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Very good.
Nice.
Since FimFiction's a hugbox and I was getting enough of these Chrysalis fictions, I decided to check on one that was NOT romance.
I'll track this one down, this storyline has potential. Better to add dark -tag if needed.
Chryslestia?
Its good. WRITESEQUELWHERECHRYSALISREVEALSHERSECONDPLAN.
493555 It's complete.
Story! Y u complete?!
Oh well, what's there is really well done. Though a Dark tag would be warranted, as it is a pretty violent battle and death is present.
Very nice, seeing chyrs come back would be cool as she was just exiled not truly defeated. Anywho great story thumbs up.
oops, forgot to post the comment i left.
anyway, it was about me praising Celestia getting even. but something more differnet, what this guy BronyReymond has a point, it's sequil wrothy.
EDIT: fixed the W to an M.
EDIT 2: got rid of the "the".
so there is going to be a part2? i really want to see that plan in action
Oh i like this, ever seen a few days after the episode was arid, this site have bean flooded whit chrysalis short story's like this, and to my surprise an overwhelming majority of them shipping/romance story's, whit her found in the forest weekend by her deffet and someone taking her in and helping her etc.. and its already getting old after just a few days,
and to say i never relay accepted her as a good candidate for shipping because of her character/personality displayed in the show, and not to mention her race´s diet, but that may ore may not change in the future.
So when i saw a non romantic story featuring Chrysalis whit i jump at it straight away, and it was a good fun interesting read, the vampiric thing was also an interesting variation from the show.
normally i who´d end this whit "keep the chapters comign" or something along there lines but sens this was short story and your dune whit it,
i'll leave with a job well done instead, and here have a few pinkies
very original (though it bogles the mind that certain Chrysalis stories already have formed cliche's)
also like the cliffhanger ending.
Thanks for all the kind words, guys.
I know there are a LOT of Chrysalis stories out there right now, but I couldn't help myself. After I watched the finale--okay, after I watched it for the third time, this story just got stuck in my head. I wanted to make it go away, but...well, I'm just glad everypony is enjoying it.
And I doubt I write a sequel to it, but you never know. I tend to let these things grow legs in my head... (Might wait for Chrysalis Fever to die down a bit, though, even if I do continue it.)
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Oh, it seems it is. Hurrdurr me.
It was labeled as incomplete when I read it
Even if Chrysalis obviously hadn't just gone insane, I wonder if Celestia appreciates she's sentenced the changelings to a slow death by starvation.
499810 She did gave the queen Changeling choice to live in peace and co-exist with the rest of ponykind, unfortunately, Chrysalis made the wrong choice and made Celestia angry (I doubt the alicorn of the sun will appreciate the harsh decision she has made.)
499810 Then again, no one ever said it has to be STRICTLY pony love they eat.
Oh geeze. I can just see Twilight exposing Chryselestia, and she chases her around the castle half-in half-out of Celestia form. They break out into the main gardens, and everypony holding a party outside the hedge maze looks all shocked and aghast. They panic and begin running around. Chryselestia manages to herd them back into the palace. The guards and Twilight close the door, but then Chryselestia blows it off its hinges, sending them flying. Panting and dripping with exhaustion, with hedgebits everywhere on her chest and back, almost creating a makeshift cloak about her body, she can only think of one thing to shout at the panicked crowd.
"
YOU'RE.....GOING......TO 
LOOOOOOOOOVE 
MEEEEEEEE 
"
I like the explanation you give for her defeat. I just wish it were in the show proper. My initial reaction was pretty ragey. It seemed like such an ass-pull. The show's target audience might have accepted it right off but some old jaded fart like me? Oh yeah, definitely should have had it just blow Chrysalis into the wall instead of far into the forest instead, so Celestia could explain it to her (and us old coots) before sending her on her way all beaten and bruised.
Based on what was revealed of changelings during the episode I fully expected her to just kind of absorb that love blast and be like "...Well? What do you think I was draining off him, hmm?" Maybe I put too much logic into it but I was kind of wondering about that the whole day after.
>>using scientific method of analysis on MAGIC, especially LOVE magic
I am such an egghead.
Okay, now this is Celestia! I... sorta agree with the reasoning on why/how Chrysalis won, but it still sticks in my gut. Seeing Celly take out Sally? Pure. Win.
If the show played violence, I would love it if this were an episode. And in a way, this is cannon to me.
I love the fact that Chrysalis neglected Princess Luna. She's BEEN corrupted, KNOWS her sister, and would recognize the switch in an instant. But yeah, this is a great fic. I wanted to see Celestia kick Chrystina's ass so badly.
one warning and only one for you chrysalus. you can scare and terrify twilight maybe even hurt her but you do not i repeat do not ever try and hurt her loved ones and piss her off otherwise you are looking at the most powerfull magical being ever to exist in equestria save nightmare moon. so be afraid be verry afraid.
That battle was INTENSE!
I was looking for something else when I came upon this story. I am so glad I did. Celestia finally proved she could kick some flank.
I don't know if you plan to write a sequel, but I hope to find out about it if you do.
Emm... Princess? You do realize that this queen is not going to stop coming at Equestria until it's overrun, do you? You had a chance to end her threat once and for all. You had the legitimate legal and moral authority to carry it out on the spot! At least petrify her or something! But no, you count on Queen Chrysalis being 'honorable' enough to adhere to a paperless peace treaty saying she will not attack again.
