Chrysalis is left broken and defeated at the edge of Equestria after her failed plan. Seeking revenge, she releases Discord from his stone prison. But after the Draconequus begins to grow on her, will more then revenge come from their partnership?
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really good story. and one more thing1.bp.blogspot.com/-_TkbcIBMy1Y/T2Ioh3r-T_I/AAAAAAAABGA/BAJcgUhFm7c/s1600/firstpost.jpg
The story has some potential!
655630 This kind of thing is getting really annoying.
And then they meet.
Liking the slow build happing here. Gonna be all the better when the "WHAM!" moment happens.
It's a shame that the changelings won't be around to see it in the future.
Yes oh so much yes
Think I found where you got it from the picture I mean
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655630 You know that will get you a temporary ban, right?
656278 really well crud
plz dont blow what potential this story has. This could be a very good story, dont rush this. there is plenty more fanfics for the story's followers to read while they wait for this story to be masterfuly made. Gold will be made here
656429 Well it has the potential to get you banned. If Poultron or any of the other admins don't see it, then feel free to claim the mighty sword of first. But, if they do see, then the penalty is a one day ban and they will extend the ban for subsuquent offenses.
658837 ouch ok thanks for the info
Pretty brilliant concept on how to put this all together can't wait for more.
>Chrysalis grinned to herself, her sharp cat like teeth glimmering in the darkness.
I believe this part shouldn't be in italics, as it isn't part of Chrysalis' thoughts.
>Chrysalis grinned to herself, the cough had been a nice tough.
I assume you mean "Touch"?
But enough with corrections, I'm loving this concept and I'm glad you're not rushing things, you should keep the story at this pace to develop it well, I'm looking forward to more.
Good work! =D
didnt read it, already like it
689875 now i read it and i still like it
I smell some trickery..... Or it might just be some fried chicken.
i feel a double-cross coming
well what else would you expect from Discord
Hooray for updates.
“Ha, you mean if she finds out!” The changeling grinned to his companion.
“If, if is good…” He responded with a laugh as they did their best to catch up with their comrades and Queen.
Ah, I see what you did there! Nice Hercules reference!
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Welp. This oughta be good. *grabs popcorn*
How would they do it?
Alliance really interesting!
However, the situation does not seem too worrying!
Infuse the two bad guys are Immesi powers but not enough troops to threaten Celestia, by contrast ponies do not have the weapons that can stop their enemies, but surpass them in number!
This is... ugh... just, nevermind.
'Amateurish' is a word I'd use to be kind.
Great story! I want to read more!
Yay! Chrysalis time!
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I don't see how
1926574 Firstly, I will state just one of the simple implausibilities of this scenario: Chrysalis knows of Discord. She would know more than enough NEVER to think she could trust him unless she had an absolutely foolproof way to keep him under her control (or at least a method she believes to be foolproof). She is a power monger, a true dictator, a schemer, a born liar. And if there's one thing no evil dictator never does, it's deliberately put him or herself in a position where a more powerful dictator could kill them/take over.
Secondly, one cannot force the Elements to activate. Also, they restore Harmony. They are in direct opposition to Discord. THEY WOULD NEVER RELEASE HIM!!! In addition, Twilight cannot activate the Elements on her own. We saw that in "Return of Harmony", all 6 are needed, and they all must have the spirits of their elements or it does nothing. The last chapter utterly flies in the face of canon in every way possible.
Third, Chrysalis defeated the Element Bearers, since everyone reading has apparently forgotten that little fact, and Chrysalis also seems to have forgotten it as she doesn't snap back at Discord's snide comments by pointing out that she defeated the ones who'd sealed him. Chrysalis was beaten by Cadence and Shining Armor's (inexplicable) love-powered deux ex machina repulsion spell.
This story skips over the facts wantonly and is in sore need of internal consistency. Also, events occur so quickly, there is almost no sense of pacing. It just dashes from scene to scene, throwing fast-ball plot points with little in the way of development and nothing to note of mood-setting or scenery.
'Approximately' doesn't seem to fit here. It would imply 'somewhere around' six o'clock, not the exact timing that is then implied.
Enjoying the story so far though
awesome! a new chapter! :D
i enjoyed reading it hope to see the next chapter soon! ^_^
I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...........but...........uh...........when is the next chapter coming out? I would love to see more!
I hope you haven't abandoned this fix, that would make us very sad....
This really needs continuation...
Please Continue
More please it was awesome