Every night, shunned and on her own, Luna watches the moon. Little more than a cold silhouette to the mortal lives on the ground below, she watches over Equestria in her own way. Despite her misery, she will not give up her post.
Rated "Teen" for suicidal themes.
Written for the Weekly Contests Prompt #10, though the idea had come a while before that. Original cover art by LethalAuroraMage. All credits go to her.
Unfortunately, since I deleted the old story, all comments were deleted. I apologize for the inconvenience, and I hope I won't discover that I need to rewrite the whole thing again. There were parts that were left alone, but a lot of changes were made.
Chapters (1)
I loved this version even more, specifically the little story about Light and Darkness that you added. And I saw some other things as well. It was amazing, once again.
I totally agree with Solarflare here, this was amazing.
The writing, the sadness..... Oh Celestia the sadness!
Beautiful, once again.
5275917 Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
5277090 Thanks.
5277908
'Course! You're really good at portraying the characters' feelings while not losing your writing style (which I enjoy, by the way).
I think that was one of my favorite things about it.
5278908 Thank you.
5278926
Sure. I love taking the time to read these stories.
Just a question, did you submitted Forgotten to Equestria Daily...? You mentioned it being one of your favorites. Also, it's longer than How I Wish You Could Know, which I think you did submit.
5278951 No, I didn't. I may someday, but I doubt it'd get in.
Finally came around to to reading this, and I do have to say, very descriptive and full of emotion. Keep it up!
5278976 Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
5278966
It could.
You don't have to, I was just wondering.
I definitely would accept it, but I am not Equestria Daily.
5278984 Maybe someday.
5279043
Added to Sad Luna
5283072 Thank you.
I like this.
Mind you, the formatting was a bit off and it did seem just a bit rushed, especially at the end. But this was good regardless.
Actually, it all reminds me a bit of this...
Anyway...
Cheers, Null
5343243 I write weird, so that might be it. Sorry. And I agree, the ending is rushed, but I've already rewritten it and I can't really think of anything else to change.
5343274
First off, don't apologize. I can tell from what you've written that you could easily write in a more traditional style, if you wanted to. If that's the way you want to write, then more power to you.
Second, I kind of feel like the end might have more impact if you wrote it from Erebos's perspective instead of Luna's. For some reason I feel that it might pay to have the calmer, more collected perspective on that part. It seemed like there was a lot of regret there as well, that could be interesting to explore.
That, and the ending could use a bit more of a lead in, just a bit more to help the reader get into the moment of it all, you know? I feel like that part was supposed to be more climactic, like you wanted everyone to think more about the climactic fall instead of the sudden stop at the bottom. Unless I'm just reading too much into it and projecting. At which point, feel free to ignore everything I just said.
Also, I can't help but notice your blog posts, they are kinda right on the side of the screen as I'm typing this. Depression sucks, I've been there and back a couple times. I'm certainly not gonna be one of those namby pamby jerks who just says, "It gets better, hang in there," (I don't know about you, but I always hated it when people said that) but I feel for you.
5343563 Thanks.
You know,that actually might work. I might have time to work on it this weekend. Thank you.
I suppose it could. I'll try to figure something out.
It does suck... thank you, though.
Hello, the cover art belongs to me. You can see it here: http://lethalauroramage.deviantart.com/art/Long-was-her-shadow-she-cast-400972303
Could you be so kind as to credit me properly? I won't have a problem of you using it if you do c:
5799066 Of course! Thank you so much for letting me know and allowing me to use it!
sad...so sad. I guess luna may have finally found some happiness. at least she won't be hurting anypony anymore. but why is he regretful ?
5963920 It's sort of implying that he felt bad about manipulating her into her death, although, now that I look over it again, I didn't really handle it as well as I could've.