work and we will always be looking forward to what you have in store:)
aww, I was kinda hoping Chrysalis would change, with her past and all, but otherwise GREAT STORY,
but I have a question
What will happen to Trixie, and pipsqueak?
7807658 yeah I can see what your saying... *shrugs* I don't know, just how it turned out I suppose.
7807669 Yis!
7807707 I actually am not sure what happened to Pip and Trixie... though if I do a sequel I'd imagine them living happily with Fluttershy in Maris.
P.s: you are a female right? just because I said atta'girl, just making sure I wasn't mistaken
7808120
Maybe.
Lol. XD Well actually... I'm a guy.
But no worries, it's all gewd. 
*hugs*
7808406 Lol well don't beat yourself up. It's not like it's really obvious.
Yeah, anyways, long story short,...great story
P.s: I once thought about making a story like this before you created it, and I was also going to use the EXACT same characters for the gargoyles
7808690 Oh! XD So I beat ya to it eh? ;)
pfffft,
I had the Idea BEFORE you even BEGAN creating this story,for you're information
7809670 Maybe, but I wrote it down so meh!
lol
touché,......fine
lol
7811743 lol
*gives you all the fluffy griffon hugs*
AWWWWWW
7845533 I tried to have it where she has a mix of emotions. She wants to control Fluttershy like she does her subjects but also is slightly attracted to her, while also Fluttershy reminding Chrysie of her mom. So Chrysalis is the one who's mega confused. XD
7954713 AHHH
It's finally over what a story though if I had say if there One the irks me in the Frollo ending. I mean Chrysallis had wings she could have flew away. But other than that was a good story.
Well done! I loved your descriptions and how you worked each MLP character into a role!
Also I found the Lauren Faust references very amusing!
On a final note... you got all those bloody songs stuck in my head! Way to go.
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Thank you so much! Just having people read my work makes me feel warm inside, so thank you for reading in the first place.
Also, hehe gewd. Tis a gewd soundtrack.
The Hunchback of Notre-Dame were written by Victor Hugo not Shakespeare
8540606
Wait what? Did I say Shakespeare somewhere?
8540942 Someone add it to William Shakespony (the group)
The ending could have used more fanfare and more Fluttercord but I like the transition cuts to the scenes of the movie. Nice you used the ending of the movie but I would have loved to see also Flash and Twilight kiss perhaps. The gargoyles celebrating ect.
Over I enjoyed this story. It had the fanfare and tone of both the film and noval. I loved how you introduced each character yet I would have loved to see other characters more like Trixie since shes Fluttershy sonewhat sister.
I also find that Discord wasn't seen enough in the story but there was just enough Fluttercord which any Fluttercord shipper would enjoy. Thanks for writting!!
7657823
I would love to see a sequel as well. Maybe more chaos magic, Fluttercord and Discord adjusting to society.
Applejack: "Don't yall ever migrate?!"
I think Luna should tell Twilight that she deserves to live a happy life with the stallion she loves.
Silly Chryssi. You could've saved yourself just by opening your bloody wings. Or using your own magic. Oh well, I guess we can see the moral here: prejudices and a small mind can backfire you.
This got me thinking...Celestia is supposed to be an alicorn, no? Just like Faust. Well, so how can magic and flight be considered evil? Bah, whatever.
To be honest, since the start I expected that, in the final scene, chrysalis would fall into the fire and 'melt' to her changeling appearance, revealing that she was the true monster inside out. Just an idea that came to me :)
I enjoyed reading this, really so. Maybe the ending felt a teeny bit rushed, but I understand you were following the movie's steps.
Great job also with the dialogues, they were real accurate.
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Really happy you enjoyed it. I'm planing on rewriting it and fixing a few things I feel are lacking in it, but still, glad to know my efforts were appreciated.
This was soooo good! Keep writing!