New to this sort of thing

Discord decides he wants to hang out with the main six and try this whole friendship thing out.

Cover Art by: Oak Sabletwist

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ocalhoun

ocalhoun #1 · Oct 28th, 2014 · · ·

Eh... I just can't make it past the wall of text that first paragraph presents.

BewhoUr

BewhoUr #2 · Oct 29th, 2014 · · ·

Listening to nightcore while typing, that'll make the review 21% cooler.

I love the concept. You painted the characters next to perfectly in their attitudes and styles. And Discord trying to interact with the mane 6?
GOLD MAN.
GOLD.

Otherwise, I had some slight problems with it.
I saw many grammarical errors, and I recommend finding a good editor.
I know someone who'd edit for you to. Her name is LiVELIfE, look her up.
Also, the text wall was kinda hard to get by, I agree,
That added to the lack of detail that would be much appreciated makes it feel duller then it could.
Slow down a bit. Whats the scene like? What are they doing? Saying? What are their expressions? Are they stomping their hooves exasperatedly? Are they tilting their head thoughtfully? Every word is a work of art.

Otherwise:
Concept: 9/10
Detailing: 5/10
Grammar: 6/10

Overall rating of 7.5!

Remember to contact LiVELIfE! She'd be more then happy to edit for you!
Enjoyed and liked.

Pink Chaos