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LocalWriteDrone


I write stuff for anon, and some stuff on my own time.

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If this way my story, i would write a few chapters developing the character as she is and then having a cure for her disease since she has gotten so use to the she is, she has a hard time choosing to stay the same of be cured. My opinion of course

I also suffer from a light fit of trypophobia from time to time and I just have to say. Despite that I actually really enjoyed this story.
I would enjoy reading more chapters should you decide to continue this story.

This is my fetish now.

Wow
I need more of this
I love this story, and not just the clop

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Despite being unsure to continue it or not, I already have a large plan of how the story would go in the future. Admittedly it wouldn't be a cure though, but I have some crazy twists on the drawing board.


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I'm glad you enjoyed it, the reception being mostly positive has definitely been unexpected but I'm glad this one is resonating pretty well so far.


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It's definitely a unique one, may win you a few 'weird fetish' contests.


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Another positive response, and from Goofy himself no less, hm, may have to get a chapter 2 in the works...

Wow, that's very particular, still it was interesting.
I have some doubts about the proofreading, the use of past and present tenses is very confusing.
Most of the time you use present in past scenes and vice versa. Some sentences even have both tenses.

And finally, there is a lot of stallion, no need to search them in ponyville anymore, they're all in the hospital.

I like this. It's unique.

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Eh, 2 stallions, 1 mare, I don't think it's that off. And yeah, since this was meant to be a oneshot I admit I got a bit ambitious. I need to reread it, my goal was to keep it present tense both in the future and the past, with the goal being to make the reader have to jump between times as well, keeps an erratic, unsettling pace. That was the idea anyways, the only time I intentionally used past tense would be direct recaps when Spindle is reflecting when months pass at a time. I'll try and get it edited up after work to make sure all the tenses add up. Thanks for the compliments and critique.


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Unique is definitely what I was aiming at so thank ya much.

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Do you have plans on continuing this?

The first hole was still extremely, extremely packed and it would probably take three nurses to force you to keep from filling up forever

Um...What?

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At this point I'm probably gonna do a second chapter, and as for what you quoted: That is a fine example as to why writing a story strictly on lunch breaks at two in the morning over the course of two weeks is a terrible idea.

I underped that sentence a bit, thanks for letting me know.

Fuck, I looked up Trypophobia...
:pinkiesick:

Now I have to read this...:raritydespair:

:pinkiecrazy:

Read the original manga a while ago, read a couple paragraphs of this story..

This is much darker..I could not finish it...:pinkiesick:

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I was kinda worried about that, people seeing the content warning and looking it up. That's why I made the portrait drawing so undetailed to give the reader an idea what they were in for without being brutally explicit/gross. Hope you enjoyed the story anyways.

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There's a manga called Contagious? That also deals with trypophobia? I had no idea, being completely honest here. Any similarities are entirely unintentional. Also, I know the story opens up kinda dark but I'd recommend trying to stick with it a bit, even in the first chapter it lightens up towards the end and it really isn't going to be that grim and depressing as it progresses.

Interesting...following for the idea. Written very well, but the constant scene changing is a bit annoying.

I have a strange form of Trypophobia. Like, seeing holes on a kitchen sponge or one of those hard rock shower things, or like, sitting too long wierdly on a chair that patterns form on your skin, is like, no reaction at all But. for example, there's a species of frog/toad that sets it's eggs on it's back, and they sink into it's back and eeuuugh oh god I can't stand looking at it and I feel like I'm going to have nightmares about it. I can't stand things like that. I don't know if it's like a subset of Trypophobia or a mild condition or what, but god it's scary sometimes.

Alright, I'll admit it. I read this story, but I have absolutely no idea why I actually did it.

However I didn't find this story nearly as disturbing as I thought it might be at first. Granted the disease has the potential to be terrifying since nothing is known about it, but it didn't give me any disturbing sensations that made me uncomfortable to even be in my own skin.

And now it's time for things to actually start crossing the line. Are the holes sensitive to something like the wind blowing through them? Or do they produce a whistling sound if that happens?

Um wow was not that bad I came here seeing the warning and I was shiting myself read it and i was like "aaaaawwwww" :rainbowkiss: its sad and it made me wont to do sonething for the mare like pat her mane and tell her itll be ok
anyway now thats over I'll love to see more
Fav like IMO

This trypophile dragon approves!

Also, I didn't think that my fascination with these holes could be sexual...and thanks to you now I know it can be.

((Apologies if that came off as disgusting))

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> Came here expecting weird porn
> Found a pretty sad story with a good storyline

my brain is processing this story too fast, all i got out of this as of now is she grew demon vajayjays and had half her body skeletonized

......This is madness... depraved on a level I'm not sure I've witnessed before... the sickness of it baffles the very depths of basic decency.....

May I re-purpose this idea for a commercial dark-fantasy setting I write for?

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