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ACT One: (Chapters 1-10)
After a fatal tragedy, Twilight wakes up in a situation unlike anything she had experienced before. How is she supposed to react when she finds herself reincarnated as the daughter of Queen Chrysalis, the very one who orchestrated her assassination? Does she give into the rage and loss of her former self, or does she hold true to the magic of friendship?
ACT Two: Synopsis incoming
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Very good so far. Nothing to add, or criteak.
Keep up the good work.
Added this to a few groups. May add to a few more later.
Added to tracking. Looking forward to see how this goes.
Interesting So Far.
ChangEling, with an E. They change, so it's pretty easy to remember.
Good start. I'm curious to see where this goes.
Hm....
Only that passive active text kinda broke it, overall I'm interested in what you gonna do with it.
My only guess with that voice that they made her somekind of bioandroid? I don't see any other sensible option. And question did they rescue her or made her into this
Interesting story
I hope there is more love this
MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE........... should I carry on? is there a need to? so what should there be? More that is! This is an EPIC opening chapter!!!!
I'm guessing she was reincarnated as a changeling after she was murdered? The active/passive thing was a little jarring though, unless she's a robot or trapped inside a computer simulation or something.
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The whole active/passive thing I have for Twilight serves three purposes for now. 1: It'll allow Twilight to know things that normal changelings are supposed to know instinctively. 2: It gives a clear record of her growth. 3: It messes with her head. There's more, but I don't want to reveal them yet. (EDIT: It also pays homage to the original concept I got this from.)
5230319 Oops. Whenever I type changeling, I have to consciously remember to put in the 'e'.
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Link to original maybe?
5231359 Okay. There's a manga and gdocs story.
Manga
Story
so when is a chapter going to be?
Interesting. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
I haven't even read this, but the Re: makes me think of Metal Gear Rising: Revengeance
This is amazing! I can't wait for you to update!
Maybe you should check out mine :)
Plz write more
-phantom
I can understand this working out to not be worse than her former life--that isn't too uncommon--but becoming better? That's harder to see.
Particularly seeing as how none of the rest of the Mane Six or Spike are on the character list at all. Losing her friends would de facto be worse than what she already had (unless this is the type of story that paints them and/or ponies in general and/or Equestria as a whole badly). Unless you're saying change as in "not dead", in which case this is better, yeah.
Was Fine Slice a changeling come to steal her away, or did he just unknowingly provide the changelings with an opportunity to acquire Twilight? Do changelings convert corpses? Even without her commentary, it really looks like she died. Or was she saved before that final blow? Or did that blow just serve to knock her out so she couldn't gather enough concentration to use magic while he carried her away?
It rankles a little to see Twilight taken out of action so quickly and easily, but the Element of Surprise really is the strongest element. It beats everything (except invulnerability).
Anyways, I have become interested in this story and eagerly anticipate further development.
MOREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
5245482 To answer some of your questions, the change for the better is for far more individuals than herself.
I want the character tags of this story to be somewhat dynamic. I don't want to spoil some major characters until their time comes.
As for the rest of your comment, you have one thing right but you're off with the others. I will not be spoiling which is which.
This sort of reminds me of Twilight: The Gamer. Like, a lot. Coincidence?
Apart from that, I really like what you did and am awaiting updates.
I found one mistake... Your time between posting is damn too long!
butt seriously I'm very intrigued, and you can do alot to annoy chrysalis in larva form :D plus all that crisis
You better hurry up with more chapters
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
This is a very interesting story thus far, and I cannot wait to read more!
Twilight shall become a beautiful butterfly one day. Or a changeling queen, also good.
But seriously, I like this story. Always interesting to see changeling society/biology like this.
So Chrysalis had her assassinated, then. Does she know about the reincarnation?
So... based on the 'Active, Unique Passive' and all that, changelings operate off video game physics?
Interesting so far, but there's not a whole lot of substance yet. Mostly I want to see what happens once Twilight learns to walk (and, I suppose, talk).
Well, now that we have clarification as to what's going on (with the exception of Harmony's Avatar) I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next. Especially when Twilight re:gains the ability to speak.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
Smooth, Chrysalis. Very smooth.
How long do changelings take to mature? Bugs usually don't take very long, but bugs also aren't the size of ponies (much less alicorns!). If Twilight has truly picked up Rarity's lesson, then I expect that Chrysalis will soon start counting the
daysminutes until her daughter grows up enough that she can send the brat out on her own.If she can hold back on her vindictiveness, though, she could take advantage of the resources Chrysalis and the hive will so eagerly offer her. Changeling magic, books from outside Equestria, information on Changeling history and physiology... and the means to hinder any future plans of Chrysalis's.
