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It's been said before, but your descriptions can get confusing. I have no problems with exaggerated anatomy - hell, I love it; however, the story gets hard to read when Shining is getting his ass filled by mares and there's no indication of how it's happening, it's just happening.
Yesssssss~! Satch, I require more of this delicious content. Mooooore!
Though, as has been said, more description wouldn't hurt. While I have no issues visualizing the 'how' of Shining getting creamed, that whole segment was still quite vague and, honestly? Even as someone with a pretty substantial oral fixation I still think that particular idea is far hotter than the deep throat stuff. In my mind, if you're gonna go and pump cum into someone's ass you've gotta go over it in detail. Describe the sensation of fluid being pushed through his ring, the growing weight in his bosy as it settles into place or flows/oozes deeper into him. Go into detail about how it clings to those slick walls, pouring into his depths only to be chased by a second and third shot of the same, his exit drooling musky juices as the mare who flooded him pulls away.
...I may write some of this, myself.
Still though, the entire 'female glory hole' thing is now officially my fetish, so thank you for that. Upvoted, faved, yadda yadda, please keep writing.
5333182 There is actually. Twice to my memory. Unicorns and earth ponies do it with a more "rear to rear" approach. Usually with a unicorn holding it open. And pegasi do it by hovering like a "C". Sorta like: this (hard to find the clips in the show where they are in that pose)
The times it's just "done by mentioning, it refers back to those parts. So there should be mentions of how it's done concept wise at least.
5333348 Well, it's a bit hard being the only supplier in the world xD
And hum, I can agree that I did lack out a bit in terms of that specific detail... my bad there. Must have slipped my mind when I was writing this. Notice now when you mention it how much I overlooked that part. But as said above: there's at least an explanation of how it's done. And I did a quick semi-fix. Adding a little more detail to the creampies :P Most of em at least.
And come join me if you like, it's lonely at the top xD
Hehe, thanks ;P Working some on Twilight's actually. It sticks to the classic glory hole concept however. Not any fancy quad cubes or whatnot xD
Where did all the dislikes come from?
I've read a lot better sure, but it's not often you see so much effort devoted to a clop fic, and it was actually alright once I got past the anatomical enormities that still elude my mind's eye. I've seen a helluva lot worse, I can tell you. Some clever ideas, funny dialogue and an underused concept. This wasn't a bad fic, all things considered.
Also, did you reference Working the Stall? Cause' it sure sounds like you did.
Oh, and good luck getting Morning's Glory out there! I'll be following closely. Maybe it'll get a fraction of the views the aforementioned Working the Stall did! I certainly enjoyed what's there so far.
5398256 Prolly butthurt people that didn't read the table of content, and expected the generic, cock worship fest. (really, they got no right to bitch if that's the cause.) Personally don't mind those type of fics, only when they're the only one around, and/or is demanded xP
And yeah... somehow people seem to dislike effort... and to a degree: females with needs. From experiments, if you make some mindless penis wankfest, it's bound to on average get like, 30-80 likes. If you do the same with reversed gender roles, it's more likely to get you ~20 dislikes. It's a bit peculiar how much hate/love something can get, almost solely depending where you place the "he" and "she". Out of my two main role reversal experiments, so far had one positive feedback on a role reversal of a popular fic. Noticed a clear split that if a female is a selfish douche, she's a bitch, if a male is the same, they're a stud. Miss my experiments a bit, but ah well :P Anyhow, thanks. Know I'm not the best, but sometime it feels like I'm one of the few that even bothers to try. And ofc it's underused, I came up with it x3 Hard to use anything never displayed before. (In this variation ofc, male counterpart has been done tons of times)
And aye. It's a bit of a counterpart to that, and several other fics. It should be mentioned somewhere in the fit, bottom I think. Don't think I got as "cumslut" as it did, but somehow have a hard time going "all the way" with themes like that. But yeah, it has two main references to it :P Not entirely a "what if..."scenario, but it's a reference indeed. Bit curious how their next supposed chapter turns out, but eh... they seem to not have any interest in going all the way, or putting some effort into it beyond the standard penis praise, so I dunno. It's otherwise a decently written fic.
And thanks. But yeah, it doesn't have the madden syndrome hat Working the Stall has in that it can just mention big floppy dicks, and instantly get a dozen faves by that alone. Partially why I'd have interest if they can pull of a counterpart. To see if they got the stuff, or if they just abuse tropes and cookie cutter standards. Surprising amount of people on this site really are one trick ponies... (somehow especially those that write about guys with tits. Almost all their stories are just identical, bar they change the name of the characters, and usually location and order of acts xD) But dunno, author seems very inactive or asocial. But don't know them enough to make an assumption. Ah, trailing off here, sorry. But yeah, would be interesting to see their skills in writing.
Soo, is this a sequel to working the stall or no?
5687520 It's stand-alone. Only the concepts are similar. Making it the third equine glory hole fic on the site/net :P (To what I've found since I made it.)
So no, not directly at least. It could technically be a follow up, but aside from possibly the world, they're not related in any way ;3
5689222 Aww, that would have been awesome, especially if Both shining and Twi found out after their sessions are completed during one of her visits to the empire with both of them covered in cum and sweat, exiting the stalls at the same time. (maybe to rut each other with glorious abandon after the fact.)
5689253 Derp, mixed up what story you referred to, my bad xD
WtS isn't even a equine glory hole flick xP It's a human based one hehe.
