I! LIKE! BUGS! And that's mostly what you need to know. Oh yeah I write things sometimes. If I'm lucky.
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After a magical spell gone wrong (God, another?) Twilight inadvertantly summons a strange creature to Equestria. The creature is different than it remembers, with wings and a newfound aptitude for electromagic. Is there something sinister behind the change? And when the time comes, will the creature wield it's powers for Equestria? Or against it? And just what are Spellblooms, anyway?
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oh twilight how many times do you screw up this has got to be the 1000000000th dimension were you're spell has gone wrong SERUS GET UR SELF TOGETHER
In light of so many mistakes on our preferred purple pony's behalf, isn't it time we started a new theory for accidental inter-dimensional transfer? I mean,
could easily punch a hole through time and space, seeing as she can refract light AT WILL. I'm also sure that 
could have some use or other for a human. Lap dog? Meat Shield? Permanent Horseshoe Polisher? Our creativeness is endless people!! Can we stop dicking around with poor 
's feelings, I'm sure in reality she would never allow such a mishap to occur. Give someone else the blame people!
Very good. When i first saw this i thought, great another person trying to write but messing it up. If the story was bad i was going to eat a cactus, but it was good, so i wont.
Me likee... Me likee very much.
491966 Hah, yeah, Twilight does get all the flak for accidental interdimensional transfers, doesn't she. Which is why I tried to think of better, but non pinkie pie fourth wall breaking explanations, and came to the conclusion that I assume most people do, which is: "Wait, why do I need to explain anything? I can just say that a freaking purple wizard unicorn did it!" Cheap, but darn useful.
And on a different note, thanks for the comments, guys! I honestly wasn't expecting anything this fast! Thanks!
Wait...
Oh darn it I have to write more stuff now.
Well, I better get to it!
Sounds good so far, but there is one small problem. There isn't a second chapter yet!
492883 Daaaw, thanks! I'm actually working on that as we speak! Uh. Type. By the way I am totally not going back to this this page all the time to check for comments! What gave you that idea?
492799 next time just say there was a rift in the time dimension that caused a proton portal to open......
If you think about it, the vast majority of stories that have a character from one reality end up in another use some kind of accident to do so. A spell misfires, the Bermuda Triangle claims another victim, a bunch of kids stumble into the wrong wardrobe...the works.
Narratively that makes sense. After all, most of those stories wouldn't work nearly as well if the castaway(s) could simply go back home anytime they liked and leave the plot behind, so having the circumstances that enabled them to cross the dimensional boundaries something that can't be easily replicated on purpose makes for an effective way of slamming that particular door shut on them. But yeah, it can get a bit repetitive if you see it too often...and it just so happens that dimensional crossovers are among the more popular types of FiM fanfiction plot, practically ensuring you'll run into them on this site on a regular basis.
You have my attention! Looks like it's going to be good.
Finally! A girl in Equestria! It's always guys, so I'm curious to see how a girl would react to being placed in a cartoon world that is targeted towards little girls. (Note: My Little Pony's target audience is younger children, mainly girls. Its story is geared so the rest of the family doesn't have to suffer whilst watching it. NOT that bronies can't watch it, it was just originally created for the aforementioned audience)
Interesting. Are her wings like that of the Changelings? Because that's what I'm seeing. And it looks cool.
Interesting story so far. I only have a few problems (only about the format). First, while it isn't a "wall o' text", it's still connected. Try to double space in between paragraphs. And indent. That helps too. Your writing style is good, just the massive amount of text looks better if it's in chunks, instead of the interconnected blob you have here.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
494479 Well, up until I googled it just then I had no idea what a "Changeling"'s wings actually looked like. So, they probably don't, sorry. But, hey, imagine what you like, who am I to restrict you? I personally I was imagining a dragonfly's wings, or maybe wasp's wings, and couldn't make up my mind. Oh, and about that formatting issue, I will try to do that, but what I see on my screen sometimes ends up different when I finish it. Thankyou for the constructive criticism!
Argh that formatting. MEIN EYES!
494685 Yeah yeah, hilarious. I'm working on it.
There! Should be okay, Now. Is it?
My god, I just published the second chapter. How? I'll never know. Let me know what you think, guys and gals, and if you think I should unpublish it and work on it a bit more, say so!
