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Changeling Queen Chrysalis137 stories ·165 members

What Exactly SHE was doing!?

This is the story [in my mind] of how Royal Canterlot wedding started and what exactly Chrysalis was trying to do. This is going to be very random, but it's just a long HeadCanon right?
This is Before The Show.

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Perteks

Perteks #1 · Nov 9th, 2014 · · · Her Plans... ·

First, you could make that first paragraph in author notes,
Secondly a lot of errors did you even read what did you write?
Absurdaly short, you had ideal situation to write more when she was inside canterlot

Luyten

Luyten #2 · Nov 9th, 2014 · · · Her Plans... ·

First off, this is a good story. Secondly, the punctuation errors made it a little distracting to read, but if you have Microsoft Word, or some other type of word processor, you can just copy and paste it into it an press F7. This will essentially proofread your story for you.

MoTyped

MoTyped #3 · Nov 9th, 2014 · · · Her Plans... ·

In that case....this is going to be really hard.

DualKitsune

DualKitsune #4 · Jul 24th, 2015 · · · Her Plans... ·

I like where it is going! Not to mention you've already done a wonderful job of explaining things.
She did all this because she was dazzled and became greedy. Also, NEVER plan on an empty stomach. You do stupid things, trust me.
They were alerted but didn't know, who, what, where, or really why.
Changelings aren't the smartest.

HOWEVER, you have left us with several questions. Why was there no one to teach her? Why do they not have clothes? "It's swamp" helps, but not that much. And why on earth was the kingdom in such a state?
A little more detail will fix this easily. Just a few remarks by her could easily do that. No need for great depth, (though it would be very nice) at least not until later hopefully.

Also, little grammar errors everywhere. Have someone look it over for you, preferably someone you can say has better writing skills. No blind leading the blind, please.