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What if Fluttershy was able to raise a certain dragon that did not come from their world but far away from the Island of Berk? Let us say that dragon was none other than the infamous Night Fury. This is one of my first fan fictions I am doing of Fluttershy, I will update this story as often as I can and when I have the time to.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 152 )

Hmm... interesting concept although the paragraphs are slightly long (in my opinion) and so far no mistakes. You have a thumb and track good sir.

good story so far

uh is it wonder into ponyville or is it wander

492168 If your talking about a landmark then wonder. If your talking about walking into a place then it's wander.

She is legion! For she is many pegasi!

Lol, pegasi is plural pegasus.

A good thing to get would be an editor. While most of the mistakes are either grammatical, or spelling, you are doing a good job. Little note: If you have two different people talking in the same paragraph, its wrong. Go and create a new one when another person(Or Pony) speaks in the story.

I think it's pretty cute so far. I'm looking forward to seeing more chapters.

Ooh, I like the idea. I shall read this when I can. :pinkiehappy:

"In the beautiful country-side of Ponyville, near the edge of the Everfree Forrest, there lived a beautiful yellow Pegasi "

Singular is Pegasus

flutters + baby night fury = so much daaaaawwww

While I like the story idea (so much D'awwww!) it could use editing, as has been pointed out. Tracking for potential. :twilightsmile:

BLARGH! FOILED AGAIN! Somepony else beat me to this crossover Idea. How to train your dragon is one of my favorite movies, and this isn't a bad fic. Polish it up a little and add a few more chapters, you'll be good to go.

*Sees picture* Huh... is that..? IT IS! *Squee's* TOOTHLESS!! I LOVE YOU!~ *Insta-favs*

Pretty big fan of the movie, definitely keeping my eyes on this.

I want more of this amazing fanfiction


Sincerely the Doctor

Awesome idea. :twilightsmile:
But, as others have said, could use editing.

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Alright, I'll do some editing, though this week and the next will be a little busy for me, since its my finals week, but I have been working on the next chapter, I have it written out. I just need to type it all out...but education first :derpytongue2:

:scootangel:Sorry for taking so long, I'm finally done with the next chapter, I am going to add more chapters to this series as well as start up a different series.

Another toothless? fate has cursed him with that name so many times...

Curse your story! It has given me a HNNNNNGGG attack! It's too cute for its own good!

The little dragon shacks his head

1. Shake.

I really wonder how this is going to turn out for little Fluttershy.:twilightsmile:

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:derpyderp1:There fixed, I always get those two words mixed up and I usually don't notice those small problems, thank you.
Believe me, Fluttershy is going to be amazed when she finds out:scootangel:

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Some where around later today, My mind is else where of all places :derpytongue2:

i like this, for 1k words it seems so short xD

A few weeks past
and no one else
tried to keep her composer

1. Passed.
2. This... i'm not so sure since Spike is the one speaking though shouldn't it be nopony?
3. Composure.

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Thank you, once again I do need some pony to look over my grammar and see if I'm using the right words to describe every detail to look professional. :twilightsheepish:

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Of course, I've just been so busy this weekend, finding a new tabletop game store along the way got me distracted :derpytongue2::derpytongue2:

I'll be sure to upload another chapter by Monday Night, the latest or Sunday Night the Earliest.
Confound those Cthulhu Mythos...Messing around in Arkham...:twilightangry2::rainbowdetermined2:

It seems every story where Fluttershy is the main character on this site is a story about shipping her. This is what I've noticed lately. This makes me sad, so I love to read a story with Fluttershy in it where it's just a nice story to read. Good work, keep it up.:yay:

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Thank you, I try my best to not make this another clop story, plus I'm in the process of making a brand new story about a different pony. I'm glad you like it and hope you find other stories out there to your liking. :pinkiehappy:

nice story so far but eh what is this a crossover about?

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Its about Toothless from How to Train a Dragon

His not used to having other ponies around him and with Rarity bringing over a jeweled-encrusted dress to show.
Fluttershy, are you quiet alright, did you run all the way here?
Sleep well Toothless, later I’ll bring you some tasty
She uses her magic to retrieve
He didn’t mean to hurt anyone, I swear

1. He is
2. Quite.
3. Umm... unfinished? Or did you mean Something tasty?
4. Did you mean to tell this sentence in present tense or past?
5. Anypony.
6. Quite a few of your dialogues don't end with a comma (,). Just letting you know.

693691 Yeah man, it's cool I can't read shipping about Fluttershy and I can't even think about clop involving her, or other ponies for that matter.:pinkiesick: You have a cool story here..:pinkiehappy:

693705 Can i borrow Toothless when you done with him, I've always wanted a pet dragon and everytime i read a new chapter, I d'awww at him:raritystarry:

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Sure, I think he wont mind if you take him off her hooves for a while. :pinkiehappy:

I will be updating around Tuesday before I'm off on my vacation, rest assured I am still around, just finished with a comic convention that was in town for the weekend :derpyderp1:

Ok I finally got chapter 5 out, sorry if it doesn't flow as good as the other chapters, I have so much to do and so little time to myself with my summer job comming up, planning for a trip, and getting ready for a new series I'm going to set up...ugh:applejackconfused::derpyderp1:
but its all worth it in the end, Hope you like the chapter. :fluttershysad:

Both spend the day playing with each other and enjoying the bright sun behind the cover of her cottage.
“Uh no officer, I haven’t seen anything ‘suspicious’ going around here, its all quite, hehe, you don’t have to worry about a thing,”
he jumped from Fluttershy’s arms and ran around the library in excitement

1. Spent.
2. Quiet.
3. Arms? Where did those come from?

?: Did somepony say ARMS?!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra2.png

Me: GAHH! Run before she clamps onto you like a head crab but on your arm!!

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Huh, that does sound strange, what do you think I should put instead of arms?:derpyderp1:

735402 Technically your sentence said he jumped out of Fluttershy's hooves but there was no transition from the saddle bag to her hoof, just opening the bag. Did Toothless teleport?

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Oh sorry about that, I should write in there that he got out of the bag instead of Fluttershy picking him up and placing him in her hooves, ugh...:unsuresweetie:

had to confront her fears of dragon’s once and for all…
Should just be dragons, not dragon's. Great fic you have here.:pinkiehappy:

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Oh right, uggh...:applejackconfused:this is what happens when you don't get enough sleep ponies, thanks :raritystarry:

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