Colgate, Lyra, and Carina are confused at why they are selected to be the Brides mares for an alicorn they barely know, Princess Cadance. After being reassured that they are suited for the role they take part in the usual duties of a Bride Mare.
To their surprise they awaken from a trance while falling into a seemingly bottomless abyss.
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1. Those three were actually changelings; they appeared in the fake wedding.
2. Work on your grammar.
Carina? Is that her name? I've been calling her CottonCandy Mane.
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I just gave her a name, I honestly didn't know and i was finding different names every where
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They never state it, it could be assumed but then again, they could be under a spell like Shining Armor, They had the same green eyes as Shining Armor when we was under the spell... But i just wanted to write a short little FICTION
And in my defense, none of the changelings in their "pony" forms had green eyes
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Well, it is a theory.
Also, you capitalized fiction..You assume that, because it's fictionary, it doesn't need to make sense?
Also, may I suggest you get a pre-reader?
Also, glitch in the desc.
It says 'seemingly bottom abyss', yet the minute Colgate lights up her horn the bottom comes into view.
I'd suggest making it long, and have Lyra and Carina say their goodbyes whilst Colgate powers up a cushioning spell or something.
493437 Fictionary... ficticious... fictional... whatever, anyway making sense doesn't necessarily have to do with it, fanfiction is more about deviation from canon.
Also, 'seemingly bottom abyss' should be probably be fine, it was just seeming.
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probably would be for the better, but i'm going to be out of town for the rest of the week and i honestly just wanted it done.
And last time i ventured to find a pre-reader things just turned ugly.
BTW sorry if i seemed angry, didn't mean to lash out at you, I was just defending my "theory", as you said.
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I apologize too, I'm not in a good mood. Been dealing with a bloody art theif.
As in flaming.
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No,it never SEEMED to be bottomless. Right off the bat they saw the bottom.
493467 Haven't read it yet, should probably shut my trap. XD
Isnt her name Twinkleshine? That's what's in the wiki.
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I don't think so, I think they were just possessed by the Changeling Queen. Think about it; would you question your queen over Rarity's dresses? They had to have not known who Cadence really was, and so are not Changelings.
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It says while they were falling that it was getting darker and darker, but its whatever, i don't care much, i didn't spend long writing it.
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....I didn't want to write twinkle constantly... and Carina is cuter in my opinion.
Carina is a name of a star, lets say its her nickname
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I meant the ponies that attacked Twilight and Cadence were changelings, as Lyra, Colgate and 'Carina' were seen at the fake wedding, but I understand your point.
"Carina" would be the First wave "not mane six" toy Twinkleshine
Good story
I like the name Carina, too.
well this was a sweet little story, and a fun casual read.
here have a few pinkies for a job well dune
As for there names http://mlp.wikia.com says they are called Minuette and Twinkleshine
i don't know if the names are canon or not but i always found that site reliable.
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Well I personally like Colgate much much more than Minuette and the vast majority of people accept Colgate, it's even Colgate on the fimfiction character list...But for twinkleshine or whatever, I just didn't like that name so i decided to give her a name of a star like Lyra.
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i agree whit you there, Minuette really doesn't sound like a name if you ask me (even by pony standards)
and i agree whit you again, twinkleshineis a bit of a mouth full, and i don't really care what they are called, none of them is a character i give a lot of thought.
just thought i would post is sean's you in the story said you didn't know the name.
So that's how you ended it? It was a good enough read, so I'm satisfied.
Anyhow, I should have an edited version of this for you at the end of the week, fixing all (or all that I can find) the grammar mistakes and whatnot. If I haven't, then nag me endlessly on Steam when you get back.
Oh, and have a mustache or two
Oh - one biiiiiiiig mistake in that A.N. there - it says you did know what the pony's name was.
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well, i went to ponywiki, and the name was ... i use this term for lack of a better one "girly" , it was like twinkle shine or something, and i simply didn't like it and there was no importance of that character, so i simply chose to name it after a star since her "real" name related to stars... so forgive me for naming her something different
689909 Oh, right. I get it.