Good chapter! Did not find any mistakes or grammatical errors.
As for the name, how about: Barbara Skye?
494856 NO! NO UNPUBLISH!
It's a great story, and this chapter is equally great!
About the name. I think we need a better background for that. Nationality, hobbies, likes, dislikes etc. I like to name my characters based upon their characterization and personality. But that's just me.
If you're looking for something off the top of my head, there's Aria, Arya, Evangeline (Eva for short), Iris, Alma, Kat and Luka.
That's all I got. Last names are up to you. I like it when the first and last names have some sort of co-relation.
EDIT: Good job with the formatting! Much easier on the eyes!
Well, commenters, (Thanks!) favouriters, (thanks twice!) and my two watchers, (Thanks thrice!) I am about to embark upon an amazing journey with this next paragraph. It will take guts and determination, but sometimes, you just got to work with what you have. I will travel into the terrifying world of...characterisation. Or at least, I hope I will, unless I chicken out. Wish me luck!
(Bird scene) And that ladies and gents, is why most creatures flee at the sight of a human.
Enjoyment factor is still going strong , and I haven't seen anything bad standing out yet so keep em coming :-) . Got to admit I'm looking forward to the encounter scene. Human/sentient race interaction is a big favorite of mine in stories(which might explain why I don't wander to far outside of the HiE section of the site).
ponies>THE HORROR
me>
luv ur story man
its very interesting and i think this deserves a favorite 
Dragon vs. Slyph. Dis' gon b gud!
That author's note about not meeting the ponies might not be a joke though...there is that whole matter of the giant dragon following her. She might just end up like that bird she ran into...
On a lighter note, I'm interested what her transformation really did to her. You kinda hinted that the gem has something to do with the lightning, but she did the fire thing before she ever found it, so who knows. And since she's more or less a "fairy", she might have the typical fairy affinity for enchantment and illusion. Though, the fire and lightning makes it seem more likely that she'll be more of an evoker.....
now I want more updates....the curiosity is killing me! Killing me I tell you
!
501060 Well, the part with the torch was supposed to be short range foreshadowing of a sort, indicating her lightning powers. I reasoned that electricity could probably set something alight. She wasn't meant to have any fire powers.
...or was she! Got to keep you on your toes, after all! can't make it too easy!
And don't worry, I'm working on chapter 4 right now. I should probably take a days break or something, but you guys' comments and favourites just keep on spurring me on! I have been writing non-stop for 3 days, now! But I won't quit!
499817 Yeah, I too love human/sentient interaction! It's interesting too see how the races view eachother, and it's what originally drove me to write this fic. I was supposed to have human pony interaction in this chapter, but I postponed it. There will be some, though, it wouldn't be MLP without any! It would be, uh, MLH! Or MLS, in this case.
And thank you to everyone else! You are the Red Bull to my hours of studying!
P.S: Looking back through the comments, I saw someone ask about ethnicity. This totally slipped my mind, as it didn't seem that important. However, to set things straight, I always see her as English (Or British, if you like) just like me! Of course, if you care about that at all you can imagine her as whatever you like! Your imaginations are a wonderful thing; they let me be lazier!
Well, at least to me she seems like a gaming Girl
for the name: what about Mia?
503932 Gaming girl? How so?
Okay...I just noticed that there are more favourites than likes on this story. How is this possible? How can this be one of your favourites, but you don't like it?
P.S: Hey, that's two rainbow dash emoticons in a row. I guess you could say it's a DOUBLE RAINBOW ALL THE WAY! Predator20 out.
New chapter up!
Not that anyone will be up at this ungodly hour, but, hey. It makes me feel good about myself. Makes a chapter release seem more official, you know?
Anyway, I'm going to get some much needed (and I hope much deserved) sleep. Predator20 out.
504716 I only get 30 minutes of sleep
it is only 8:30 here so im up.
When we get a new chapter? I really enjoy this!
Just what I needed to distract me from studying for final exams
3:00 am, school day
Worth it.
505515 I appreciate that you like my story, but I hope you got some sleep! It's really annoying to wake up really tired and know that you have school!