It's one thing about Equestria upholding ideals of friendship and mercy, it's another to apply to someone who doesn't regret her actions and care less about it.
Let's hope Princess Celestia will uphold her end of the bargain when they foiled Chrysalis' inevitable comeback:
fc03.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/123/6/e/beheaded_by_celestia_by_nightshroud-d4ygk6h.jpg
1002764 I don't see Celestia as a killer. She came there to make a point, and she did. And she couldn't petrify her: that was done using the Elements of Harmony, which she no longer possesses. (Same with the "TO THE MOOOOOON!" trick.) So, she made her point and did what she felt was right.
And on the concept of ideals: as soon as your ideals stop applying to everything as a whole, they are no longer ideals. They become loose guidelines that can be followed when you feel them appropriate. Big difference. Celestia is going to follow her ideals. Chrysalis won't, however. They are fairly diametrically opposed. And that's what makes them good rivals, IMO.
But I guess we will see what happens in the sequel, won't we...
Oh, and one more thing: I LOVE that picture.
1004257 Sorry to disappoint, that pic isn't mine. I liked it too.
...sooooooo... "Round Three", maybe?
1293739 Actually, that's what I'm planning on writing when my current story is finished.
Very well done! I didn't expect a battle scene when I clicked on this. I like the exposition- stories where the thoughts and motivations of characters are expanded upon always interest me.
Now I have to queue up all your other stories, so don't rush on the next set- I'm running out of free tiime here!
Ooh, very nice. TV Tropes brought me here for the epic verbal beatdown, pleasantly surprised to see a physical one too. It does suck since I was planning something similar in a fix/exposition fic. I guess I could go for a World of Cardboard Speech.
Also, neat bit on the changelings doubling as vampires. Now I have ideas for two of my fics! (yes, I have way too many projects for my own good)
Thumbed, shared.
I adore you. You have officially removed about HALF the suckiness of ACW for me!
519134 Pure Win indeed
Alright I searched for this fic after coming across some artwork dipectng Celestia fighting Chrysalis:Celesita and Chrysalis fight, damn this is epic. Yeah I don't see Celestia a killer, or at least not in the cold blooded variety, but do see her doing what she can to protect Equestria even if that means picking up her sword and wielding it against her foes.
Come on Chrysalis, try to call her bluff... I dare ya.
fc08.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/335/2/1/second_round_by_famosity-d5mrfv1.png
1720045. Damn! I like that art. Who did it?
And thanks for the kind words.
1723056 Famosity of Deviantart, have the link n the comment I made before I posted the picture
1724941 DOH!
Yes you do, and I was just too blind to see it. I'm a fan of Famosity's work, already, too, I just hadn't seen this piece yet. Thanks for sharing it!
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Not a problem Nom, happy to share pictures of Celestia being a badass.
I saw next to no plot. Good combat, but that was it. Also, you seemed to switch between the drones being mindless, and them being scared subjects.
1872141 You're right. The plot is very minimal. It's a scene, built on the plot of the wedding episode, and definitely not a stand-alone story. This came about as a mix of me wanting to see something like this happen, and a desire to write an action scene. If I do the sequel--which I most likely will after the current piece I'm working on--it WILL have a plot, though.
The changeling thing, I don't see. Not saying it isn't there, just that I don't see it. But I'll watch for that in the future.
I almost forgot about this little gem.
It's nice to see it again.
2587632. Thank you. I hope to write more stuff like this in the not too distant. Maybe even the oft rumored sequel.
This looks really promising, and I look forward to seeing more.
Celestia and Chrysalis were both in character. And the Changeling hive was very well explored in all it's disgusting glory.
The fight scene was amazing.
Although one thing that really bothered me was how you decided to end this chapter.
You have Chrysalis monolouge her evil plan to the reader. Which is both clunky and a bad move.
It would have been a lot better to just tell us that Chrysalis had an idea, and then ravel in the "genius" of her own scheme. That would create suspension for further chapters. And leave the reader wondering just what this "idea" of hers really was. Not to mention, the delivery on the monolouge itself was a bit clunky.
But all in all, you're off to a good start. I, for one look forward to seeing more.
Very good story.
nice story........... the monologue at the end is flawed. also delusional. it is one thing to replace a young alicorn princess yet to find her place. another to replace a millennium old alicorn who rules the nation and who has Luna at her side at all times. she would see through chrysalis in an instant. for she knows her tricks, and none can truly fool the regent of mystery itself; princess of the night.
through all of this it was like tia couldn't really understand just much dumbluck there was in Chryssie's defeat in Canterlot
Its kind of weird for Celestia to make moral high ground claims about how the changelings are ruled out of fear and why that difference makes Tia the better pony, only to declare that all changelings are to starve to death. It can be argued as necessary but it still is genocide to block the changelings from their food so completely.
4564497 Hmm. Valid point!
4565079 Thank you for taking my comment so well, I dont see that very often on this site.
This story was black and white to the point of pure boredom. A completely simplistic view of the concepts of good and evil. The characters and dialogue are cliche to the max. Celestia was completely OOC (that is more of a personal nag than a critical one) and none of this story was particularly entertaining. Your grammar and spelling was high quality and your descriptions of events through the story were detailed and fluid. 4/10 (just my opinion)