I had fallen off of my Scooter at full speed and injured myself.
Thankfully my friends managed to help me back home, but we had to face Twilight Sparkle on the way there.
Here is the thing, she managed to help me enough to get me back to school the next day, but this is where something went a bit sideways.
Apparently she is a bit shaky on exactly how much power she puts into certain spells. Maybe it is an aftereffect on having the combined power of four Alicorns at her disposal, as brief as the experience had been.
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I'm not being mean (least I hope not) but I would recommend you get an editor
5292981 I guess I could make use of an Editor, if any were to step forth and stick to the project.
If you would like to, I guess it would be interesting.
For now, I have more or less given up on someone on my merry train-ride.
5294994 I ain't any good with the editing thing, though Matt11 is very good at it. He follows me, look him up
5295853 I guess I could PM him and ask if he could help me with the editorial.
On a closer look, it could be interesting to hear what you think of the porsonification and interpretation of the Crusaders, though.
At present, I could use some help with my Zecora as well, which I would look for help elsewhere, there would be a group for her, I have noticed.
5295950 the characters seem solid, and very believable. And I don't know anyone who has never needed help with Zecora, that rhyming speech thing is really annoying. Though people have found excises to have her break out of it, like if the situation is urgent.
5296143 Thanks, then I guess the story should not be too far off.
I kind of see the rhyming as part of who she is, there is no legitimit excuse to exclude it within canon universe, unless it is a crossover with a story like Star Trek, where the Universal Translator is available. With the possible exception, if you have a scene with Zebras exclusively. If it isn't just a leftover from the language the Zebras speak, it may have something to do with her brand of magic too, I guess.
In urgencies is when these things should be coming through the heaviest, since you don't have enough time to rephrse or thing of what to say, you just blurt it out.
I guess we could have a paralel with Hicks or hispanics, or what ever you choose to call them localy where you happen to live?
I think we should withdraw to the clubhouse for the evening?
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5473629 Rather than merely dropping in on the orchard, it needs to contain some more adventure, episodes and meeting a few more Ponies along the way, if that is what you meant to say?
I am currently guiding the trio of fillies around in order to get them to where they have to go.
There is a bit of a challenge in getting them there in just the right way for them to meet every Pony they need to see before this is all done deal.
This took to long of a wait for this good of a story
5601327 Just curious, how long would have been acceptable, in your eyes?
The quality of a story is largely depending on taking the time to get the right inspiration and secure the details, before I publish, as opposed to waiting for you to point out any possible flaws for me.
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I was trying to say it is really good while being cryptic
5602589 Oh, I guess I misread your intent a bit, there.
For some reason, it did sound more of impatience, but I guess it wasn't my rate of publishing chapters, then?
I have a few difficult subjects to go up against in this story, the Rhyming of the Zebra is but the first one of many. There is the challenge of how to make the Apples come out right, as opposed to all the possible pit falls available.
5473629 I'm trying to hold my laughter, and I'm failing horribly
6385043 Just curious, what is causing you to laugh?
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Why don't you ever finish the story you have a whole bunch of cool concepts of stories but you rarely actually finish them. Why?
7085202 I think I could say that you just answered the question.
All these cool ideas, just screaming out to me; demanding that I start writing that one story,a and the next, and the next.
Of course, the cool ideas can't become cool stories, before they have been completed, can they?
I may need some encouragement and remanders to keep up thes stories you enjoy reading.
Anything that makes the story develop into the story you enjoy reading, and keep it along the lines initially envissioned.
Of course, this does include helping me find things that doesn't come out as good as intended, and suggesting how to fix these issues.
7087467 this is a very good story I would like for you to complete it honestly is very cool concept I'm not that good at criticism because I rarely see a problem I'm bad at punctuation so I don't see it that often I'll tell you if I see any spelling errors I'm pretty OK at that I just like for you to finish the story it seems like a cool concept oh and if I tell you it seems fast-paced that's saying something because I'm usually okay with that, this one I didn't notice a problem but some of your other stories I did
No offense, but the dialogue feels REALLY forced. It's like I'm reading a fic about the CMC being robots, not Scoots being an alicorn.