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EllyCoo


Hi, I'm EllyCoo. But you can call me Elly or Amy. I'm french so excuse my grammar errors and all that. Thanks! Hope you like stuff I do

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Seeing how ungrateful Spitfire and Fleetfoot were, how they ditched Soarin', Rainbow Dash is frustrated. If being a Wonderbolt was being like them... she didn't want to be a Wonderbolt.
She decides to create her own flight team, and maybe compete with them.
With the help of many of her friends, maybe their team will get on top. Being friends is a lot better than being a Wonderbolt.

Vote here for Rainbow's flight team's name!

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 43 )

"Hmm... The Prism Dashes? The Spectrums? The Rainbooms? I kind of like Rainboom... I'll need somepony creative to help me."

Sorry RD but the Rainbooms was already taken by "You".

5255656 Actuallyyyy this is before Rainbow Rocks lol xD and she doesn't know what happens in the human world. You got any ideas? ;^;

5255660 Well, how about the antithesis of the Wonderbolts? I am of course referring to the Shadowbolts from the Season 1 premiere, as a way to mock them in a sense.

5255726 Yeah, but I thought Shadowbolt's a too dark name and you know. It would sound evilll

5255730 Let's see...Thunderbolts or Rainbolts come to mind at the moment. Why not make a poll and let the fans decide?

5255736 Yeah, I shall do that, thanks. I like Rainbolt.

5255754 Happy to help out a fellow author.:twilightsmile:

It's not a bad idea for a story; I think you have to ignore that Spitfire seems to have learnt the lesson of Loyalty at the end of Rainbow Falls but, hey! This is fanfiction! That's less of an AU jump than most!

FWIW, It wasn't the first time that Spitfire made a sucky command decision based on valuing flash and raw performance over maintaining a good team dynamic. I don't know about the Wonderbolts as a whole but I, for one, would hesitate to join a team whose leader is so ethically flexible.

Did someone already do the 'make her own team, with blackjack and hookers' joke?

5256130 In fact, forget the team.

5256194
But what if it's a team of hookers?

Comment posted by Scigatt deleted Nov 11th, 2014

5256130

Damn it... You beat me to it. Regardless here's Bender anyway.

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Sorry but I have to go with Shadowbolts.
Reasons

The Wonderbolts have a very good name and are, in this universe, not so good underneath.
They are composed and directed by the pegasi attached to Celestias part of the military.

The Shadowbolts would have a name that has not so good connotations but would be very different underneath.
They could have Lunas backing, which might mean Thestral members and night shows.
This also giving some equality between the sisters as well as major comptiono for the Wonderbolts

5256383 I was thinking more along the lines of either soiling the Wonderbolts' name (since they are similar) and/or teach the Wonderbolts how they should behave. It's a good tone-down from RD's egocentric name ideas (RD seem to be one of the few characters who can be awfully egocentric without being annoying... yeah, she's a cool gal).

This concept is very, very good. But you need some more editing. Dear author, take come time to come up with chapters and try to fill them with more substance. A pre-reader to catch mistakes and to help you write it perfectly is fine too.

Jokes aside, you've got the ball going, author. Do not drop it!

Derpy should join.

Not only was she fast enough... well, the best choice for the relay race when almost everypony else was already in teams, but with the almighty power of headcanon I'm quite sure she'd be a great stunt flyer.

I imagine that she can't fly straight, so she learned how to do weird things like fly upside down, backwards, or sideways, so she can keep going forward when she can't tell which direction the ground is.

5257018 Ehhh too much "bo" lol xD

She didn't use it for ages, since she didn't have any homework.

hadn't
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Her list was emptying, but a few good and interested fliers rested on the paper.

interesting
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So far so good.

You know I think the Wonderbolts are technically part of Equestria's military so the smarter thing to do would be to have Twilight use her royal powers to launch an investigation into the Wonderbolts to see just how badly the team has been compromised. Rainbow falls plus numerous incidents in other episodes tells me something has gone seriously wrong with the program. Heck I'd wager the current Wonderbolts would fail the "Bell Test" from Naruto right now...

5258271 Thanks! i really meant that the fliers were interested though

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How'd they find out and let Dashie know though? You show that she doesn't leave the house. Other than Twilight saying it was a lot of fliers, nopony's been over to visit Dashie so she would be unable to know of interested parties.

