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Every mahou filia fights for a wish. Some choose to fight for their lives, others to heal brokenness, still others to save the ones they love. But Ditzy was different. She chose to save the whole world from a cruel cycle, a cycle of despair. As an consequence, no one can remember her as anything other than a simple background pony.

No one, that is, but Octavia.


A Mahou Shoujo Madoka Magica crossover. Based on episode 12. Spoilers for the series' ending is contained in this story. Familiarity with the series is recommended, but not required. Familiarity with Rebellion is not required, though the Sirens are based off Rebellion's Nightmares.

Cover art: "The Round Cake Goes Round in Circles" by CyanAeolin on Deviantart.

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Wow! I know nothing of the world that you're using as a crossover, but your imagery is incredible. The desperation, the sadness, and the small flecks of light that make everything worthwhile... it's all *right there*, palpable.

I'll have more to say later, but for now, let's just say this read was well worth showing up a few minutes late to work.

I've had a crossover with Madoka Magica in my mind for quite some time, but this is the first time I've ever seen a crossover for it on this site. Props to you for being the first I've seen!

There were a few things I feel could have been done better though, like the explanation for the world. I know the world of Magicia, so it all made sense too me, but I feel like some of the parts may have been a bit too vague for unfamiliar readers to truly grasp.

Also, I get that you're writing mostly for fans of the series, but considering that you kinda spoil the end of Madoka, I feel like you should put a spoilers warning somewhere.

Otherwise, it was great! Action was good, pacing was solid, the ponies that were paired to each role fit and it almost felt like I was in the world of Magica.

5224821 Yes, reconciling the two worlds was probably the trickiest part about writing the story. It was my original intention to have MadoMagi fans relate more to Octavia, and those unfamiliar to relate to Vinyl's situation. For this reason, I chose to leave certain parts, such as the Incubators, vague. Of course, Octavia was given the prominent role, putting Vinyl on the back burner, so yes, my execution failed in that sense. I hope to learn from my mistakes here and keep in mind both sides of my audience when writing another crossover. And I will take your advice and put a spoiler warning. Thank you for the constructive feedback!

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