A simple Hearth's Warming Eve for Rainbow Dash changes her life forever after a series of tragic events.
Dedicated to my father, may he rest in peace.
Big thank you to Kiwi-Poo, Sean, Pinkemena and Shadowstar for all having a helping hand in making this.
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I think it's pretty good.
A funny quote would be like "I'll see you in hell"
Wow, not too bad at all. A few grammatical issues scattered throughout, but overall pretty good!
Noooooo Dinky!!!!!
490507
You got that quote from the song Runaway by P!NK, didn't you?
490616
Starwars actually but yeah [I know both references]
Oh bloody hell, when you said "a series of tragic events" you weren't lying! (The state of Derpy's house is... worrying, and implies more than you directly say, you evil git - and the same with the garden back at Scootaloo's...)
490933 Guess you're reading more into it. Also yes, I am an evil git.
490548 Could you maybe point a few of them out for me?
Just one question; where's Rarity? Couldn't Rainbow be so lonely she could force a visit to her?
Wow, this is a MAJOR improvement, even though the old story kicked flank as it was. Keep it up, man!
494681 damn I didn't think of that. I'll put it in in a later edit.
497755
It's really good otherwise! Keep writing!
497809 Yep, the third chapter should be up by friday. You should fave so you can see it. Thanks though
497822
Fav'd!
497838 Thanks, can I ask you something. Do you reckon I should submit this to EQD? I submitted the first version of it, which lead me to do the rewriting. But I don't know if I should send this version in just yet and use the second of my three strikes, leaving me only one more try.
497842
I've yet to read all of it, I had to stop after about 2/3 of the way through the first chapter (school and such), but as soon as I give the rest a read, I'll give you my personal opinion. But so far, I'm really liking it!
497857 Thanks mate, I'll see what you think then wait for my editor to come back from where ever the hell he is to make one final check for grammar mistakes, then I'll submit it.
497871
Sounds good.
497881 Have you read it all yet? If so tell me what you think
I noticed a couple spelling mistakes, but hey no one is perfect
But also the fic is well written. Well done
Dude, that was pretty awesome. I am a huge fan of HiE fics (or what ever they're called
) and this is hitting the spot. Keep up the updates! Those end-of-chapter cliffhangers make me want to make one of my friends into a cupcake! 
499050 Where may I ask?
499051 Thanks mate
But can I ask, what's a HiE fic? I just wrote this as a sadfic, so I'm not sure what you mean.
From Chap 1
" “And, dinner is ready!” shouted Kristy from the kitchen."
You forgot the T
From Chap 2
“Come on Dinky, wake up for mommy!"
You meant an O, right?
499065
I'm not entirely sure myself, I think it's a sad fic or something, I know that's what they called MLD and Memoriam and all that jazz.
499073 Oh silly me, I'm a Brit you see, and we write mom and mommy with a u instead of an o, I changed most of them but I guess I didn't see that one. Will go in and fix them now, as well as adding in why Rainbow couldn't visit Rarity.
499079 Just say a sadfic, it's easier to understand. But yeah, this isn't even the beginning of the depression, there is a LOT more to come.
499089
Great... Slendy likes depression...
499119 But you're NOT Slenderman? Colour me confused!
499122
What, who said Slender Man was honest? I'm no Applejack, mind you
499133
I've had some bad run ins with ol' Slendy, one involving a cactus. Wasn't very nice. So I'm going to keep my eye on you 
Oh, okay. I won't keep an eye on you, because I don't have any eyes.
497871 I'm reading it ASAP
499051 And I believe HiE stands for Humans in Equestria
499837
Oh, okay. I wasn't sure, so thanks for telling me. So, in that case, this is nowhere near being an HiE
Wow, I really like the first chapter. I do have one small thing, however. I feel like the whole argument at the table being brought up, and Scootaloo running away thing could be a paragraph or two longer. It's just a tiny bit sudden when Scoot runs away. Other than that, though, I really like it! Good writing, excellent imagery, yeah, not much else to say about the first chapter.
Oh, wow I like the small hints that things aren't as they seem, such as the state of Derpy's house, and the gardens at Scoot's and Derpy's. I assume you'll be revisiting the whole Scootaloo situation though?
500206 Yep I'm gonna elaborate on that with a conversation later in the fic.
500166 Well that scene was longer before editing, but we decided to take a lot out since it was a sudden change in perspective from Rainbow's to Scootaloo's. Something I'm only gonna do over whole chapters, not just paragraphs.
502026
Makes sense. Can't wait to see it develop!
Dat cliffhanger
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Oh shit.
Chapter 3?
505015 you shall find out what happens to dinky in chapter 3. Which shall be out soon! Did you like it though?
506635
First of all, you probably killed Dinky.
Second of all there are no Fedoras, Fedoras are cool and I demand
one be in this story.
It shall be decided by Dinky's fate.
506798 That just gave me an idea. Later in the fic Rainbow meets the man from the painting in chapter 1, he shall be wearing a fedora.
Chapter 3 will tell you what happens to Dinky, it's not good.
FIRST ON CH.3! Great story, favourite at this moment. So much oppurtunities here my friend
.
529425 Next chapter preview, the title is "Sharing a Drink Called Loneliness". You can work out what it's about.
529430
Brilliant. Can't wait for the rest.
Come on everypony
Cry cry cry
Fill my heart up with
Gloom gloom...
Surprised none of the fillies turned up at the funeral though.
Good thing that Dash had actually managed to contain herself when she herad Derpy's "parents" comment and reminded herself that Derpy actually needed her support more than ever, if not for sheer respect for Dinky and all the resting souls in the graveyard, because if not, there's little to no doubt that teeths would had flown and bones would have been completely broken beyond repair
532770 Thanks for that comment because it has just gotten me a BRILLIANT idea for something in the next chapter. Lets just say Rainbow Dash won't let that comment go.