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Logic Flip


One, I'm a Denver native. Two, I love combining things that don't go together. Like toothpaste and Orange juice. Also my alias is Tsu Doh Nim

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Where there is treachery, find loyalty.
When there is hate, be kind.
Where there are lies, find honesty.
Where there is greed, be generous.
Where there is sadness, find laughter.
When there is magic, there is the Force.—Ditzy Doo, to her daughters two days before her death.


It was raining when we buried mom. Sparkler and I with the help of the priest, Time Turner wrapped her in a white shroud and carried her to the cemetery.

Her name was Dtizy Doo.

It had surprisingly easy to lift her. Pegasus ponies were light by nature but I never imagined that mom would have been this easy to pick up even with the help of Mr. Time Turner and my sister. When she was alive she seemed larger than life itself. The sickness that killed her somehow made her…less. Even her tattoos had faded ever so slightly.

Now…

Now she just seemed so small. The mare who had worked her fingers to the bone, who smiled in spite of everything, who taught me, taught my sister, was just too light.
I can still remember when she first started coughing.

It’s probably nothing, my little muffin. I’m just a little under the weather. It’ll pass.

Only it didn’t.

The burial took place at the poor and destitue ponies’ graves in a walled-off section behind the church, away from the main plots of land. It was there that we dug her grave in the water logged clay. It took no time to dig one big enough.

There was no coffin. We couldn’t afford one for her.

I had thought, during that funeral, that life couldn't possibly get any worse.

The next day I was proven wrong.

Note: Inspired by this and this and some other fanfic on fimfiction that I can't find right now.

Thanks to Autumn Forest for collaborating and editing the first chapter with me.

Cover art done by this brilliant guy

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 15 )

HOW COME NO ONE HAS COMMENTED ON HOW GOOD THIS IS!?!?!?! :flutterrage:

Seriously, I think this is an awesome little piece and I look forward to MORE! :pinkiehappy:

5443759 Thank you. I'm glad you like it.

Again, this was very enjoyable! Your pacing and characterizations are also pretty good! There are some grammer mistakes but nothing outlandishly bad. All in all I look forward to the next chapter even more now! :pinkiehappy:

Again, a little work on your editing and your solid! If I could like again I would, just hope more people find this

Very good story im glad ;-)

HA! Rainbow Dash is pretty much Asajj Ventress

5535912 YES! YES! YES!:pinkiegasp: You're the first person to figure it out! :pinkiehappy:

5535912 I wanted Rainbow to play a Ventress-like character role.

HOW THE HELL DID I MISS THIS!!!!

5564603 If you're talking about the chapter, I have no clue, dear.

You know..... making a Flashback Chapter at this point is evil and just torture? If this war don't play a big role in the main story, and could be explained in some small Flashback scenes then pleas make it this way, or write a side story. reading two separated story lines in the same story is just not funny. But if this things and Character of the past have an impact on the actual story line, then i say... go fore it, but don't focus to much on them.
But this story is just great, so i hope to see more of an actual chapter soon ^^.

5564800 Trust me when I say that the Flashbacks have relevance to the main story. While it will sometimes focus on other characters more often than not these other characters WILL have relevance to the main plot. There will even be flashback chapters of our main cast. If there is a side story, it will be a completely different thing.

5564800 And the Caribou Wars play an important part in the story.

5564853 well then it is great ^^.
Just to say it, i only know of the movies of star wars, so i maybe ask some time some questions ^^.

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