• Member Since 12th Jul, 2014
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I am a girl who got into My Little Pony Friendship is Magic 4 years ago. And I've finally decided to try and write fanfics, so...yeah. That's about it. If you ever want to talk feel free to PM me.


Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy are marefriends, but, when something goes wrong one night, both ponies must face the consequences. Some would say that Fluttershy suffered more, but, is that really true?

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You don't need to apologise for beautiful writing. :twilightsmile:


Your cover arts are always lovely, too. :heart:


You're welcome. :raritywink:


It was really good, I just wasn't prepared for the feelings.

6200105 Ah, okay. Well, thank you. :twilightblush:

6200911 It's supposed to be sad.

> wow, that pacing
Like, what the hell? Why is shit going down so fast? Let us bathe in the emotions. Paint a fucking picture with your words, goddammit

6200950 Yes it was and did a very good job at it. Oh I still like the story. Most of the "sad" stories do not make sad. So it was a good story to me for making me sad.(squee)

6201102 Oh, okay then. Thanks :twilightsmile:

Don't be sorry. Just do it. Other people dream about success but you're gonna work hard at make it happen.

6201143 Yeah, no. I never rewrite or edit anything I do. Sorry.

What a bullshit idea. "No, thanks, I don't like improving or being better or anything." If you don't want to entertain people (because that's literally what posting on a public forum like this is all about), well, then, you can fuck off.

6201196 I don't write for other people. And you, my dear, can take your shit somewhere else. I don't want to hear it.

Clearly you fucking do write for other people. Because you post it online. How the fuck do you expect me to suspend my disbelief that far?

6201308 I post it online so that people can read it if they so choose. But I have never sat down and written something just for the purpose of doing it for people. Believe me or not, I don't really care, because I know what's true and what isn't.

Sure, man. You just think what you want to think. Clearly you know you better than people who are trained to know people.

6201412 For one thing, I'm female. And yes, I most definitely do know better than you. You've certainly not shown yourself to be anything more than an idiot looking for people to spew your bullshit to.

According to your username, I can assume you're nine. There's that.

6201686 I'm 22. The 2006 is a reference to my little cousin who saved my life once.

Please also note that being a female means nothing on the Internet. And also note that simply asserting you're 'more mature' and calling me an 'idiot' really, REALLY doesn't help your point.

6201707 Never said being female meant anything. I just hate being referred to as 'man'. I never used the words "more mature" either. You're the one reading a bunch of bullshit things into what I say.

So you're just totally ignoring my point and rambling to make yourself feel better?
Look, I'll stop this here. If you don't want people's advice, I suggest keeping your shit in Microsoft Word. And at the least, don't be a little bitch about it.

6202217 I have nothing against advice. My problem is with assholes like you.

You know, I reserve something for people like you. It's under my bookmarked pages, tagged "nose".


6202247 :rainbowlaugh: Keep it that way honey, if it makes you feel better. :rainbowlaugh:

I am intrigued by these comments but wary at the same time.
Should I read or not?
I dont usually read tragedies (way too sensitive for most of them) but should I make an exception here?
Help me

6204799 Uh, well, if you're sensitive to death, then maybe not, but if you like sad sort of romance then you could try it. It's not really up to me what you do. I don't want to force you or anything.

This felt far far too rushed. We have no information or emotions attached to Rainbow Dash's and Fluttershy's relationship. We only get the fight second hand, and it's barely mentioned. The search and funeral are similarly really brief. There is no time given to show the depth of Rainbow's feelings, Fluttershy's reasons for the fight, the horror and fear of searching for a missing Fluttershy, the suffering of being too late to save her, or the mourning of losing her.

6211304 Okay, thanks for the feedback.

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