DJ Soul is loved by many and known across Equestria as the master of the art of music. He has a life story that must be told for everyone to read. From his years as a colt, learning what he really wanted to do in life, to the beautiful music he spread across the land for all to love. He influenced many ponies in many ways and it's time he gets the recognition he deserves as he's forever immortalized in writing for Equestria to remember. Although he will never be forgotten even if his story had failed to be written, it would still be told through the lives he inspired and the hearts that he touched in the time he spent in Equestria.
(For the notes, the art is 100 percent owned by me. Thank you to EXOLIEF, Kyrok, and Drgnwolf for proofreading and helping me edit.)
I'd break up the first paragraphs if I were you.
498514 For grammar purposes or just for ease of reading?
498520 Ease of reading, no one wants to read a paragraph that is huge.
498526 Alright, much appreciated. I'll find some breaks and try to move it around!
Good read, one thing I noticed is that Scratch kinda came off as a bit...School girlish. Not that I know how she actually is, as she is a BG pony, but just something I saw. Good job, man. Let's see which emocon is best: Uhhhh this one:
505331 Yeah, had to make her seem a bit younger just for audience sake. I didn't want her to come off vulgar or anything. She's not much off in age with Soul, just to let it be known. Otherwise, chapter 2 may be a bit weird.
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Bro...this is awkward as fuck right now. I have that username before I came here or became a bronie.....
505774 I didn't know you existed. LOL I just joined and had this idea based off the person it's a tribute to. Win.
I FOUND YOU!
HOLY shit my names soul on youtube.................................................:3
I didn't get a proofreader on this one although I might consider it. The person who was supposed to proofread this started being a real douche, so I chose to just post this and see what comments I get! C:
I forgot about this one. Keep up the good work.
Wow this is really good..
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Sorry it took so long! I have been focusing on The Bronyhood and going to Bronycon, so it's caused me to have to stop working on this for the time being. However, I should be able to pump another chapter out before I take my trip! :D
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Gracias! I'm glad you think so and I hope others enjoy it as well! Thank you tons!
And then they walked outside, and Soul was hit by a bus.
GG life.
Anywho, who did your cover art mang? It looks beastly.
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It was one of eight that I purchased. I paid for an art bundle of 8 different artists to make a cover. That was the one I figured fit best. I would like for more artists to give it a shot. I just gave them a vague description and said "Go for whatever your imagination can create."
Wow, I like it. Elegance in simplicity, such is life, and all that jazz
Writing was good, if a bit scrunched together at times, and there were a few grammar errors here and there, but really it's no big deal. I like DJ Soul and his character more than makes up for any real complaints.
All in all, a solid 8 will do for this story as of yet.
Tracking ya because I like your style, good sir
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Gracias! I really appreciate the feedback more than anyone knows! Really helps motivate me to write. Also, if there is a grammar error or spelling error, please point it out either here or in PM and I'll fix it! I definitely want this story to be the best it can be since it means a lot to me!
You know, I've had two people downvote this story so far and they have gone back and gave me a thumbs up instead. So now it looks like another has disliked my story.