504976 I just posted a new chapter yesterday! I can't write any faster!
You know, I think my competitive edge is showing. I look around this site and see a really good fanfic, read it, and think : "Yeah, that was great! I can't wait for the next chapter!". And then I look at the views and likes, and get all depressed, as my little fanfic looks so small next to it. And then I realise: it doesn't matter. It doesn't matter how many views the other fanfics have gotten, how many likes. Because my readers, are the best readers, ever. And I love you all. Yes, even you, 4 dislikers. Thank you so much, everyone, for giving me the motivation needed to continue this. It just brightens up my day hearing the ping of an alert reading: "X has favourited Enlightening Circumstances".
Well, now that thought is out of the way, I better continue with the new chapter. Thanks a lot for reading this!
read later making own language
'So sorry about the appalling delay for this chapter,'
Wait ? Delays? i havent seen any delays, quite frankly you update fast, and i really like the speed for updates to show up :)
OK so question, was she just delirious and did not understand Fluttershy, or
is Fluttershy actually speaking an entirely different language?
514565 i umm.... I AGREE WITH CLAPPIE
Clappie has it right. Where do you get the idea that you are a slow updater? You update faster than most writers, with quality as well.
The story is great, but for the language barrier, here's some advice that applies to just about everything in writing.
PLAN AHEAD
Make sure you know what will happen so it doesn't seem like it's just slammed together and duct taped. Even though duct tape fixes everything, it still looks ugly.
Not that I have a problem with the language barrier idea, just make sure you're prepared.
504123
Regarding the favorites vs. likes issue, it's probably in part a matter of simple functionality. The "favorites" list can be meaningfully used as "read later, only with added auto-notify when a new chapter goes up", and I can't be the only one who occasionally does just that.
So in my case at least, "favorite" status for this particular story simply means it has my interest for the time being. The jury's still out a bit on whether it'll eventually rate a "like".
514632 It's another language. I have always thought that when we watch the show, it's translated from "Equestrian" or whatever the language is called, as I think it's a bit unreasonable to think that another world/universe would speak exactly the same language as us.
514916 Could you elaborate, please? This sounds like constructive criticism to me, and I'm all for that! Duct tape? What do you mean? Is this some secret writers language?
What should I plan ahead for?
516439 And thank you for that! I thought it might be something along those lines, so I was half joking when I posted that. And I'll have to work hard to win you over!
516596 I'm not trying to be a critic. What I'm saying applies to just about every plot tool in existence. Maybe not the language barrier specifically, though.
Planning ahead means making sure the transition from the story now and the story ten chapters from now is smooth and that it . . . the best example I'm getting is like a puzzle. Each piece fits snugly and you don't have to force any of them in place. Make sure if it's going to be a long story, that the conflict is diverse, that it's not the same routine with different bad guys.
The duct tape thing is like this. A bad story idea/plot advancement tool is like a bad pipe. Weak and full of holes, which are hastily duct taped with cheap, ugly facts that the characters pull from nowhere. A good story idea/ plot advancement tool is like a good, strong pipe. Smooth, sturdy, and carries the flow of the readers interest to the end of the story.
I didn't mean to sound like a critic. I really, truly like your story and can't wait for it to continue.
517919 Aw, I didn't mean critic in a bad way! I just meant that I always want advice and cynicism to keep me on track! If anything, it shows the readers care enough to offer the writer advice. And that last comment did help me, actually, thanks! And I'm glad that you like the story, I'll keep the things you have said in mind! But no worries on the planning ahead front-I have always been doing that! I keep in my mind specific events and points, and the general direction of the story that I want to happen, then write in the gaps to make it flow. I admit that I do worry about the flow of my writing sometimes, but I suppose that that is just something that comes with practice.
518101 Very nice. I have problem with flow too. "is it too fast?", "too slow?" stuff like that.
518554 I personally have a problem with word choice and order. Like, it's either: With anguish in her voice, Alice exclaimed: "Bob's dead!" or: "Bob's dead!" Alice exclaimed, with anguish in her voice. Or something like that. It's so difficult!
518659 That drives me up the wall. I always second-guess myself while I'm writing. "Did I use that word too much?" is one of the most annoying questions to ever exist.
...in the comments section.
...darn.
I need MOAAAAAAAAAAAAAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
continue please or you will make fluttershy cry.