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PrometheusDark


Just an average dude, writing some fanfiction. A gamer to the end and an avid writer of fiction from original stories to what this site specializes in.

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After a decade apart, Chrysalis is confronted by something she thought she'd never see again.
Her ex-husband.

A sequel to The Dragon and The Changeling.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 109 )

I'm hoping that by "corpse" he means "emotionless entity".

HOLY CRAP THAT WAS FAST DONT YOU AGREE CELESTIA!!! stop useing that voice luna
um that wasnt me sis
wait then who
:twilightblush:

500902

Maybe, maybe not.~ Okay, yeah, he did. But still!

500909

Hah, I actually planned on taking a break after my last story, but I'm way to into writing now to stop. :rainbowlaugh:

500914

Don't you DARE consider stopping.
Not unless you want or have to.

I'm sorry, I just love this too much.

You never cease to amaze thumbs up tracking.:pinkiehappy:

500983

Wow, I guess that means you like the first chapter, then?

500990

You're far too kind. But thank you. :twilightblush:

Ah yeah. Here we go again.


Also, Spike and Chrys having a picnic is absolutely adorable.


I wanna see fanart of that....

501063

What does the scouter say about their d'aww levels?

501100

I have a question, and I want your input here. I feel like I rushed the last story a bit too much near the end and I don't want that to happen again, so here's my plan. One chapter a day, that gives me time to write it at the right speed and make sure it's worth uploading correctly, might even make them a bit longer if I have my head on straight. Thoughts?

501110



You can't rush awesome.


and honestly, you shouldn't rush awesome. If at any point in the creative process you feel as though you are rushing, than you're doing it wrong.

501148

Hmm, I see... Thank you for the insight.

501110

Pretty much what Blackbelt said. If you feel you're rushing, slow down a bit and look at what you're working on.

Also, I forgot to favorite-track-thing but luckily I read through the comments.

501212

S'all good. Also, yes, I am taking notes.

As usual your story is fantastic! :yay:
501190 and about that, one a day is perfect. If you wanna do one a day so your writing is better than I am perfectly alright with that. :pinkiehappy: After all it is faster than a lot of writers around here, especially me. :twilightsheepish:

501269

I'll try to keep to that schedule then. Key word being 'try.' :pinkiehappy:

So good!:rainbowkiss: I can't wait for more!

A good start here. Though a question comes to mind here.

How is the entire Mane 6 reacting towards Spike and the Changling Queen being together? That wasn't explained at the ending of the first story and I was hoping to see how they would react to this.

501348

Hmm, I see your point. That is a very big thing I missed. Though, they aren't actually 'together' as a couple yet, they're friends. But, rather then rewrite the scenes I've already written... Ah, yes. I have a plan. Let's hope I'm not stupid and forget it!

Hell, yes. I read this on fanfiction.net earlier, but here I can track it easier and add memes/gifs to ascent my comments. The ship train keeps rolling down the track, it's one of those fics where the reader knows how each character feels towards each other but drama and romantic tension state it must build up more to keep from feeling rushed. The picnic was a great idea cause it does harken back to some of Spike's talents of cooking and organization. It's actually very d'awww that emotions can reciprocated. That alone woulda made more a great chapter but you throw in a some dramaabout an attack and it's icing on he cake. I figure pretty soon I'll run out of praise to give this fic.

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Peace Out.

501364 How about I make sure you don't forget?

501652 Oh um whoops sorry.:twilightsheepish: What I meant was that I'll act as a friendly reminder to include that scene in okay? :twilightsmile:

501675

Oh... Oh! hahah, my mistake. You just sorta came off as... Well, threatening. :twilightblush: And actually, the second chapter is ready to post, surprisingly. Now should I post it, or wait until tomorrow?~

501683 I'm terribly sorry about that. I really didn't mean to do so. :facehoof: If you want to post it tonight or tomorrow that's fine with me.

So...when do we see the Mane 6? Are they plotting to escape and free everypony?

501807 Okay, it's just the way we're being told that the ponies are being left to shrivel and die kind of has me worried about them. :pinkiesad2:

501821

Think I should add a "dark" tag too this? It's not gonna get much worse...

501825 Depends if there is going to be any form of death or gore. I'd add an Adventure tag though since this seems to be one.

501834

*scrolls up* There is an adventure tag. :pinkiesmile: At least on my screen there is.

501848 Oh now I see it. :twilightoops: Well good luck with the next chapter. Don't forget to include the revelation thing about Spike and the Changling Queen being together down the road of this fic.

The only death there appears to be is death of emotions, although when you put it that way, it is a bit dark.

Spike's dragon fire breath can roast stuff, but aside from that, I believe that Celestia also did something related to his emotions so that Chrysalis could be of more assistance than flying and some magic, which - offense not intended- you seem to have neglected. Remember, Chrysalis is pretty much an alicorn, although I suppose her magic is powered by emotions, something she hasn't fed off of in a while...

501925

I just hope I'm not alienating anyone by having Spike have some "hidden potential." I know a lot of people like to stick to the canon of the show religiously.

While you are right about her being basically an alicorn, and with the potential to be even stronger then Celestia, she is powered by emotions. Without feeding on the excessively powerful emotion of love she amounts to a unicorn of average power, at least that's my interpretation. Which is shown in this story. She's only fed on meat since the finale in the show happened, so she's rather weak. She can levitate things and shoot a beam if she really wants to get fancy.

As the story explains, and this WILL be expanded on, they share an unexplained bond that is very powerful.

Going a little into spoiler territory here- I've read that Spike learned his power to send scrolls and such with his fire from Celestia, though I don't know if that's true or not. That plays a part here.

Long comment is long. :applejackconfused:

501944

You pretty much explained to me what I was thinking. In a good way.

Are you perhaps related to Blackbelt? After all, you both seem to read minds...

I thought his name was Shining Armor, not Shining Knight, lol:rainbowlaugh:

Holy crap, you used the word chitinous correctly. Most people don't.



And now the epic adventure begins! This should be fun.

Lets get this love-fight train on the roll! :moustache:

502077

Did I write Shining Knight? Dang, I'll fix that right now.

502564

Epic may be too strong a word for it, but I aim a little high sometimes, so it just might be.:pinkiehappy:

503079

Better to aim high and miss than to aim low and hit.


Therefore, it shall be epic

503202

You're full of sage-like advice, aren't you?~ You guys are all awesome, thank you all for inspiring me to continue writing.

So the story takes off. I've run out of priase to give at this point so enjoy a gif.

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peace out

503334

Well, that looks painful. :rainbowlaugh:

NOOO! FLUTERSHY! :fluttercry:
Awesome chapter, and I am really looking forward to reading more.

504294

This does not bode well for our heroes.

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