There are so many ways this can go--I'm all but quivering in anticipation. I haven't seen somepony getting reincarnated as a changeling--converted into one, yeah, but not this. Will she be running away as soon as she is capable of leaving, or wait until she's fully grown? From the story description it looks like she'll take on some measure of responsibility for the hive, but there are a few ways I can see her bringing change "for the better" without actually leading the hive herself (although I don't think that's too likely). Will this story ever look outside the hive at how everypony else is reacting to Twilight's death (if she wasn't replaced by a changeling, that is...), or will the p.o.v. remain with Twilight?
I'm so glad I favorited this.
5270733 Your picture makes me think your comment was sarcastic, that is amazing hahahahahha
So love this want more soon
Your doing a amazing job. This is a very interesting concept. Please. Keep going - your possible new follower shadow-silver
Re: monster is one of the best novels i'm reading so I have very high expectations toward this
don't disapoint me! 
XD Enjoying it so far. The avatar's archive thing is cool, too.
Only Twilight would list get feelings in alphabetical order.
Are we allowed to make guesses as to what the poem says? I have some pretty good ideas...(looks half a page down)
5270680 This story has very little to do with Twilight: The Gamer. I'm sure that your referring to Avatar's Archive and Twilight's reincarnation, but both are significantly different from Twilight: The Gamer.
5270696 5270687 I don't write very fast. I'm lucky to get in 200 words a day.
5270825 Chrysalis has no clue.
5271030 The time when Twilight regains the ability to move around freely and speak will actually be pretty quiet. It's the time just before then that gets crazy.
5271309 You're actually pretty spot on with some of your speculation here. Before anything else, I need to get Twilight through the larval arch. It shouldn't take more than 3 or 4 more chapters. There's only so much I can do with a baby without turning this into a Slice of Life/Comedy story.
5272841 I know. If you've read Re:monster before, then you could easily tell where I got this idea by the first chapter. Obviously Re:Changeling will be vastly different from the inspirational source.
5273289 There's no need to guess what the broken song was because it's the exact same as the second one. The only reason the first one is broken up is because Twilight couldn't make out all the words.
5273478 Gee, maybe I should read the chapter before asking questions about it.
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No. It is the Elements of Harmony that run off of Video Game Logic, but otherwise good guess.
The last (and first) person I used this review formula liked it, so here you go I guess
Stats: (Current chapter as of review: 2)
Shallow face value-7/10
Ooh, a Twilight Becomes a Changeling story. A lot of people do this, which lowers the interest of people scrolling by. Let's see if you can succeed in being a 'hidden gem'.
Plot & feel-10/10
In my opinion, the most important part of an X Becomes a Changeling fic is the reaction scene. This is what most people (unless my knowledge of the universe is flawed) are here for initially. You have an entire chapter devoted to the reaction scene, which is done pretty much perfectly. The only possible nitpicky problem that I could have is Twilight's sheer amount of screaming in chapter 2. What does a screaming mini-changeling even sound like?
Pacing-8/10
Dramatic stories written by brand-new amateurs seem to have this problem. The stellar like:dislike ratio makes me think you aren't an amateur, which explains the lack of a pacing problem. Longer chapters might be better, but you're good at using the few words you have wisely.
Headcanon-10/10 so far
If you write this kind of story, you have to use rules/ideas/concepts not specifically sanctioned by Lauren Faust and co. That is, unless you think of the comics as canon... There are still missing pieces of information regarding how Twilight is reincarnated, but what's a story without something to figure out later?
Spelling and Grammar-9/10
There may have been one grammatical error (missing comma) in chapter 2.
45/50-Highly Recommendable! I guess you did succeed. I'm excited to see where this can go...
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5273628 I can see what someone else would like your review formula considering I love it.
I understand how common it is for Twilight to become a changeling in Fimfiction, but this idea wanted to be written.
Believe it or not, but Twilight's reaction to being reborn as a changeling isn't over yet. She's now at step 2 of a 5 step process; though I do think steps 3 and 4 will end up rolled into one.
Increasing chapter size presents all kinds of problems and may end up worsening the story. There is little time in a day where I feel inspired enough to write on top of having the free time to do so. Three to six-thousand word chapters would take weeks to write. There's also the fact that this first arc would need quite a bit of filler to become bigger: I'd rather not waste words and effort.
Yeah, I've only got 2 chapters and just over 4,000 words. It would be pretty poor work if I revealed the whole picture within such a small frame. There's a lot happening in the background that I haven't touched.
I try my best with the grammar, but an author looking through their own work will most assuredly miss something. Can you point out the missed comma for me?
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At the bottom of the review thing, it says that you succeeded in making a more popular plotline great. I don't know how to react to the other things you said...
(Watch +67)
Also, here's that
typeotypo.So Twilight died and got reborn as a Changeling. Interesting concept
Twilight is now a bug-bot with a wikipedia database inside of her head!
Oh you read that manga to! i loved it.
5321924 I read the google docs Re:Monster and the manga. The written story is well ahead of the manga.