It comes across like ponies with interesting flying abilities, or skills. But if you id mean interested. A few lines about either Twilight letting others know, or something. And saying ashe'd let them know to stop by if they're inerested. Or something along those lines.

5261195 ..... What's Twilight role in all this again? o__O

5261482

XD. Well Twilight, Flutters and friends came to visit Rainbow Dash. But all they did was look at the list, say "wow that's a lot of ponies!" then left. Adding a line or two about Twilight telling other fliers if they're interested or what not. Would make the interested fliers bit make sense. Since at the moment there'd be no way that they'd know about the flight thing since Rainbow Dash hasn't left her home to tell others.

And it could give a bit more meat on the visit the friends made. Since all that really happened was they say it sounds like a good idea, that there were a lot of ponies on the list, and left to let RD work on the list.

There goes nothing... Now let's see... Twilight. Nah, she's a lousy flier.

Shots fired!

This does kind of fit Rainbow, though. She's loyal, not Miss Sensitive.

"Fluttershy told me about your project", said Twilight. "It sounds super cool!"

"Super cool" does not sound like something the purple bookworm would say. Something more formal like "very interesting" or such would be more in-character.

This is an interesting concept. I hope it works out.

5261676 You're right about Twilight I should rectify that xP

Just go and ask Luna, if her (well, Nightmare's) offer to be the leader of the Shadowbolts still stands?

5261615
No interested is the right word here. Dash is crossing off the ponies she thinks wouldn't be interested in joining a flight team. Since she seems to pulling from a list of ponies she knows this would work without her asking or telling anyone else about it.

That being said this story could use a round of proof reading. Interesting concept though so it's got my favorite for the moment.

I was seriously expecting her to name them the Sonic Booms and having a motto like,

"If you aren't breaking sound or going deaf, then you aren't flying fast enough."

Well, time to get off my lazy ass and comment on this, considering I fav'd and everything...

Potential Teammates: Thunderlane's a lock, Derpy and Bulk would be nice, too. I was thinking about Flash, before realizing this takes place during Season 4, thus making it impossible to get him away from the Crystal Empire. (Shame too, since he only appears in FlashLight fics) Cloud Kicker, maybe? Also, Scootaloo for lolz.

Team Name: Eh, whatever works for you.

On another note, the "Blackjack and Hookers" joke must be made in-universe by someone. It doesn't matter who, just someone.

5263158 That's a cool motto!

poor mist
this is good CONTINUE

I figured Lightwing and Green Stylus would make a cameo. I'm liking it so far. Can't wait to read more. :pinkiehappy:

5362051 Not sure I would develop them a bit more in this fic.... I just wanted to mention my OC. x3 Maybe just give "em talking roles

Even before Rainbow Falls the Wonderbolts have always been questionable.

Hurricane Fluttershy: Spitfire didn't help with the tornado.

Secret Of My Excess: They couldn't stop Spike.

Wonderbolt Academy: Spitfire approved of one of her students cheating, and at the end she scolded RD for not wanting to be a danger to herself and those around her, and even waited until the last possible second before talking...or in her case confronting RD. In Spitfire's mind she was not responsible for the safety of her students, or even for chaperoning her students. In Spitfire's mind RD was in the wrong for wanting to be honorable by leaving the Wonderbolts. "How dare you storm off without giving me a chance to explain myself!"...How dare she? HOW DARE SHE!?!?!
HOW DARE SHE!!!!!!!?!?! How dare YOU avoid doing your job by not supervising the students, how dare YOU for supporting cheating, how dare YOU make an injured pegasus continue to fly, how dare YOU almost get 5 civilians and most of your own students killed!

Sonic Rainboom: The Wonderbolts straight up get knocked out by Rarity. Seriously? How can strong athletes be knocked out so easily by somepony like her? That's like if Lance Armstrong got knocked out by Jennifer Love Hewitt.

Also, they never really do anything spectacular, other than shoot smoke out of their butts. So they aren't really that good at flying really.

At first I thought RD would join them and get them into shape, but the episode Testing Testing 1 2 3 shows that RD is starting to slowly be acting like THEM.

5628423 I agree with you! Let's just say that this is the drop of water that... made the vase....
um...
it's a french expression

Very interesting story of rainbow dash not a wonder bolt I like it is hope you write more soon update soon.

V8

5628423

How dare you storm off without giving me a chance to explain myself!"...How dare she? HOW DARE SHE!?!?!

Greta Thunberg confirmed.

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