Dinky's talent is making friends, but maybe she should be careful about who those friends are. A Non-canon Lunaverse story for the October 2014 Scary Stories Event.
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I Thought I Was Toast
Insanity is just creativity to the nth degree.
I Thought I Was Toast
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hmmm i liked it should have made it a bit longer like.....when they find the message everyone leaves but dinky says i forgive you and then the story ends but other then that a decent story now i'm going to find senior burbon dds gto and stfu pronto
I thought this was a good story. It was a little obvious what the catch was but not to the point that it was annoying. I could see Dinky trying to make friends with a spirit like this, lol. It fits her.
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And that's why I'm not sure whether I can call this a good Dark Story... Good Dark Stories, contrary to what all the gory slasher fics and films of today might like to imply, come from subtle and psychological horror. The psychological part I can kind of do, or at least I think so. The couple of times I've written anything remotely dark I've always felt I could at least phrase events so as to provide a proper psychological chill most of the time... What I lack in abundance, however, is subtlety. I lack the ability to provide uncertainty and mystery, and that is one of the biggest parts of a good dark story... It's not just the feeling of fear or creepiness or dread that's important... It's the feeling of not knowing how bad things truly are or aren't... Of not knowing if you should be even more afraid then you already are, and whether or not you have even the tiniest chance in hell... The scariest stories of all are the ones you constantly go "what if?", and as your imagination goes wild you can't help but place yourselves in the victim's hooves too late to realize that was the trap all along. Suddenly it's not like you're reading about some random victim... No... It's as if you are the victim, and no matter how the story goes you can't look away because you just _need_ to know how it ends. It makes the experience of the story so much more deliciously terrifying and surreal...
I wish I could write like that...
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I think you'll get there. Maybe try reading up on some horror authors that are good at creating that kind of atmosphere and taking some cues from them. The only horror author I can think of is Steven King, however, so idk how helpful I'd be in pointing you in a good direction.
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I might do that, although I'll probably need to do so in moderation. I have endless respect and admiration for good horror stories, but I'm also kind of incredibly sensitive to them. It sometimes takes me days to get over a proper scare, probably because my overactive imagination tends to replay things over and over in my head.
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I can sympathize. I have a policy about watching anything remotely scary after a certain hour, lol. Plus, there's stuff like Five Nights at Freddy's (don't look it up if jumpscares freak you out) that trip me out just watching other people playing them.
Sheesh. Poor Dinky.
this was a nice sad tale.
Hmm, Halloween story... colt asks if a filly wants to hang with him... aaaaaaand I know where this is going.
But it's a bit too blunt. The issue is in what I've just stated. The plot is too apparent from the outset. There's no shock when you can tell exactly what's coming from the first line. It simply becomes a dour story, little different than if the colt was a live pony who simply wanted to entice Dinky into mutual suicide.
Consider one of the most classic and disturbing "Twilight Zone" stories: "It's a Good Life", in which a child possessing immense telekinetic and psychic powers (basically the inspiration for characters like Dark Pheonix and so forth) without any maturity or moral compass terrorizes his hometown and kills everyone who so much as thinks badly of him.
We don't see this at the getgo. The horror is in the build-up, the hopelessness of the mounting climax when we are confronted by the fact that the townspeople, despite this unending terror they live in, are now too fearful to lift a finger against the mad god child who dominates them without even the slightest trace of comprehension of his cruelty.
By the way, that episode is one I like to point to when SJWs try to tell me how wise and enlightened children are. That, and the fact that children tend to delight in things like huffing spray paint and eating glue. Pointing these things out tends to make them sputter furiously, which I find immensely amusing.
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Let's be honest, there is no plot twist or anything here. I went into this one knowing everyone would see the end coming a mile away because I'm about as subtle as a pile of bricks. That's why it's tagged dark and tragedy but not horror. Horror needs suspense, and I knew there wouldn't really be any suspense with this one--just a sense of the inevitable.
9082390 That's rather why I dislike most fictional tragedy tales where the endpoint is broadcast. There's not really any emotional impact for me, because there's no false hope to shatter, nor is it based on a real-world event (Like "Shindler's List") where the horror comes from knowing actual human beings behaved like monsters, and there is the small shining light of the few who held on to their humanity in spite of it all. Stories needs that balance to some degree, even morose and horror tales, otherwise the tale doesn't have the rises and falls of drama.