But yes, to that fic, this is an implied homage/follow up or what to call it. To help flesh out the world a little where the original author could not :3 Granted, I went overboard in how excessive it was xD But it was originally meant as a "what if?". But many of my fics trail off from the original path. I think this one is set within the Equestrian borders though if I recall. As only Cadance is implied to be away in the crystal empire :P
So yeah, to rephrase that: It is implied to be a sort of follow up to WtS.
5689860 Yep still it would be hilarious to see the characters from both story's meet up.
5689966 Yeah, it might could've been fun.
But the author of the Twi one has no interest in gloryholes overall anymore (humans nor equine), it was just a quick-oneshot, with a (to them) sloppy tacked on follow up mainly as people demanded it. (They've said they're working on writing females better now though to have them less stale per se.) Plus, they've expressed they lack the competence to write females+males in such situation. Just like I lack just that in how to write selfish males or cumdump females :P (or males for that matter. I'm not good at writing chars without needs, or that that focus on one sided stuff. I tried my best in this one, but yeah... I really never reach that "zone" tbh.)
So it's a bit of a dead end tbh, neither can really reach over into the other territory. I asked them about it, but yeah, a crossover is just quite impossible. If anything, it'd have to be me that tried it if doing a one person story thing. But really have no idea how to even try and integrate the two. Trailing off here xP Guess I could possibly see them both randomly end up in the same multi-hole box or something xD Both chars are massive subs that focus others pleasure though, so them going for a mutual rut might be a little hard to do. But guess it might could work.
heh, that would be hilarious. too bad you cannot continue, would have been even more glorious than the adultry, it could have been named Glorious Incest. anyway looking forward to where you continue next.
5693213 It might have been :P
But yeah, it's be a rather tricky situation to write down.
Atm, not 100 where to go. But will try to get somewhere.
Very good story you have here.
6603458 Thanks :3
I do my best to try and cater to the niches and minorities of the fandom~
Especially with the fetishes I create/invent solely for that purpose xD
6606912 You're very welcome, keep up the good work!
6607278 Thanks~
your descriptions of female genitalia as if it were male genitalia is extremely confusing. that along with plenty of typos earned a dislike from me.
6876806 Can't recall there being many typos. but it's not impossible.
And secondly, all terms I use are 100 % anatomically accurate. And I use them, because there's close to 0, or sometimes 0 counterpart terms. I, unlike a majority of hack artists+authors that can't do female anatomy for shit. (and then brag about their incompetence) Don't settle for that.
It's near impossible to write anything graphic and/or dominant using only the pre-approved ~3 words of "tiny wet pussy" allowed to describe female anatomy. You should be able to imagine how bland all porn with males were if all that was ever allowed to be drawn/described was a tiny, stiff Caucasian child penis. Yet somehow are totally fine with basically that being the only thing generally agreed upon for female characters. I can't tell the number of times I run into a story/comic that ex: pretends to be lesbian, to then have one of the characters randomly genderswap, (or turns out to have secretly been a guy all along) have a 2-4 paragraph monologue of how huge his dick is. For it then to pan over to the female, and just go "Her tiny pink pussy was wet". Or sometimes just "She was wet".
So excuse me if not writing bland, monotone run of the mill, lackluster female anatomy doesn't appeal to you :P But I prefer being able to write my female character doing something. Along with giving them some "pizzazz" and/or agency. That, or at least be able to give them more detail than "she had a pussy". Plus, as said: Every single term used is 100 % applicable. Most of them are just not commonly used to relate to/describe that part~
6878193 on the contrary, i quite agree that with your intentions. its the use of the words "long", "hard", and "stiff" when describing the labia and clitoris (or at least i hope that is what it was otherwise i'm even more confused by your writing) that are confusing to me. They're just not descriptions one would normally associate with the female genitalia.
Of course i can see the meta-irony here, the less a term is used, the less it is associated. In which case i don't know if either of us are particularly correct to assert we are correct. i also realize we cant debate this because of its very nature, however if the goal is to diversify then may i suggest not using synonyms of objectively male descriptions such as these.
6879182 Well, for "long", that term I apply to (for equine) the length of the "slit", as that can be long. Especially ex: comparing a alicorn to a regular pony, considering they have much bigger hindquarters. It's possibly there's a better term for it. English isn't my native language. But that is ex: one example I would try to use that description. As if ex: a pony see's a vulva twice the distance from top to bottom of it than they're used to. Some sort of "damn that pussy is twice the girth of a average penis across" mention would be nice. And instead of describing something like I just came up with, I go with "long". I can agree that "stiff" might be a bit of a stretch though... but overall, the clitoris fills with blood, and becomes erect and harder than when it's flaccid. If you know of a better term, please do share it. But as for now, I use it as it's a "rough" term so to speak. And it works well for describing lust. Especially as I honestly really dislike the "I'm wet!" term. Mostly as it's the only "allowed" one xP
As for the second part: Like I said: That's the problem. There ARE NONE. As said: I ONLY use terms that can be used unisex. Such as ex: "erection". As the literal definition of the term, isn't male specific/exclusive. It's just something most people associate with the male genital. It's like how the term "jerking off" (in Swe at least) literally stands for "moving something back and forth". Which can be done with ex: a clitoral hood. So everything I use are 100 % correct terminology wise. I don't use ex: Fellatio or blowjob. As those ARE male exclusive terms. and while ex: "blowjob" doesn't have a direct female counterpart term. I go with words that work close enough. Like "giving head", as that is logical enough to be able to be used by either gender. And with it being literally impossible to write proper femdom description wise without stealing some of the conventionally "just male" terms. I've had to make do with what I got. But as said: I've always made sure the term works.